Your lyrics - Page 14

WhatAmIDarling? · 05-08-2005, 02:36 AM

"Her mother won’t cry
Her mother won’t cry
Her mother won’t cry"

Aw, that's sad....I like it.

PenguinBoy · 05-08-2005, 06:38 PM

i love ur ballad of silence! so good

here's another one for y'all, a few too many metaphors, but it's bout comercialism and nature.

ARIA DUNLOW
"Keltic spirit
trapped in the middle class genes
of a suburban mongrel
Children of the Soil
segregated by plastic bags
and illusions rule

Aria Dunlow where art thou
Art thou myth
will i find you

Ah Low
Aria Dunlow
Aria Dun Aria Dun
Aria Dunlow

When frozen Grass
Cracks under bare feet
Minions cease drinking blood
A fire burns
In the hand of an old man
lost in the hills wandring

Aria Dunlow where art thou
Art thou myth
will i find you

Ah Low
Aria Dunlow
Aria Dun Aria Dun
Aria Dunlow

solo

bridge

chorus"

i know i spelt celtic with a "K" i like it like that, don't even know why

WhatAmIDarling? · 05-09-2005, 12:17 AM

Lately I've started spelling cool "kewl" just because I like it.

I loved the whole song, but this was my favorite line:

"When frozen Grass
Cracks under bare feet
Minions cease drinking blood
A fire burns
In the hand of an old man
lost in the hills wandring"

There's something about the thought of what frozen blades of grass feel like beneath your bare feet that is very thought-provoking and kinda eery. How on EARTH you thought of that line is beyond me! Nice work :-)

Ranting Thespian · 05-09-2005, 03:28 AM

I liked ARIA DUNLOW, there's nothing such as too many metaphors

Also, just to let you know, Ballad of Silence is ficticious, but still real. It's about abuse. I wrote it as a tribute to all the people who have the courage and strength to get out of them. I also wrote it to reach people still in abuse, and help encourage them to get out. The first verse tells how she feels and about her leaving. The second is her thinking back about how she thought it was all her fault. The third is about how he would hit her, and tell her it is for her good, then say he's sorry, but not for long. The choruses are her questioning her motives. The end is that she found out it was the right thing to do. The whole mother won't cry thing, it's that her family is not going to hate her or look down on her for this, but to love her no matter what and that this was a good thing. And even though I am a guy, I do know abuse, my first and only girlfriend verbably abused me a lot, so I do know what it's like.

PenguinBoy · 05-09-2005, 04:22 PM

Thanks allot!

cracks under bare feet... kinda got the idea from people doing stuff in bare feet so they "connect" (lol) to the ground, and 2ndly for walking to school on a frosty morning, and grass just kinda cracks under ur feet and it's so yummy...

"there's nothing such as too many metaphors" hmmm i dno, i don't mind my song being an enigma but sometimes i write stuff and even i forget what it's actually about. plus, music for the people probably should be understood.

The Pink Girly · 05-09-2005, 06:34 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by WhatAmIDarling?

Wow. Thank you so very much!

any time! can i hear it?

WhatAmIDarling? · 05-10-2005, 12:20 AM

I'm actually still going through the phase where I'm writing random lyrics, and random music, but not finding ways to put the two together just yet. I still need more practice :-)

I like writing lyrics for the self-expression. For some reason I can't write a poem to save my life.

damofan · 05-10-2005, 10:47 AM

Lyrics are the best way to self express i think! I always feel so much better when ive sat down and written something!

Juzzza · 05-10-2005, 07:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BenjaminCostello

Here's a song I wrote recently for all my friends that are graduating and leaving me

F***in hell Benjamin!!! You have an amazing voice there mate, really rich and great range.

The song is good although the verse was a lot like Snow Patrol's 'Light Up'... you could almost sing the chorus along to your verse, but there is no disguising your awesome voice talent man, exceptional stuff... I saw your stuff over at Garageband, it would have been cool to have put it in the comp, they would have loved your voice.

BenjaminCostello · 05-10-2005, 09:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Juzzza

F***in hell Benjamin!!! You have an amazing voice there mate, really rich and great range.

Yay! Thank you

Quote:

Originally Posted by Juzzza

The song is good although the verse was a lot like Snow Patrol's 'Light Up'... you could almost sing the chorus along to your verse

Wow - that's totally cool! Thanksfully - I wrote the music before that album came out (phew!). hehe

Quote:

Originally Posted by Juzzza

I saw your stuff over at Garageband, it would have been cool to have put it in the comp, they would have loved your voice.

Do you mean the competition thing they have there? I didn't really understand it - it's kind of expensive to enter it

- do you think it's worth doing?

Thanks again

Benjamin

Miss Pink · 05-10-2005, 10:27 PM

LIVO!!!!!!!!

awwwwwwwww!! "I WONDER "IF"" in the dark room is tho bloody bestest!

WhatAmIDarling? · 05-11-2005, 12:38 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by damofan

Lyrics are the best way to self express i think! I always feel so much better when ive sat down and written something!

Same here! I use my journal as more of an emotional release than a place to record my day-to-day activity's.

Juzzza · 05-11-2005, 08:23 AM

Hey Ben,

It is free, you simply have to do enough review pairs of other songs in order to upload and enter one of your own. I think you have to review twenty pairs, which is actually good fun anyway.

Then your song gets ten reviews and if they are good, you go into a second round, then a third and then you get the chance to win some cool prizes.

There is also a ranking system and your tune may get listed based on lyrics, your vocals, guitars, best movie soundtrack potential, best chill-out track and so on.

If you're lucky (or just good, in your case) you may get one of these:

I've been around GB for years and having listened (and even been ranked in the top twenty) to the best, I honestly think you will kick ass there.

Do it man.

PM me if you need any more info.

Here is my page:

http://www.garageband.com/artist/justinthorne

JT

Nathaniel · 05-12-2005, 08:37 AM

new song which is as yet untiltled. Comments and criticism appreciated as always -

Thinking of the things you’d say, and photographs that fade away,

Memories of June,

I am bleeding everyday, for the one that got away,

Its winter now, its over

Remember your hands upon my chest, but those echoes now rest,

Thought they would always echo

I feel like my heart has drowned, in petrol rainbows on the ground,

Pictures of you.

I have always been a coward when it comes to you

You are so beautiful -

thats all I have so far but I will complete it soon

Uno- X · 05-12-2005, 08:39 AM

*coughI'mstillwaitingforasongaboutmecough*

it's beatiful Nate. as ever. love ur new siggie.

Nathaniel · 05-12-2005, 08:42 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Uno- X

*coughI'mstillwaitingforasongaboutmecough*

it's beatiful Nate. as ever. love ur new siggie.

they're all about you honey

Uno- X · 05-12-2005, 08:48 AM

*blush* thanks..but they are not.

Nathaniel · 05-12-2005, 08:49 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Uno- X

*blush* thanks..but they are not.

no they are not. I am sorry hun, this one is about, well you know, a certain girl whose name begins with J.

Uno- X · 05-12-2005, 08:50 AM

*sigh* oh well why would they be really..

who's that lass? do I know I her?....

Nathaniel · 05-12-2005, 08:52 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Uno- X

*sigh* oh well why would they be really..

who's that lass? do I know I her?....

not intimately but I have mentioned her on more than one occasion. You must remember Joey!

Uno- X · 05-12-2005, 08:55 AM

*bangs my head against that wall* doooooooh....of course I remember Joey. thought u were over her?

Nathaniel · 05-12-2005, 09:02 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Uno- X

*bangs my head against that wall* doooooooh....of course I remember Joey. thought u were over her?

yeah,so did I. But it seems that she is my favourite muse, and I will never really get over her. Still, it could be worse, I could never have met her in the first place.

Uno- X · 05-12-2005, 09:04 AM

worse? it would have been better. she wouldnt have broken ur heart.

Nathaniel · 05-12-2005, 09:10 AM

yeah I know, but I wouldnt be me if my heart wasn't permanently in pieces, and she is so beautiful.

Uno- X · 05-12-2005, 09:11 AM

Nathan! forget her! think about fatsy....

Nathaniel · 05-12-2005, 09:24 AM

No I will not, and he is a CAT! Contrary to popular belief I am not into bestiality.

Uno- X · 05-12-2005, 09:25 AM

the cure have a song about cats...eeeeh love cats!

Nathaniel · 05-12-2005, 09:27 AM

yes they do and it is the worst song the cure have ever done

Uno- X · 05-12-2005, 09:28 AM

I like it....*covers my eyes*

Juzzza · 05-12-2005, 10:37 AM

Hopeless Romantic

When I'm cold with the 'ness' of lonely
I wrap sin around my shoulders like a cloak
drink JD on ice like a bourbon fish
and buy cigarettes even though I don't smoke

leave the gentleman's club still empty
my wallet light about one hundred or three
I'm one of the suckers deluded to think
'hey, I think she really liked me'

Maybe I'm just unlucky
Maybe I'm a romantic
I'm definitely hopeless
but tonight I just need someone to smile at me

05-08-2005, 02:36 AM	#391
WhatAmIDarling? Eskimo Regular Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: North Carolina, USA Posts: 448	"Her mother won’t cry Her mother won’t cry Her mother won’t cry" Aw, that's sad....I like it. __________________ They are so happy they don't know how miserable they are.

05-08-2005, 06:38 PM	#392
PenguinBoy Appreciative Minion Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Harlington, Beds, UK. Posts: 1,695	i love ur ballad of silence! so good here's another one for y'all, a few too many metaphors, but it's bout comercialism and nature. ARIA DUNLOW "Keltic spirit trapped in the middle class genes of a suburban mongrel Children of the Soil segregated by plastic bags and illusions rule Aria Dunlow where art thou Art thou myth will i find you Ah Low Aria Dunlow Aria Dun Aria Dun Aria Dunlow When frozen Grass Cracks under bare feet Minions cease drinking blood A fire burns In the hand of an old man lost in the hills wandring Aria Dunlow where art thou Art thou myth will i find you Ah Low Aria Dunlow Aria Dun Aria Dun Aria Dunlow solo bridge chorus" i know i spelt celtic with a "K" i like it like that, don't even know why __________________ Good eyes see nothing to shoot, Good Feet Feel good giving up good boots. Myspace - My Music - My Last.fm Profile- My LiveJournal - I'm Jacob Last edited by PenguinBoy; 05-08-2005 at 06:51 PM.

05-09-2005, 12:17 AM	#393
WhatAmIDarling? Eskimo Regular Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: North Carolina, USA Posts: 448	Lately I've started spelling cool "kewl" just because I like it. I loved the whole song, but this was my favorite line: "When frozen Grass Cracks under bare feet Minions cease drinking blood A fire burns In the hand of an old man lost in the hills wandring" There's something about the thought of what frozen blades of grass feel like beneath your bare feet that is very thought-provoking and kinda eery. How on EARTH you thought of that line is beyond me! Nice work :-) __________________ They are so happy they don't know how miserable they are.

05-09-2005, 04:22 PM	#395
PenguinBoy Appreciative Minion Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Harlington, Beds, UK. Posts: 1,695	Thanks allot! cracks under bare feet... kinda got the idea from people doing stuff in bare feet so they "connect" (lol) to the ground, and 2ndly for walking to school on a frosty morning, and grass just kinda cracks under ur feet and it's so yummy... "there's nothing such as too many metaphors" hmmm i dno, i don't mind my song being an enigma but sometimes i write stuff and even i forget what it's actually about. plus, music for the people probably should be understood. __________________ Good eyes see nothing to shoot, Good Feet Feel good giving up good boots. Myspace - My Music - My Last.fm Profile- My LiveJournal - I'm Jacob

05-10-2005, 12:20 AM	#397
WhatAmIDarling? Eskimo Regular Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: North Carolina, USA Posts: 448	I'm actually still going through the phase where I'm writing random lyrics, and random music, but not finding ways to put the two together just yet. I still need more practice :-) I like writing lyrics for the self-expression. For some reason I can't write a poem to save my life. __________________ They are so happy they don't know how miserable they are.

05-09-2005, 03:28 AM	#394
Ranting Thespian Eskimo Regular Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 331	I liked ARIA DUNLOW, there's nothing such as too many metaphors Also, just to let you know, Ballad of Silence is ficticious, but still real. It's about abuse. I wrote it as a tribute to all the people who have the courage and strength to get out of them. I also wrote it to reach people still in abuse, and help encourage them to get out. The first verse tells how she feels and about her leaving. The second is her thinking back about how she thought it was all her fault. The third is about how he would hit her, and tell her it is for her good, then say he's sorry, but not for long. The choruses are her questioning her motives. The end is that she found out it was the right thing to do. The whole mother won't cry thing, it's that her family is not going to hate her or look down on her for this, but to love her no matter what and that this was a good thing. And even though I am a guy, I do know abuse, my first and only girlfriend verbably abused me a lot, so I do know what it's like.

05-10-2005, 10:47 AM	#398
damofan Eskimo Regular Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: United Kingdom Posts: 278	Lyrics are the best way to self express i think! I always feel so much better when ive sat down and written something! __________________ 'You never were gonna change your mind, were you Emily..'

05-10-2005, 10:27 PM	#401
Miss Pink Eskimo Regular Join Date: Mar 2004 Posts: 5,327	LIVO!!!!!!!! awwwwwwwww!! "I WONDER "IF"" in the dark room is tho bloody bestest! __________________ We don't crave what hurts... we hurt when we hope for something and it turns out to not be what we wanted...the pain is often our hope breaking... not our hearts.

05-11-2005, 08:23 AM	#403
Juzzza Eskimo Regular Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Jersey Posts: 924	Hey Ben, It is free, you simply have to do enough review pairs of other songs in order to upload and enter one of your own. I think you have to review twenty pairs, which is actually good fun anyway. Then your song gets ten reviews and if they are good, you go into a second round, then a third and then you get the chance to win some cool prizes. There is also a ranking system and your tune may get listed based on lyrics, your vocals, guitars, best movie soundtrack potential, best chill-out track and so on. If you're lucky (or just good, in your case) you may get one of these: I've been around GB for years and having listened (and even been ranked in the top twenty) to the best, I honestly think you will kick ass there. Do it man. PM me if you need any more info. Here is my page: http://www.garageband.com/artist/justinthorne JT __________________ www.justinthorne.com ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ 'Ninjas killed my family, I need money for Kung-Fu lessons'... homeless guy's sign, New York (May 2005) http://www.myspace.com/justinthorne http://www.myspace.com/jtintheshadows Last edited by Juzzza; 05-11-2005 at 08:25 AM.

05-12-2005, 08:37 AM	#404
Nathaniel Debauched Eskimo Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: England Posts: 1,999	new song which is as yet untiltled. Comments and criticism appreciated as always - Thinking of the things you’d say, and photographs that fade away, Memories of June, I am bleeding everyday, for the one that got away, Its winter now, its over Remember your hands upon my chest, but those echoes now rest, Thought they would always echo I feel like my heart has drowned, in petrol rainbows on the ground, Pictures of you. I have always been a coward when it comes to you You are so beautiful - thats all I have so far but I will complete it soon __________________ I want to say Thanks for your grace And your ability to take my weight When I lean on you Your skin is so true I guess I just miss you

05-12-2005, 08:39 AM	#405
Uno- X Eskimo CSI Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 14,495	coughI'mstillwaitingforasongaboutmecough it's beatiful Nate. as ever. love ur new siggie. __________________ Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face? Do you realize we're floating in space?

05-12-2005, 08:48 AM	#407
Uno- X Eskimo CSI Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 14,495	blush thanks..but they are not. __________________ Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face? Do you realize we're floating in space?

05-12-2005, 08:50 AM	#409
Uno- X Eskimo CSI Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 14,495	sigh oh well why would they be really.. who's that lass? do I know I her?.... __________________ Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face? Do you realize we're floating in space?

05-12-2005, 08:55 AM	#411
Uno- X Eskimo CSI Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 14,495	bangs my head against that wall doooooooh....of course I remember Joey. thought u were over her? __________________ Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face? Do you realize we're floating in space?

05-12-2005, 09:04 AM	#413
Uno- X Eskimo CSI Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 14,495	worse? it would have been better. she wouldnt have broken ur heart. __________________ Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face? Do you realize we're floating in space?

05-12-2005, 09:10 AM	#414
Nathaniel Debauched Eskimo Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: England Posts: 1,999	yeah I know, but I wouldnt be me if my heart wasn't permanently in pieces, and she is so beautiful. __________________ I want to say Thanks for your grace And your ability to take my weight When I lean on you Your skin is so true I guess I just miss you

05-12-2005, 09:11 AM	#415
Uno- X Eskimo CSI Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 14,495	Nathan! forget her! think about fatsy.... __________________ Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face? Do you realize we're floating in space?

05-12-2005, 09:24 AM	#416
Nathaniel Debauched Eskimo Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: England Posts: 1,999	No I will not, and he is a CAT! Contrary to popular belief I am not into bestiality. __________________ I want to say Thanks for your grace And your ability to take my weight When I lean on you Your skin is so true I guess I just miss you

05-12-2005, 09:25 AM	#417
Uno- X Eskimo CSI Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 14,495	the cure have a song about cats...eeeeh love cats! __________________ Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face? Do you realize we're floating in space?

05-12-2005, 09:27 AM	#418
Nathaniel Debauched Eskimo Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: England Posts: 1,999	yes they do and it is the worst song the cure have ever done __________________ I want to say Thanks for your grace And your ability to take my weight When I lean on you Your skin is so true I guess I just miss you

05-12-2005, 09:28 AM	#419
Uno- X Eskimo CSI Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 14,495	I like it....covers my eyes __________________ Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face? Do you realize we're floating in space?

05-12-2005, 10:37 AM	#420
Juzzza Eskimo Regular Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Jersey Posts: 924	Hopeless Romantic When I'm cold with the 'ness' of lonely I wrap sin around my shoulders like a cloak drink JD on ice like a bourbon fish and buy cigarettes even though I don't smoke leave the gentleman's club still empty my wallet light about one hundred or three I'm one of the suckers deluded to think 'hey, I think she really liked me' Maybe I'm just unlucky Maybe I'm a romantic I'm definitely hopeless but tonight I just need someone to smile at me __________________ www.justinthorne.com ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ 'Ninjas killed my family, I need money for Kung-Fu lessons'... homeless guy's sign, New York (May 2005) http://www.myspace.com/justinthorne http://www.myspace.com/jtintheshadows

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