Your lyrics

[PenguinBoy]

i like it! do you know what it's about? maybe you have a damienesque talent for writing music with wine.

did u read my latest no-one commented

[Timeé]

Originally Posted by PenguinBoy

i like it! do you know what it's about? maybe you have a damienesque talent for writing music with wine.

did u read my latest no-one commented

Yeah i read it and i think its really good.

jesus you cant have felt good writing that

Its got a baby-sisteresque vibe.

Keep writing because you've obviously got a talent

[Beevers_uk]

Originally Posted by PenguinBoy

i like it! do you know what it's about? maybe you have a damienesque talent for writing music with wine.

did u read my latest no-one commented

lol, i think to much Vino is bad for the old nogger! lol! And i have noooo idea what its about!

Yeah, you sent me it on MSN! I really liked it, very very angry, and emtional! Its like an eruption of anger, thats been pent up for awhile! DId you check out Jerry Cantrell - Anger Rising/Solitude?

[tj]

guys.. as much feedback on this one would be much appreciated.. it's just written and i really dont know how i feel about these lyrics. for all i know they could be good... they could be really ****. your opinion is needed on this one!

it's called sweet sorrow..

Don't you see that through this whole thing I've been growing
But I guess that through time we've over grew
all these months and i still don't know where we are going,
i really don't wanna burn this photograph of you.

but you're still dancing to this groove darling,
and my pride is so hard to swallow
goodbye...'Parting Is Such Sweet Sorrow'

I've never written a thing that I didn't want you to see,
I've never written a thing, maybe, that chapter just isn't in me.

you said you'd love me, if i could tie you down,
but there wasn't a rope strong enough,
you still laugh at all my childish jokes,
after i'd had a few powers and cokes...

but you're still dancing to this groove darling,
and my pride is so hard to swallow
goodbye...'Parting Is Such Sweet Sorrow'

I've never written a thing that I didn't want you to see,
I've never written a thing, maybe, that chapter just isn't in me.

[Lazy Life]

I wrote a new song last night entitled "Flowers Do Flow In Your Hair":

Click here to listen

I've got this picture of you
My God, you're beautiful
I can see your smile there
Flowers do flow in your hair
I remember the days we had
But now it's left me all sad
That it's all over now
Who we followed has taken his bow

Oh, all the flowers in a chain
Oh, all the flowers they don't change
Still clinging on, still clinging on
We're headed home and it's all gone

These wings can fly us back
But it's left behind my heart
Like paintings holding on to death
Oh, I'm not quite too prepared
For what you landed on me
Could make a blind man see
But you probably don't give a damn
But I want you to understand

Oh, all the flowers in a chain
Oh, all the flowers they don't change
Still clinging on, still clinging on
We're headed home and it's all gone

I sing this song for you because I care
Because I want to show you I'm not who you think I am
I can be serious when I want to be
As often as the rain does fall in our hometown

Oh, all the flowers in a chain
Oh, all the flowers they don't change
Still clinging on, still clinging on
We're headed home and it's all gone

I've got this picture of you
My God, you're beautiful



Feedback'd be appreciated.

[corkboyinexile]

I wrote this song two weeks ago. The story behind it is when you have one of those lucid dreams, where you are just between sleep and wake and you fully aware that you are dreaming but everything seams so real it seems too good until something happens that completely brings you back to reality.
The name comes from a quote of the old man and the sea by ernest hemmingway, when he is struggling with the fish and he finally sees him and he comments on its sheer beauty.

I play this song to a slow strummed G variation.

A Glimpse of Vision

Last night I had this lucid dream,
With just this girl I love, and I.
Something happened halfway through,
And when I woke all I could do was cry.

We went swimming on a summers eve,
Just before the sun had set.
We laughed and played in the clear blue water,
Her face was glistening and her hair was wet.

Then something happened happened I can't explain,
I looked but she was nowhere to be found.
In desperation I swam for hours and hours,
But inside I knew my girl, my love had drowned.

Last night a girl died in my dreams,
It felt so real that I could touch her.
I held out my hand, but she was gone,
And now it hurts because I miss her.

When I awoke, fear ran right through my body,
I woke shaking in a cold sweat.
I lost her in life and now too in my dreams,
So I shed a few tears of regret.

I sat up alone in my bed,
And wiped those tears from face.
I must have sat there for over an hour,
Just staring at an empty space.......where she used to lie.

Last night a girl died in my dreams,
It felt so real that I could touch her.
I held out my hand, but she was gone,
And now it hurts because I love her.

Last night a girl died in my dreams,
It felt so real that I could touch her.
I held out my hand, but she was gone,
And now it hurts because I still love her.
You know I do.

[natethegreat86]

First i'd like to say to you, mr. penguin boy, that you sir are a genius!!! beat me is just simply amazing and makes me tingle like a little school boy on the first day of summer. ... anywho i'm new here so be nice! heres a song i wrote last night at about 2 in the morning......i've had this sweet guitar piece for the longest time but never could come up with any vocals for it, but for some reason i could last night......may sound cheesy but what the hey, i like it....
called my little grey box (or is it gray? i never did know how to spell that)

(Insert sweet guitar here)
I live in a little grey box,
with a little grey door,
and little grey locks.
I built it to be grand,
with these little grey hands,
you may call it ugly, but at least it stands.

and i try to live my life,
like a sailorless ship
a husbandless wife.
and the more i roam,
the more im alone,
holding this emptiness and calling it home.

CHORUS
so hold me here
locked away
but keep me around
for a lonely day
no i dont mind
yea i'll be fine
i'm just gonna need
a little more time

(insert even cooler guitar)

and i cry to fall asleep
but if thats what i want
then it's mine to keep
dont hold me now
cuz ill turn around
and run to my little grey box in the ground

CHORUS
CHORUS
then the first verse again really slow and quiet........its neat lol


just hope i can remember the words as im hoping to play it at the little gig thing in a couple days

[samuelle]

a small plethora of feedback:

Originally Posted by PenguinBoy

heyho, i'm doing a simmilar thing at the moment, but i'm contemplating just leaving the song snippety and making the music cut up at the right points, could be extra swish.

you'll have to let me know how that works out...maybe it could be a musical suite or something.

Originally Posted by tj

after i'd had a few powers and cokes...

this line stuck out to me as being kind of awkward - the rest of your images are literary and powerful, and so this one disrupted the tone for me. the rest is lovely, though.

Originally Posted by natethegreat86

and i try to live my life,
like a sailorless ship
a husbandless wife.

are you saying that a wife needs to be steered, so to speak, by a husband?

[natethegreat86]

haha no, im not saying that at all...the songs a story about a guy that feels his only means of happiness is himself and nothing on the earth is strong enough to satisfy his need. a wife without a husband isn't a wife at all...thats a widow, but a husbandless wife simply means she's married to something else.......hmmmmmm thats a thinker

[Fool]

A couple of songs I've written and recorded recently (goto www.myspace.com/benbroommusic to listen) Opinions on the lyrics or on the songs as a whole would be muchly appreciated.

Don't tell me I can't cry

Once again I'm just not me
Please tell me who this me might be
And I'm not here inside my head
what you see of me is dead

But I'm a man
So don't tell me that I can't cry
I'm a man
So don't me that I can't cry

I'm seeing circular straight lines
With all of the problems laying behind
I feel I'm standing two foot tall
and my brain is bouncing off these walls

I'm falling apart now
So don't tell me that I can't cry
I'm falling apart now
So don't tell me that I can't cry

All wrapped up inside my sheets
Dunno why I can't just sleep
Too much running through my mind
Too much in front of me to climb

And now I've lost it
so don't tell me that I can't cry
I've F***ing lost it
Now I just wanna die

And I'm not blaming this on you
I just don't know what to do
Tell me which way I should turn
Before I self destruct and burn

Once again I'm just not me
Please tell me who this me might be
And I'm not here inside my head
what you see of me is dead
_______________________________________

This Life

I've been running round
and up and down
but still ain't found
quite what I'm looking for

And these good people cry
and I don't lie
and I can't hide
someday you'll find me

F***ing up somewhere
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not tough enough

I've been living
all of these things
these f***ed up scenes
laying in my mind

And I will be
your perfect ear
'cos I'm not here
So you can listen to yourself

What a lovely voice
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not tough enough

Some might say
that you are perfect
but you're not worth it
I'm not even gonna waste my breath

And I speak
my mind in full
whilst you speak bull
now I'm just not listening

to all this sh*t
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not tough enough

For you
For you
For you
ooooooh

But I will be
your perfect ear
'cos I'm not here
So you can listen to yourself

What a lovely voice
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not tough enough
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not rough enough.
________________________________________

Both pretty depressing songs. I tend to write more when I'm fed up, late at night after several drinks. Opinions please

p.s On the off chance anybody likes them and wants to hear them in their original quality, which they aren't on myspace, then just let me know!

[samuelle]

Originally Posted by natethegreat86

haha no, im not saying that at all...the songs a story about a guy that feels his only means of happiness is himself and nothing on the earth is strong enough to satisfy his need. a wife without a husband isn't a wife at all...thats a widow, but a husbandless wife simply means she's married to something else.......hmmmmmm thats a thinker

aha. i get you now and my mini-uprising has been calmed. the juxtaposition of those two images just really had me thinking...

[natethegreat86]

haha yea i wish there was a way to make that little stanza more clear. its my favorite couple lines of the whole song because when you get it your like ohhhhhh you know that cool feeling associated with pretty much EVERY damien song......blast him and his perfectness........but anywho it definately needs something in the line or 2 before it to give it that setup it needs but my mind right now is drawing a big blank. but i dont want people to get the wrong impression about it cuz thats one of the worst things that can happen to a musician...

[Ilium]

Similar to Fool, these are a couple of songs ive recently written and recorded (found at http://www.myspace.com/jamiegiacomelli) Any feedback would be great..
Cheers, Jamie

Let Me Go

Lost in time
Reaching out for you
Seeking more from you
Than you can give

And all the while
Knowing just how far
You’ve flown from me
Distant sound

Make your mark
Floating memory
Melt my soul away
In to the dark

And screaming out
Seems to have no effect
On this shade
I call my heart

In to the dark..


Open up those pretty eyes
Take a breath, look inside
Feel the need, striking deep
Hear the cries, singing sweet

Hum yourself a lullaby
Fear the look, that piercing eye
Thrash out wild, keep control
Strumming heat, let me go
Let me go


In Your Mind

She falls
To catch her unaware
Well fought
Inside, the silver line

See her
Satin Glow
Lie her
Soundless fall

Her doubt
That clouds and poisons
Her truth
Those eyes, whisper mine

See her
Satin Glow
Lie her
Soundless fall (x2)

She looks straight through
And breaks in two
She falls in half
And breaks in two
She takes my hand
And leads me through
This darkened world
The cold that grows

In your mind
In your mind
In your mind
In your mind

[tj]

thanks for your comment samuelle. the powers and cokes line is a bit of a bollix to fit into the melody... im in the middle of changing it!

here's some new lyrics again.. feedback appreciated..


In This April Rain

and as the day made way for night,
all fears disappeared with the sunlight,
i wish i wasn't so simplistic
and i wish you weren't as sadistic,
i wish i wasn't so complicated,
but most of all
i hope it's worth the while we waited.

In this april rain,
I'm calling out your name,
In this april rain,
I'm ready to start this game again.

i'll open the window, let the moonlight shine in,
let it show the beauty of your skin
we could put some brian wilson on,
and remember the days we spent in the sun,
there's no need to run and hide
now its just you and i,
everything else can be cast aside.

In this april rain,
I'm calling out your name,
In this april rain,
I'm ready to start this game again.

Both of us will never forget,
the very first day that we met,
so whats the point in letting go,
when you're the star of my show.

In this april rain,
I'm calling out your name,
In this april rain,
I'm ready to start this game again.

[audity]

is this a losing-your-virginity song?
sure sounds like one.

i like it, nice chorus.

[tj]

cheers..

i suppose you could say it is a losing-your-virginity song... nuff said! but it's really about having a hold on someone for too long... then holding on to that hope that when you're in a room alone with that person that there's a chance that she'll have you back.

[Beevers_uk]

You know i like your Lyrics Tj, so i think you should just keep them as they are!

DOnt know what this is, just laid in the bath and wrote it! Its not a poem, or lyrics just a rambling of thoughts and ****! cause im in that kind of mood lol!!

Ive made you cry, and told you beautiful lies.
Made you wanna die, in a fit of eye fluttering.
Still your breathing hypnotises me, and your breath on me, melts my soul.
Our swear mixed together, in between our opened bodies.
Craving for dryness, and sleep.
Taste of leather on my lip, dying to touch your body.
Before our eternal sleep.
We do this to ourselves, to forget ourselves and feel alive.
Building walls and fences, to purpously break them down and break ourselves down.
Weaving moates surround our walls, and we drowned in the beauty of our moates.

Again dont know what it is, but i just wrote it?

[Livo]

heartbreaker

be careful what you wish for
cos sometimes it might come true
and when it comes around the bend
it's sure to give you the blues

an underground romance
that's been going on for years
months of love and months of war
measured out in tears

when left is right
and right is wrong
the roles are reversed
but it's the same song

and what is she supposed to do?
when she thinks he's her dream-maker
but then she goes and changes her mind
it's a stone cold
and what is she supposed to do?
when she thinks he's her dream-maker
and then she goes and changes her mind
it's a stone cold heartbreaker

i know it's all my fault
and i feel all beige
they say ignorance is bliss
i hope wisdom comes with age

i speak from experience
so listen to my words
just don't play with fire
you'll end up getting burned

when left is right
and right is wrong
the roles are reversed
but it's the same song

and what is she supposed to do?
when she thinks he's her dream-maker
but then she goes and changes her mind
it's a stone cold
and what is she supposed to do?
when she thinks he's her dream-maker
and then she goes and changes her mind
it's a stone cold heartbreaker

[jemarami]

This is song I made after a long talk with my best friend were he told me that his father had made sexual assults on him when he was a child...

Sweet dreams

You reached out to far
with your hands of trust
Innocence was lost
in the name of lust
to face the truth is hard to learn
the faith of a child you have to earn
embrace of deceive burned it's mark
Sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
But your own flesh and blood keep wondering why...

You must have seen
through the shades of your eyes
you must have felt all the pain inside
It must have burned your hands and tongue
and there's no redemption for what you've done
there's no second chance and there's no return
sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
but your own flesh and blood keep wondering why

No matter what cause
it won't come undone
so don't come and claim
like father like son
You walk in this world with blindfolded eyes
a mind of denial, a tongue drenched in lies
and a bitter taste of fake in your mouth
Sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
but your own flesh and blood keep wondering why...

[Timeé]

Originally Posted by jemarami

This is song I made after a long talk with my best friend were he told me that his father had made sexual assults on him when he was a child...

Sweet dreams

You reached out to far
with your hands of trust
Innocence was lost
in the name of lust
to face the truth is hard to learn
the faith of a child you have to earn
embrace of deceive burned it's mark
Sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
But your own flesh and blood keep wondering why...

You must have seen
through the shades of your eyes
you must have felt all the pain inside
It must have burned your hands and tongue
and there's no redemption for what you've done
there's no second chance and there's no return
sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
but your own flesh and blood keep wondering why

No matter what cause
it won't come undone
so don't come and claim
like father like son
You walk in this world with blindfolded eyes
a mind of denial, a tongue drenched in lies
and a bitter taste of fake in your mouth
Sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
but your own flesh and blood keep wondering why...

i love that! especially those last two lines that are repeated.

[Lazy Life]

This is a song I wrote yesterday about a car crash in which two young people died. It was their own fault. They were in the same car, the driver was driving too fast and hit another car, this one with two young children and a mother in it. Thankfully they weren't hurt.

Dead flowers for dead people

What did you think
You'd go and do today?
Meet up with a couple of friends
You haven't seen in a while?
And what would happen
On this fateful afternoon
Two cars,
Two deaths

Hours later
Flowers lined the roads
The orange sun
Setting in the distance
The police tape
Guarded your bodies
But cars overturned
Were visible

And you probably don't want to know this...
The flowers by the side of the road
Are for no-one else but you
The fools you are as men

We can't protest
for those already dead
Did you think we could look in those eyes
And bring you back again?
You fools,
You fools
What did you think you were doing?

And you probably don't want to know this...
The flowers by the side of the road
Are for no-one else but you

The fools you are as men

And, if you want, you can listen to the song here.

[Timeé]

yeah i wrote something similar to that but i dont think many people want to hear it coz its too depressing. - its called "grave digger" ~ heres a bit.

"and i'd sell your soul, for a couple of dough,
so down you go,
so down you go,
so down you go,this repeats like a crescendo featured in Face "coz i adore you"

i'll get the full thing up soon..

i never remember my songs! ...probably a bad sign. but sure damo is the same

[philbo]

this is one of my newer pieces...called Diana for the moment, and i may be adding to it yet. it takes its inspiration from Roman Mythology. Diana was a Goddess of hunting, was regularly depicted with a deer, her temple was destroyed when the city it was in was ransacked. slaves worshipped her, and could always get sanctuary in her temple. and then in later years, she became a Moon Goddess.



Diana
Diana stumbled down the stairs
an arrow through her hand
the flames beneath her smouldered
as the armies raged across her land

Blood flowed down her chest
Her robe tattered and torn
Her hair ragged across her face
features weary and worn

The temples burned
The deer they fled
The slaves they wailed
As the moon bled red

The warrior broke through the door
and cupids arrow flew
on the floor in front of him
he found the greatest beauty he ever knew

Now her body lifeless
skin pale and pure
her drained heart broke his
for it could love no more

the temples burned
the deer they fled
there's no hope for love
born from the dead

[Juzzza]

A new one.

View from the shelf...

Freedom drowns me as it rushes in
intimidation comes with open doors
feels like language has moved on without me
don't understand the game let alone the scores

the shelf seems so high when your looking down
your legs trembling with regret and fear
head swimming with the vertigo of taking the next step
and I can't even see your house from up here

not even my own voice in my head, its yours... move on, move on, move on

looking around at the other faces in the trench
niave and hopeful and wide of eyes
what are we looking for at the end of this fight
an illusion of peace and commitment with ties

not even my own voice in my head, its yours... move on, move on, move on

[philbo]

my newest one, written in character...

Open Letter to a Friend
"Hey man, howsit going?
tell me how you've been
the whiskeys been flowing
and yeah I'm drunk again

Funny thing just happened
just came from my girls place
You know what she told me.
I see it in your face

You know I've seen it coming
I've felt her slipping away
I kept lying to myself
trying to hide from this day

I guess I should thank you
for treating her so kind
I've seen the change in her
worries lifted from her mind

Well my friend, I thank you
no more burdens on my mind
well my friend, I'd hit you
but the whiskeys left me blind

She's at the doctors now
gotta hope it aint twins
then she's off to the preacher
he'll soon know about your sins

So hey man, howsit going?
no need to tell me how you've been
so she didn't tell you that?
now I see you're not so keen...

but you know what she told me?
you know what she said?
said she loves you, said she needs you,
but I'd rather see you dead...

She loves you?

She needs you?


and I'm letting her go...."

[Beevers_uk]

Haha!! I really really like that! You can really feel the emotion and pain!! I like it!! Kind of reminds me alittle of "Famous Blue Raincoat"

I like it

[philbo]

cheers man. funny thing was i was in a great mood when i wrote it, i just had the character developing over the last few songs. a few of them are all connected/about the same guy...

[Juzzza]

Monkey Love...



Like a monkey you couldn't let go of one branch
until you had hold of another
all about you, your needs, your esteem
you reached out for some attention

accusing me of disrespecting two and a half years
yet you thought so little of my feelings
I'm questioning who I am and what I have to offer
if I can give so much and still lose

I guess you are right, I don't know you at all, how do I decipher so many lies
but I'm the bad guy, whatever you need to believe at night, I'll give it all to someone new
don't expect me to ever look at you


as angry as I am and the sleep I can't find
I feel sorry for you and whoever's next
come down from the trees and feel earth under foot
because no branch can hold what you bear

break free from your leash and find your own voice
there's no happiness in another's smile
an angel's face often hides a sad truth
trust is no friend of mine for a while

I guess you are right, I don't know you at all, how do I decipher so many lies
but I'm the bad guy, whatever you need to believe at night, I'll give it all to someone new
don't expect me to ever look at you


never forgive yourself? you and me both

[Juzzza]

Seagull



nothing hurts more than losing someone you love
and we're never more hurtful, than to those we love
and I guess we all do crazy things
and if the level of insanity is linked proportionately
to just how much we care
then maybe you can forgive me this one last time
for being a stubborn, emotional bear

instead of fighting for you and giving you food for thought
like a seagull I flapped around, made a mess, then flew away

I know you are hurting too and you're just as lost as me
I know the future looks so far away and you feel all alone
you were doing so well without me
you'd set your mind and you were moving on
you were strong and knew what to do
then I threw in the mellowdrama, so what's new?
it's just hard imagining me, if it doesn't include you

instead of fighting for you and giving you food for thought
like a seagull I flapped around, made a mess, then flew away

[Juzzza]

Originally Posted by Juzzza

A new one.

View from the shelf...

Freedom drowns me as it rushes in
intimidation comes with open doors
feels like language has moved on without me
don't understand the game let alone the scores

the shelf seems so high when your looking down
your legs trembling with regret and fear
head swimming with the vertigo of taking the next step
and I can't even see your house from up here

not even my own voice in my head, its yours... move on, move on, move on

looking around at the other faces in the trench
niave and hopeful and wide of eyes
what are we looking for at the end of this fight
an illusion of peace and commitment with ties

not even my own voice in my head, its yours... move on, move on, move on

Recorded this on Monday night and it will be up on my profile at MySpace tonight some time...

http://www.myspace.com/justinthorne