Your lyrics

[Livo]

i trawled through this thread to find out if i had already posted but
as far as i can see i haven't. now my lyrics aren't half as good as any
of the ones here but here i go:



i see the stardust in your hair

feel the moonbeams on your hands

i hear voices when they're not there

and the ticking of clocks

behind closed doors



the city's alight

bright eyes and moonlit smiles

i know you're far away

but i would walk the moonlit miles

[ali*]

livi thats great!!! i'd love to hear it

[Nathaniel]

yeah livi thatsbetter than anything I've come up with so far so dont point yourself down. I think its great! Iwas working on a new song last night which is think is pretty good.

[Juzzza]

One Word to Hate


I'm in deep
it seems so real
didn't think I could function
and my senses reel
oceans away
and she sits alone
I'd give my life
to have you home


yesterday I could've been anyone
yesterday I was no one
I'm so alone
I'm so down
If there's one word to hate it's 'soon'
I just need you, please come home
to me, to me


kissing wind
the only way
to touch your love
when I need it bad
can't be with
can't be without
this torturous bliss
there's no way out


yesterday I could've been anyone
yesterday I was no one
I'm so alone
I'm so down
If there's one word to hate it's 'soon'
I just need you, please come home
to me, to me

[Nathaniel]

Justin thats fantastic. I like it alot and have felt that way many times. I was working on this last night, its called Goodbye


Wheres your spark gone? was it all my fault through all the things that I've done wrong,


I wrote you my feelings down on some paper that I found,just forgot to give it to you


and if you let me stay I promise I can change, so your eyes can shine again and not my shade of grey


And did you look in and touch me, cause when I looked up you'd gone, and the sky is too high, for me, sometimes you never said goodbye,


Your tears still stain my skin, I try to remember your words, but I wasnt really listening,


I saw through myself tonight lost a dream cause I held far too tight, sorry that I failed you, I failed you


And did you look in and touch me cause when I looked up you'd gone, and the sky is too high, for me, sometimes you never said goodbye


And did you look in and kiss me, cause when I woke up you'd gone and I know I'm too high, for you , sometimes, I never said goodbye, I should have said goodbye.


Any feedback or ideas for improvements would be gretly appreciated.


Thanks

[smalltownrockst]

Here's one for novelty value, the first song I ever wrote... i think a few eskimos will chuckle at this.

MELODY MAKER MAN

I feel like a millionaire tonight,
A thousand million dreams are flowing out of sight.
Down, Down, Down. You bring me down.
Look into my eyes, watch me drown.

I feel like, I think I’m gonna cry
‘Cos you’re asking mw who, and you’re askin me why
Through, through, through. I’ve gotta get it through
That I’ll always be me and you’ll always be you.


I’m a Melody Maker Man
Doing the best that I can
Trying to understand
My Soul is in your hands

You think that you’re some kind of Rock Star tonight
Everywhere that you go you’re stealing my limelight
Now, Now, Now. The time is always now.
And so I’ll bring it to you, gotta bring it somehow

I’m a Melody Maker Man
Doing the best that I can
Trying to Understand
My soul is in your hands

My heart is in your hands

My head is in my hands

It’s in your head, it’s in your hands

[Juzzza]

Nathaniel I really like your style of writing, that song is great especiallyif you imagine the guy from the Streets spitting those lyrics out (try it and you will see what I mean). Just out of interest do you turn your lyrical ideas into actual songs, what style?


Triple M, I don't get the joke, I thought it was solid not chuckle worthy? [img]smileys/smiley5.gif[/img]

[Vienna]

ok i'm just gonna do a really impersonal thing here and say [img]smileys/smiley32.gif[/img]to all of you guys, you all are so talented


i've never written a song in my life and don't think i ever could to be honest, especially after reading all the fabones posted here, BRILLIANT!

[Nathaniel]

Thanks alot Justin, praise indeed. my friend KEv and covered Dry your eyes the other week at one of our pub gigs, it went down really well.


I'm actually an acoustic player with heavy influences from both Buckelys, Radioheadobviously more recently damienbut I also like shoegazer type music like Ride so its a bit of a mish mosh really. Most of my writing is melancholy and kind of raw but it works, well according to people who have heard it anyway! The above is a simple Am - G verse with a C, G, F chorus, pretty basic stuff.

[Juzzza]

Excellent, nothing wrong with basic shapes, take them all over the place with a Capo and BINGO, Damien Rice tunes coming out of your ears!!! Of course he throws in incredible songwriting and a beautiful voice to the mix too... And every now and then just to show he can play the guitar he writes songs like Eskimo and Cannonball!!!


Well, sounds like you have a winning formula and some great influences so keep banging them out man, they're good. And stay away from left-hooking ladies.[img]smileys/smiley5.gif[/img]

[Nathaniel]

no i'm going for crack whores now - they're much easier to pacify![img]smileys/smiley36.gif[/img]


Just kidding met a stunning girl who has agreed to come to my gig next tuesday so all is well, and the sun has just come out. Sweet.

[MelodyMakerMan]

Good work Nath..I'm liking it.


I thought some some eskimos might find it funny, as thats my profile name. Though it is the first song I ever wrote... it's still one of my favourites.

[Nathaniel]

cheers MMM I like it dude, the first song I ever wrote was this called perfect sea view as I live by the sea


So i think I really miss her,but then I'm not that sure


And on my lips where I kissed her, hurts more than it did before


Now the walk home takes much longer than it ever used to, and as I left her houseI was looking for the perfect sea view


Chorus


Oh if you take my hand, and dont let it go


No you dont understand that I have a blackened soul


But you can clean it


2


Stepped over cracks on the roadside which just increased in size


Stared at my reflection with sad lament as I hung myself with lies


Now the walkhome takes much longer than it ever used to, and as I left her house down the steps out the gate looking for the perfect sea view


Chorus


3


And now as this day fades away, into nothing


I slip slide away, into nothing


And they say I dunno who they are but they say I have potential


And I hate that f**king word cause I'm nothing without you.


Chorus


Wrote it and recorded it 99

[Vienna]

nah don't like that one [img]smileys/smiley2.gif[/img]


just kidding...it's great as are the rest of them [img]smileys/smiley32.gif[/img]

[smalltownrockst]

here's some more of my lyrics, in a very arty format.

[MelodyMakerMan]

did that work for everyone else?

[philb2.0]

dunno which one i wanna post....so im just gonna put up my newest one. not sure if i am gonna leave it as is, or whetheri am gonna change it yet.


its called weeping willow:


Weeping willow, don't shed no more tears,
Weeping willow, You've mourned him for years.

Winter is coming and it's time to rest.
It's hard to forget him, but you gotta try your best.
The birds will sing you lullabies,
They'll wrap you up in pink cotton, to keep you safe from their lies.

Weeping willow, don't shed no more tears,
Weeping willow, You've mourned him for years.

You've shed your tears, and your branches are bare,
It's better nowhe's no longer there.
The rainwater will wash away the pain,
and the wind will rock you to sleep again.

Weeping willow, don't shed no more tears,
Weeping willow, You've mourned him for years.

Weeping willow, what goes on in your head?
Weeping willow, now your love is dead,
Won't you tell us,
What goes on in your head?

Weeping willow, don't shed no more tears,
Weeping willow, You've mourned him for years.

[Lazy Life]

this is a song i wrote about my death metal classmates (who think they are unholy). its about god coming home and hunting the unholy... all i got is 1 verse and a chorus so far, and the very first line isnt brilliant, but it is a beautiful song indeed.


Better hope for your prayers,


Better hope for your prayers,


Or you'd better watch your back,


When he's looking through that crack,


Bearing down,


down,


down,


down,


down on you...





[CHORUS]


So all you unholy people


Go and hide in your holes


Cos' god is coming home,


And he's gonna make this place a heaven on earth....

[Always_Echos]

Omigod, all these lyrisc r brilliant!! Im gunna try & keep up with u lot by posting sum of mine, although they're nothing compared 2 u guys!
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Thoughts drift away from me
Thinking outrageously

I’m dreaming, just dreaming

Thinking of times gone by
The bluest seas, the bluest skies
The way I looked through your eyes

I’m dreaming, just dreaming

Things go black and things grow old
<H5 style="MARGIN: 0in 0in 0pt" align=left> I still can’t hear what I’ve been told</H5>
You left me standing, alone and cold

And suddenly I’m not dreaming

Memories fade and fizzle out
And I forget what it’s about
I cry, I scream, I sigh, I shout

Why can’t I still be dreaming?

Any feedback guys??

[Lazy Life]

yup, brilliant, all those words are sorta dreamy words, which i think is what you were going for , kicks the stuffing outta my old a new song (below)
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These Dreams,
They haunt me,
With their perfect little rivers,
And perfect little smiles,
Caressing,
The very essence,
Of evil


Now i just gotta get chorus and more verses lol, but yours is so much better than mine

[MarkRooney]

heres a wee bit of a new song im writing:





Please tell me my eyes were decieved//give me some kind of reprieve//for what i saw it couldnt have been real//my bodys numb and i hav nothing left to feel//


I found a trail of clothes and underwear//leading my slowly up the stairs//all i heard was the love// love not for me// was it worth it baby?// was it f**kin extacy?//


(bridge)


How could you do this to me now// didnt know you were lost but im glad youve found// whatever it takes to put a smile on your face!


Im happy that I can finally see//how much of a bitch you turned out to be// now youve crushed the best part of me// coz ur lock was picked by his prick and im left holding the key...





thats all i got juss now lol

[Always_Echos]

I'm liking that! Specially the part about the key...


Try these out for size:
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Sometimes I just want to scream and shout
But nobody wants to hear
I just want to pour my whole heart out
But nobody seems to care
So I hold it in
Till the hurt and anger turns to tears
And in a quiet place I cry
Finally realising my fears

CHORUS
There’s no one to hold me
When I’m insecure
To love me when I’m stupid
And then to ignore
Mistakes and angry words
That have somehow gotten free
Is there anyone to love me
Just for being me?

All my life was cruel and sad
I kept it bottled in
I was poisoned with the bad
Where do I begin?
Tainted silences
That could drive a man insane
But it doesn’t bother me
You can’t go mad again

CHORUS

Trapped inside for all these years
I've been blinded by my tears
Now its time to face my fears

CHORUS x 2


They're a bit 'oh woe is me I'm so emo' but they were written when i was going through my tragic teenage stage. Lol. Reading through them now, they actually suck a lot more than i first realised. Ah well, opinions???

[MarkRooney]

nah there good man, u juss needta maybe add a middle 8 aka a bridge and thats it dun, i like it

[philb2.0]

She Likes The Rain:
She likes the rain, it makes her feel so much better,
She likes the rain, cause it keeps her mind together,
But it gets hard everytime, the sun starts to shine,
It gets harder, and she dont feel so fine.
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The sun was shining yesterday,
And I kept wishing the blue sky would turn to grey,
Cause she’s only smiling when it’s raining,
And I’m glad it’s raining today,
So let it….

Rain down on yesterday,
Wash all her worries away,
Rain down on yesterday,
Start fresh, it’s a brand new day.

She likes the rain,
When she’s out walking with me,
April showers make her happy as can be,
When it rains, she forgets all the harsh words spoken,
When it rains, she forgets all the promises and hearts left broken,

She ain’t all there, and she knows it too,
Staying sane in her world is the hardest thing to do,
So I pray the rain it never stops,
She never gets wet cause she walks in between the drops,
So wont it…….

Rain down on yesterday,
Wash all her worries away,
Rain down on yesterday,
Start fresh, it’s a brand new day

[philb2.0]

one from my black rose series, most of which is here:


http://www.countingcrows.com/bboard/...ewtopic.asp?To picID=1645371&amp;topic=Black+Rose





The sky is broken,
And there’s cracks in her heart.
Her mascaras running down her face,
She laughs, and says, “its art.”

A murder of crows circles overhead,
As the last petal falls from her black rose
She’s a black belt in misery,
But it rarely ever shows.

She says “I’m a picture of insanity,
And you are my frame…”
She tries to keep within his limits,
But he treats it like a game.

And the last rose petal hits the ground,
She opens her mouth to laugh without a sound.
She says “God is an elephant,
and we’ve scared Him off at our best”

And she draws a knife from its sheath,
and plunges it into her chest.

[greg]

She cannot be defined:

She’s not wearing any mask
She’s known to be courageous
There’s a cross around her neck
But she’s not even religious

She cannot be defined
She loves to confuse my mind.

She will lend a helping hand
And respect all your convictions
Then she will make you believe
She doesn’t have her own opinions

She cannot be defined
She loves to confuse my mind.

She is never suspicious
She expects no explanations
She just stands here watching
And waiting for your reactions

She cannot be defined
She loves to confuse my mind.

She’s dreaming of a home
She’s not found the perfect location
So she keeps pinning on a map
Her past and next destinations

She cannot be defined
She loves to confuse my mind.

[Juzzza]

I finally worked the words in my signature (below) intoa tune... Quite bluesy feel with some nice screaming bits [img]smileys/smiley17.gif[/img]

[Always_Echos]

Ive been a having a sh*t couple of days, guy troubles at the start of it suprise suprise. It caused me 2 write this which I'm actually quite proud of. Hit me back with comments, but no sympathy votes please!!!!!


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She’s left you unexpectedly
Can love withstand the miles?
You’d follow her forever
Just to bathe in all her smiles
But back home I stand here waiting
Just a shadow by the door
If you follow her forever
I’d follow you for even more

If you believe love can stand the distance
Then I’ll let you be
But if she gives up please realize
You can still come back to me

She’s made a mask of make up
To hide her blatant guilt
If faithfulness was flowers
Hers have begun to wilt
My face is so much clearer
You get just what you see
So when she’s blinded both your eyes
Just take a look at me

If you believe love can stand the distance
Then I’ll let you be
But if she gives up please realize
You can still come back to me

Maybe she’s just right for you
Maybe she does what I don’t do
But tell me is she in love with you
Like I am?

If you believe love can stand the distance
Then I’ll let you be
But if she gives up please realize
You can still come back to me

[Nathaniel]

darlin thats beautiful - its not about me is it?[img]smileys/smiley36.gif[/img]I love it and I'll write a tune for it if you want.

[Always_Echos]

Nah Nath, they're not 4 u. But i might mail u the lyrics i wrote 4 u back wen i did hav a crush on you. They're a bit cutesy cutesy but i like 'em. And they gave me sumthing 2 work on rather than how impossible the whole situation seemed. Lol, im gunna stop writing this now as i hav just remembered its a post &amp; not a PM &amp; anyone cud read it! Lol!