hi all, have a listen

The TrenD · 11-18-2005, 06:14 PM

hi everyone,

just i'd thought i would ask you to have a listen to a few tracks of mine, recorded very simple..just me and my acoustic (nothing flash).. i have posted a few of the lyrics on this forum..so just thought i would give you the chance and give me some feedback, would appreciate it..i'm no pro..just love music and having a go..

check me out on

www.myspace.com/theelasticband

i have had some good feeback for "a song about laurel", have a listen

thanks

stephen thomas

River_of_Eyes · 11-18-2005, 08:56 PM

I want to say I think you sound like you have a speech problem.

Hmm.

Sorry...critique.

origami · 11-18-2005, 10:46 PM

woooooooooo harsh

mate there was no need.

i think your songs are cute. ...................

River_of_Eyes · 11-18-2005, 11:36 PM

I’m just sharing my opinion.

Sorry again. I just saw a need.

The TrenD · 11-19-2005, 12:34 AM

oh river of eyes
how lonely and sad, your life
oh river of eyes
bet you wake up miserable, full of strife

oh river of eyes
why dont u understand, just have ago
or river of eyes
why, maybe not, your too slow

you can put me down
but i'll stand up
why u frown
you, just shut up

oh river of eyes
say your last goodbyes
oh river of eyes
smell like ****, full of flies

you can put me down
but i'll stand up
why u frown
you, just shut up

get a life loser, there is enough twats in the world, nice to know i have met another one in you

River_of_Eyes · 11-19-2005, 01:06 AM

Do you feel good that you just wrote a witty little ditty; a sad attempt at burning a 15 year old?

Do you not like criticism? Then don’t post your songs on the internet please.

Your ‘poem’ looks like that of one written on construction paper in crayon, stapled onto a bulletin board in a 2nd grade classroom.

Exactly how long did it take to write it?

Again, I’m sorry. I’m just expressing my opinion. The guitar in the song is beautiful. I liked it a lot. Your voice, however, I did not like (and if you do seriously have a speech problem, well then, I feel like a big douche, and I apologize). I can’t sing, so therefore I do not post my songs on the internet for others to flame.

Oops.

No harm done.

Cali · 11-19-2005, 04:27 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by The TrenD

get a life loser, there is enough twats in the world, nice to know i have met another one in you

twat you can post but S****horpe gets censored!!!!!

http://eskimofriends.com/forum/showthread.php?t=8644

origami · 11-19-2005, 10:07 AM

woooo really dont want to be involved in this..........................................its not a good thing.

Tommy · 12-08-2005, 04:48 PM

Firstly, thread maker, there is zero point in posting a song then moaning when someone negitavally criticises it, thats the whole point so you can find out whats weak and try and improve it.

Secondally the song i listened to (the first one) was ok, got a little repetitive and the vocals were too low and muddy for my liking, but a sound effort anyhow.

Edit : Just listened to ''lets pretend'' and the vocal muddyness is again more prominent, it sounds like your forcing your voice to sound like someone else and not letting your natural tone come through, i used to do the same, at the moment it sounds strained.

11-18-2005, 06:14 PM	#1
The TrenD Eskimo Baby Join Date: Mar 2005 Posts: 2	hi all, have a listen hi everyone, just i'd thought i would ask you to have a listen to a few tracks of mine, recorded very simple..just me and my acoustic (nothing flash).. i have posted a few of the lyrics on this forum..so just thought i would give you the chance and give me some feedback, would appreciate it..i'm no pro..just love music and having a go.. check me out on www.myspace.com/theelasticband i have had some good feeback for "a song about laurel", have a listen thanks stephen thomas

11-18-2005, 08:56 PM	#2
River_of_Eyes Eskimo Baby Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 3	Your songs I want to say I think you sound like you have a speech problem. Hmm. Sorry...critique.

11-18-2005, 10:46 PM	#3
origami fitz Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: edinburgh Posts: 102	woooooooooo harsh mate there was no need. i think your songs are cute. ................... __________________ If i loose a sequin here and there, more salt than pepper in my hair, can i rely on you? when all the songs are through, to be for me the everthere (¯`v´¯) `.¸.´ ¸.•´¸.•¨) ¸.•¨) (¸.•´ (¸.•´ .•´ ¸¸.•¨¯`•.'Starr¸.·´¯)

11-18-2005, 11:36 PM	#4
River_of_Eyes Eskimo Baby Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 3	Hmm I’m just sharing my opinion. Sorry again. I just saw a need.

11-19-2005, 01:06 AM	#6
River_of_Eyes Eskimo Baby Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 3	Whoa...calm yourself Do you feel good that you just wrote a witty little ditty; a sad attempt at burning a 15 year old? Do you not like criticism? Then don’t post your songs on the internet please. Your ‘poem’ looks like that of one written on construction paper in crayon, stapled onto a bulletin board in a 2nd grade classroom. Exactly how long did it take to write it? Again, I’m sorry. I’m just expressing my opinion. The guitar in the song is beautiful. I liked it a lot. Your voice, however, I did not like (and if you do seriously have a speech problem, well then, I feel like a big douche, and I apologize). I can’t sing, so therefore I do not post my songs on the internet for others to flame. Oops. No harm done.

11-19-2005, 12:34 AM	#5
The TrenD Eskimo Baby Join Date: Mar 2005 Posts: 2	oh river of eyes how lonely and sad, your life oh river of eyes bet you wake up miserable, full of strife oh river of eyes why dont u understand, just have ago or river of eyes why, maybe not, your too slow you can put me down but i'll stand up why u frown you, just shut up oh river of eyes say your last goodbyes oh river of eyes smell like ****, full of flies you can put me down but i'll stand up why u frown you, just shut up get a life loser, there is enough twats in the world, nice to know i have met another one in you

11-19-2005, 10:07 AM	#8
origami fitz Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: edinburgh Posts: 102	woooo really dont want to be involved in this..........................................its not a good thing. __________________ If i loose a sequin here and there, more salt than pepper in my hair, can i rely on you? when all the songs are through, to be for me the everthere (¯`v´¯) `.¸.´ ¸.•´¸.•¨) ¸.•¨) (¸.•´ (¸.•´ .•´ ¸¸.•¨¯`•.'Starr¸.·´¯)

12-08-2005, 04:48 PM	#9
Tommy Chilly Eskimo Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 622	Firstly, thread maker, there is zero point in posting a song then moaning when someone negitavally criticises it, thats the whole point so you can find out whats weak and try and improve it. Secondally the song i listened to (the first one) was ok, got a little repetitive and the vocals were too low and muddy for my liking, but a sound effort anyhow. Edit : Just listened to ''lets pretend'' and the vocal muddyness is again more prominent, it sounds like your forcing your voice to sound like someone else and not letting your natural tone come through, i used to do the same, at the moment it sounds strained. Last edited by Tommy; 12-08-2005 at 04:51 PM.

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