Well, I wrote this song which sounds like Damo-influenced...

dmbit · 06-04-2005, 10:44 AM

Hi all! I'm not a musician, but recently I wrote this song, which happens to be much Damo-sounding, so I thought you may like it... well, of course I'm not as good as Damien, the lyrics are a bit banal, my intonation isn't always perfect and so on, but I hope you'll forgive me for that

You can download it here: http://www.mclink.it/personal/MJ8917/

It's the third file from the list.

Unfortunately for you, the song is in Italian, so I'm writing the lyrics and a tentative of translation (it's a very poor translation... if anyone can correct it, please do it! For example, I didn't know how to translate "così sia", which is a sort of "amen" - the whole song is a sort of a prayer, though not to a God)

Hope you'll like it... since I guess the real addressee of the song will never listen to it, I loved to share it with you at least

****

Brucia questa danza dentro me
E' un motivo isterico che non lascia pace
Stringo i denti e cerco un'armonia
Che non si trova
Apro le mie braccia e penso a te
Poi socchiudo gli occhi per provare a raggiungerti
Posso scomparire se lo vuoi
Ma parlami tu che lo puoi

Salvami adesso
Credo che ancora una strada ci sia
Dammi un segnale e così sia

Fata mia, insegnami la verità
Aiutami a combattere il dolore che c'è
Perdonami, sappi che comunque andrà
Non ti scorderò, no, mai, mai, mai

E' come un sogno, davvero
Non mi credi?
E' difficile
Svegliarsi, sai?
Dammi vita
Avrai l'anima mia
Dammi luce
Dammi la serenità

Salvami adesso
Il tuo sorriso sarà la mia via
Lancia quest'ultima magia

Fata mia, insegnami ciò che non so
Aiutami a combattere il dolore che c'è
Perdonami, sappi che comunque andrà
Non ti scorderò, no, mai, mai, mai

****

This dance is burning inside
It's an hysteric tune that doesn't gives peace
I grit my teeth and look for some harmony
which cannot be found
I open my arms and think of you
Then I half-close my eyes to try to reach you
If you want to, I can disappear
But please speak to me, you who can do that

Save me now
I believe there's still a way
Give me a sign, and let it go

My fairy, teach me the truth
Help me to fight the pain there is
Forgive me, you have to understand that - no matter how it goes
I will not forget you, no
Never ever ever

It's like a dream indeed
Don't you believe me?
It is difficult to wake up, do you know?
Give me life, you'll have my soul
Give me light, give me serenity

Save me now
Your smile will be my way
Cast this last spell

My fairy, teach me what I don't know
Help me to fight the pain there is
Forgive me, you have to understand that - no matter how it goes
I will not forget you, no
Never ever ever

Niko · 06-04-2005, 11:53 AM

The guitar part is lovely! Very reminiscent of Delicate. I can't see how you can claim that you're not a musician if you're capable of writing something like that!

PenguinBoy · 06-04-2005, 01:28 PM

it does sound very like delicate at the begining, but later on it's lovely, i love it even without understanding, i love ur lil vocal tremelo, i dno if that what u meant as "but I hope you'll forgive me for that", but i quite like it out, there is a bit wher u shift out of key but that's nothing. i love the song and words are beautiful, as is the language actually. well done

dana · 06-04-2005, 01:42 PM

Benissimo! Anch'io mi piace la chitarra e le parole (?). Mi dispiace, ma non parlo bene l'italiano...

SilentNight · 06-04-2005, 03:46 PM

yeah, love the guitar parts

dmbit · 06-04-2005, 03:47 PM

Wow, thanks a lot, you're very very kind

Actually, the guitar part is quite similar to delicate (I think I even use the capo at the same fret). I guess, as I wrote on the thread title, I'm so much influenced by Damo kind of playing that I couldn't avoid it... or maybe it's a kind of tribute.
As for me, I'm not a musician as I play for myself only... I rarely write songs, but this time I had to... the song is autobiographical, so it was a little vent

PenguinBoy · 06-04-2005, 04:12 PM

maybe u should start playing more to other people, i'm sure they'd like it, i know i do

. i've got no problem with it sounding like delicate at the begining! i think it's cool that u have taken influence from damo.

dmbit · 06-24-2005, 10:12 AM

For those of you who liked my thing (BTW thanks a lot, I love you!) I just recorded it again... just for you!

It's just the same song, but I think I made it a little better... there's a point in the second verse where I took the wrong note and I had to correct it, but in my opinion this is a better version than the previous one. It came out to be a nine-minutes piece... but as I said, it's a little vent for an ill heart, so I had to do it... thanks for your patience and sorry for bugging!

you can download from the usual page http://www.mclink.it/personal/MJ8917/
The song is "Senza titolo" (no-titled), it should be the latest one

PAgirl9 · 06-24-2005, 03:11 PM

I love each and every one-but my favorites are your italian ones-though Idon't know italian-I love them the same. I'm glad your sharing your music with someone- it deserves to heard. Your so talented,I admire your modesty.

dmbit · 06-24-2005, 08:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by PAgirl9

I love each and every one-but my favorites are your italian ones-though Idon't know italian-I love them the same. I'm glad your sharing your music with someone- it deserves to heard. Your so talented,I admire your modesty.

Do you mean you listened to all of my recordings? Wow, I'm so honoured of that! I thank you from the bottom of my heart for the time you took to listen to all of that stuff!
Actually, most of them are covers... I havn't written many songs. And some were just experiments, or recordings for friends

But I'm so glad that you liked them, and you even prefer my song to the others... wow! I'm blushing

SilentNight · 06-25-2005, 02:22 PM

it sounds better, even your voice changed a bit, clearer. but you need to find someone like Lisa to sing that long "la...aaah...." part

. as before, the guitar part is beautiful

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dmbit · 06-25-2005, 05:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by SilentNight

it sounds better, even your voice changed a bit, clearer. but you need to find someone like Lisa to sing that long "la...aaah...." part

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hey, that would be great indeed! but the only angel like her that I know is the addressee of the song

Thanks a lot for your time!

PAgirl9 · 07-03-2005, 08:10 PM

your work is deserving of praise

Shaftage · 07-04-2005, 03:34 AM

Wow Dmbit......a truely moving work.........I like the passion that comes thru in your performance......did you write this (Senza titolo) for someone special?.......

I also agree with Penguin boy.....the falseto/tremolo with your voice is unique....with more work....a little more experience and a small dose of confidence you could do very well......I wonder if you sometimes find it as difficult as I do to forget about the "tape rolling"?

I like the accent on your version of gravedigger....(I have yet to learn that song as I am horrible at reading tabs)....... you cover that quite well if you focus on your pronunceation....and I find the part where you change and go up a 7th vocally intresting.....practice keeping that section closer to the way youve done it before you do "gravedigger triplet riff .... (I can only imagine how hard it must be to sing in a 2nd language...)

I hope you find none of my ramblings insulting......I am very critical of my own works.......and I am always looking for an outside source to give input.......

Getting to the point, would you mind if I used some of your song lyrics you have translated for us?........I would like to challenge myself to make an english version, with only minor changes in rhyme and pentometer to suit the translation........ I too can relate to feelings that run as deep.......

Keep up the good work......
My Reguards, Shaftage

06-04-2005, 10:44 AM	#1
dmbit Eskimo Regular Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Italy Posts: 172	Well, I wrote this song which sounds like Damo-influenced... Hi all! I'm not a musician, but recently I wrote this song, which happens to be much Damo-sounding, so I thought you may like it... well, of course I'm not as good as Damien, the lyrics are a bit banal, my intonation isn't always perfect and so on, but I hope you'll forgive me for that You can download it here: http://www.mclink.it/personal/MJ8917/ It's the third file from the list. Unfortunately for you, the song is in Italian, so I'm writing the lyrics and a tentative of translation (it's a very poor translation... if anyone can correct it, please do it! For example, I didn't know how to translate "così sia", which is a sort of "amen" - the whole song is a sort of a prayer, though not to a God) Hope you'll like it... since I guess the real addressee of the song will never listen to it, I loved to share it with you at least ** Brucia questa danza dentro me E' un motivo isterico che non lascia pace Stringo i denti e cerco un'armonia Che non si trova Apro le mie braccia e penso a te Poi socchiudo gli occhi per provare a raggiungerti Posso scomparire se lo vuoi Ma parlami tu che lo puoi Salvami adesso Credo che ancora una strada ci sia Dammi un segnale e così sia Fata mia, insegnami la verità Aiutami a combattere il dolore che c'è Perdonami, sappi che comunque andrà Non ti scorderò, no, mai, mai, mai E' come un sogno, davvero Non mi credi? E' difficile Svegliarsi, sai? Dammi vita Avrai l'anima mia Dammi luce Dammi la serenità Salvami adesso Il tuo sorriso sarà la mia via Lancia quest'ultima magia Fata mia, insegnami ciò che non so Aiutami a combattere il dolore che c'è Perdonami, sappi che comunque andrà Non ti scorderò, no, mai, mai, mai ** This dance is burning inside It's an hysteric tune that doesn't gives peace I grit my teeth and look for some harmony which cannot be found I open my arms and think of you Then I half-close my eyes to try to reach you If you want to, I can disappear But please speak to me, you who can do that Save me now I believe there's still a way Give me a sign, and let it go My fairy, teach me the truth Help me to fight the pain there is Forgive me, you have to understand that - no matter how it goes I will not forget you, no Never ever ever It's like a dream indeed Don't you believe me? It is difficult to wake up, do you know? Give me life, you'll have my soul Give me light, give me serenity Save me now Your smile will be my way Cast this last spell My fairy, teach me what I don't know Help me to fight the pain there is Forgive me, you have to understand that - no matter how it goes I will not forget you, no Never ever ever __________________ Luigi Don't lose the dreams inside your head Last edited by dmbit; 06-04-2005 at 05:23 PM.

06-04-2005, 11:53 AM	#2
Niko Eskimo Regular Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: United Kingdom Posts: 419	The guitar part is lovely! Very reminiscent of Delicate. I can't see how you can claim that you're not a musician if you're capable of writing something like that! __________________ Hush child, I'm eating a Snickers

06-04-2005, 01:28 PM	#3
PenguinBoy Appreciative Minion Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Harlington, Beds, UK. Posts: 1,695	it does sound very like delicate at the begining, but later on it's lovely, i love it even without understanding, i love ur lil vocal tremelo, i dno if that what u meant as "but I hope you'll forgive me for that", but i quite like it out, there is a bit wher u shift out of key but that's nothing. i love the song and words are beautiful, as is the language actually. well done __________________ Good eyes see nothing to shoot, Good Feet Feel good giving up good boots. Myspace - My Music - My Last.fm Profile- My LiveJournal - I'm Jacob

06-04-2005, 01:42 PM	#4
dana Eskimo Regular Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: United Kingdom Posts: 144	Benissimo! Anch'io mi piace la chitarra e le parole (?). Mi dispiace, ma non parlo bene l'italiano... __________________ "As long as she remains under arrest, none of us is truly free." Desmond Tutu Free Aung San Suu Kyi

06-04-2005, 03:46 PM	#5
SilentNight Eskimo Regular Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 901	yeah, love the guitar parts __________________ Let love be love!

06-04-2005, 03:47 PM	#6
dmbit Eskimo Regular Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Italy Posts: 172	Wow, thanks a lot, you're very very kind Actually, the guitar part is quite similar to delicate (I think I even use the capo at the same fret). I guess, as I wrote on the thread title, I'm so much influenced by Damo kind of playing that I couldn't avoid it... or maybe it's a kind of tribute. As for me, I'm not a musician as I play for myself only... I rarely write songs, but this time I had to... the song is autobiographical, so it was a little vent __________________ Luigi Don't lose the dreams inside your head

06-04-2005, 04:12 PM	#7
PenguinBoy Appreciative Minion Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Harlington, Beds, UK. Posts: 1,695	maybe u should start playing more to other people, i'm sure they'd like it, i know i do . i've got no problem with it sounding like delicate at the begining! i think it's cool that u have taken influence from damo. __________________ Good eyes see nothing to shoot, Good Feet Feel good giving up good boots. Myspace - My Music - My Last.fm Profile- My LiveJournal - I'm Jacob

06-24-2005, 10:12 AM	#8
dmbit Eskimo Regular Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Italy Posts: 172	For those of you who liked my thing (BTW thanks a lot, I love you!) I just recorded it again... just for you! It's just the same song, but I think I made it a little better... there's a point in the second verse where I took the wrong note and I had to correct it, but in my opinion this is a better version than the previous one. It came out to be a nine-minutes piece... but as I said, it's a little vent for an ill heart, so I had to do it... thanks for your patience and sorry for bugging! you can download from the usual page http://www.mclink.it/personal/MJ8917/ The song is "Senza titolo" (no-titled), it should be the latest one __________________ Luigi Don't lose the dreams inside your head

06-24-2005, 03:11 PM	#9
PAgirl9 Word painter Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Location: Here in front of the computer reading your messages.Where I live: PA,USA Posts: 463	I love each and every one-but my favorites are your italian ones-though Idon't know italian-I love them the same. I'm glad your sharing your music with someone- it deserves to heard. Your so talented,I admire your modesty. __________________ ~Amanda~ "Believe it or not George isn't at home please leave a message at the BEEP, I must be out or I'd pick up the phone, Where Could I Be?, Belive it or not I'm not home!" "I don't have an MD or Law degree- I have a bachelors in kicking ass in taking names,"

06-25-2005, 02:22 PM	#11
SilentNight Eskimo Regular Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 901	it sounds better, even your voice changed a bit, clearer. but you need to find someone like Lisa to sing that long "la...aaah...." part. as before, the guitar part is beautiful. __________________ Let love be love!

07-03-2005, 08:10 PM	#13
PAgirl9 Word painter Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Location: Here in front of the computer reading your messages.Where I live: PA,USA Posts: 463	your work is deserving of praise __________________ ~Amanda~ "Believe it or not George isn't at home please leave a message at the BEEP, I must be out or I'd pick up the phone, Where Could I Be?, Belive it or not I'm not home!" "I don't have an MD or Law degree- I have a bachelors in kicking ass in taking names,"

07-04-2005, 03:34 AM	#14
Shaftage Eskimo Philosophicalizer Join Date: May 2005 Location: Kokomo, IN USA Posts: 56	Wow Dmbit......a truely moving work.........I like the passion that comes thru in your performance......did you write this (Senza titolo) for someone special?....... I also agree with Penguin boy.....the falseto/tremolo with your voice is unique....with more work....a little more experience and a small dose of confidence you could do very well......I wonder if you sometimes find it as difficult as I do to forget about the "tape rolling"? I like the accent on your version of gravedigger....(I have yet to learn that song as I am horrible at reading tabs)....... you cover that quite well if you focus on your pronunceation....and I find the part where you change and go up a 7th vocally intresting.....practice keeping that section closer to the way youve done it before you do "gravedigger triplet riff .... (I can only imagine how hard it must be to sing in a 2nd language...) I hope you find none of my ramblings insulting......I am very critical of my own works.......and I am always looking for an outside source to give input....... Getting to the point, would you mind if I used some of your song lyrics you have translated for us?........I would like to challenge myself to make an english version, with only minor changes in rhyme and pentometer to suit the translation........ I too can relate to feelings that run as deep....... Keep up the good work...... My Reguards, Shaftage