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The Fire
07-25-2005, 10:30 PM
In this world of change
nothing wich comes can stay
and nothing which goes is lost
yet the god times and the bad
will often lead our way
but can also lead us astray

Livo
07-26-2005, 10:31 PM
monsters

my monster listens to me, he can always hear
my monster's always with me, he is always near
he helps out when i'm feeling blue,
helps out when i'm happy too

you don't know how nice my monster can be

my monster knows who you are
my monster knows where you live
next time you see my monster walking down the street
run for it, he knows you're not so sweet

i've sent my monster after you
and you don't know what my monster can do

my monster takes care of me
and you don't know how nice my monster can be

Nathaniel
07-30-2005, 07:07 PM
i'm in the process of writing - or trying to write some stuff at the moment and i was wondering if anyone has any tips for composing lyrics? music comes easily to me, but words, not so....i was wondering is there anything you can do to improve this or is it simply a case of divine inspiration?


alright mate, I am not much of a lyricist but I find I usually build songs around one line or one idea and it normally just flows after that. Eg, I had the idea that the white bit on your wrist where your watch has been when you get a tan represents winter - bad - I ended up writing a song about when I was dumped and me being compared to that white bit that represents winter - if that makes any sense? Probably not so I will be quiet now. I will say this however, writing melancholy seems to be easier than writing happy.

The Pink Girly
07-30-2005, 11:02 PM
^"not much of a lyricist"!?!!? pah! so silly! where have you been all my life anyway nathan?! i miss my hubby!
ur sig is great btw what is it?
im off to france tomorrow chick but i'll speak to u after hopefully xxxxx

Miss Pink
07-30-2005, 11:38 PM
i'm really shy about my songs, but here's one of them anyway:

My Funeral


Enter my friend

This is the end

In a room where

Friends are everywhere



And I’ll be the one lying down

There’ll be sitting around

There’ll be crying

But I will be quiet



Sing me a song

Sing loud! I am gone

Don’t let sorrow

Eat you heart and soul



And you’ll never see me again

Unless I can turn in-

to a butterfly…

Then I’ll leave my cocoon

And I’ll find you as soon as I can

To sit on your hand…



At my funeral





babes thats so beautiful

samuelle
07-31-2005, 02:25 AM
off the road

maybe you were too busy
quoting kerouac
as you failed to notice
the world walked away.

positive fortune,
negative reinforcement.
i should apologize for having never
seen the inside
of your head or
for never trying.

maybe i was too busy
looking out for those who cared
and bearing my soul
to notice your need.

Tink
07-31-2005, 08:55 PM
In depth we think
Yet miss so much,
That simple smile we saw each time
Now truly seen for the beauty
To have in ours and share with love
And each having taken a gift.
A moment we cannot recall
Yet know through a smell, a touch, a sound
Is captured now and forever.
Let the waters fall
But not so much
As to not remember the feeling, that smile
That warm underglow of your moment shared.
Take from it the spirit, plant those seeds
And let it grow within youself
Let it grow and each time relive your moment.

Katie Clements 2005

joe_folds_5
08-01-2005, 12:59 AM
this is a song that starts as a story. its about a young couple who are in love for the first time, and as they get more serious the girl is realising that theres so much more she wants to experience, and the boy thinks he can give her this by just running away together. so she goes along but leaves after one night. but in her heart she still believes that one day theyl be back together but they both just need to do their own thing for a bit.

the story part is totally fictional just a nice way to sum it up think.

we walked in a damp night,
the rain wet our toes,
said we'd just lose control,
and see where it goes

followed a path,
to find where it went,
came to a clearing,
and i put up the tent

and for a while,
we just watched the skies,
i coulda swore for a second,
i saw tears fill your eyes,

you wrote a poem,
and i wrote a song,
slept through the morning,
when i woke, you had gone

holding back everything,
i packed up and got going,
and on the way home,
started reading your poem

and it said...

no matter what happens,
we seem to be,
locked in a cross,
but i need to be free

so love and have lovers
the same as me,
but theres always something with you,
that makes me feel differently

shiver,
touch,
let go of this crutch

fall down,
stop,
let go of this rock,

let go,
float,
scream from the back of your throat



joeallenonline.com

The Fire
08-02-2005, 07:14 PM
Change (always)

In this world of change
nothing which comes can stay
and nothing which goes is lost

yet the good times and our past
will often lead our way
but can also lead us astray

You need to open up your mind
take a long deep look inside
dont just think you can run and hide

from the feelings you have right now
to the moments you had back then
back then

Chorus....

You are what you think
You are what you go for
You are what you do

Its a long and winding road
so don't be afraid of the next bend
just try stick with it till the end

BIG TIM
08-03-2005, 06:43 AM
off the road

maybe you were too busy
quoting kerouac
as you failed to notice
the world walked away.

positive fortune,
negative reinforcement.
i should apologize for having never
seen the inside
of your head or
for never trying.

maybe i was too busy
looking out for those who cared
and bearing my soul
to notice your need.
Hey Samuelle,
I love your lyrics they are so powerful. that last verse is painful to read.
great lyric though.

damofan
08-03-2005, 08:14 PM
[QUOTE=cello_pudding]when friends friends become more
you toss your heart to a floor
that spins around towards two doors
i hold both open for you

i'm not asking you to step through
don't let my words leads your way
no pretty song, or pretty face
we aren't the ones to choose it.

This is sooo fitting for me. I fell in love with my best mates friend at university...been together now for 8 months, but the initial situation is difficult.

Nathaniel
08-04-2005, 02:09 PM
hello just fisnihed writing the opening lyrics for a new song - Una doesnt like my use of the word ulcers whereas I do - let me know what you think

Untitled

come and see these wounds,
that are marked along my side,
I find it easier to lie,
but sometimes I tell the truth.
Did you come and see inside,
and let out a huge sigh,
because I've never been right
and you kissed me goodnight
didnt know it was goodbye.

And the drugs are in my past,
but I couldnt let us last,
ulcers in my mouth,
when you nutured all my doubt
in me, I couldnt smile
so I, I just got high
and when you kissed me that goodnight
didnt know it was goodbye

Chorus:

and what we had, it was better than this, better than this
and what we had, it was better than this, better than this, better than this
anything is, better than this, better than this, better than this,
anything is, better than this, we were better than this, better than this.

Juzzza
08-08-2005, 09:28 AM
Sneaky disguise

You're making me uneasy
why're you looking at me that way
we've been friends now for so long
I've never thought of you any other way

just look at those curves
and where'd you get those eyes
have you been wearing
some kind of sneaky disguise

I think we need time, give me some quarter
what if we drift into troubled water
I'm seeing you through different eyes

we used to talk about anything
including who was in your bed
now when you talk about any other guy
it's a spear of jealousy instead

don't talk about what we have to lose
this isn't a friendship anymore
to believe that is to deny the truth
I love you, that's for sure

I think we need time, give me some quarter
what if we drift into troubled water
I'm seeing you through different eyes

Miss Pink
08-08-2005, 01:09 PM
Him and I

well you held me when i was younger
innocent thoughts of mine
we strolled around together
sipping water with nothing but time on our hands

But all things changed
she came along
with her cheap dyed hair
and a polyester sarong

do you miss my kiss?
as i cant remember yours
do you wear the ring i bought you
or is it discarded in a drawer?
do you miss my dark eyes?
or my perfect white smile?
do you run around in circles,
just to be part of her mile?


now i hold him like a stranger
you're far from danger
of my psychotic little mind
extraordinarly i find
our memories abused and
your morals are disused

But all things changed
she came along
with her cheap dyed hair
and a polyester sarong

Does he hold your hand?
go for walks bear foot on the sand?
does he drive you wild?
do things to you that make you laugh like a child?

if he sets you free give him
a kiss from you and me.
if he makes you cry
just take out that knife as you
join "him and i"

Closing_Doors
08-08-2005, 08:22 PM
Miss Pink, don't take this the wrong way, but that's plagiarism at its' most blatant. There's nothing wrong with it, in and of itself, but it's more or less Accidental Babies word for word. I suppose everybody does it themselves when they're starting out writing stuff but I'd view it as a bad thing.....maybe you disagree. It's up to you, just giving some feedback (BTW may I ask where your sig is from?)

Also, Nathaniel I think the ulcers line is fine :smiley20:

Livo
08-10-2005, 01:12 PM
through glass eyes

pull the ringpull off at 'c'
cut my finger, make it bleed
take my hands and come with me
we'll see things you'll never see

i wish i could bleed cos since you're gone
my heart's stopped beating and all feeling is lost
i know when i see you, if only in my sleep
times starts to cry and eternity starts to weep
cos my love can last longer than time

this fog is so thick, i just cannot see
looking through glass eyes, looking to believe

your stories enthrall me, hanging off every word
please don't go, stay here with me
but you get on your bike and i know i'll never see you again
but i see you every night and i watch you by day
i'm always with you even though you'll never know

this fog is so thick, i just cannot see
looking through glass eyes, looking to believe

The Fire
08-10-2005, 11:59 PM
OH..let's pretend

And i knew that my time had come
when i saw you, chewing on my bestfriends gum
and i wondered what the **** i'd done
now my heart's like a loaded gun

ready to explode, oh oh oh
ready to explode, oh oh oh
oh oh oh ooh

Then i saw you walking down my street
i thought that you were the type of girl i'd like to meet
and i wondered how i could be so discreet
because i like the way that you move your feet

when you walk oh oh oh oh
when you walk oh oh oh oh
oh oh oh oh oooh

from the moment that we had our first kiss
i knew that our relationship would be hit or miss
i've never had such good times as this
cos when i'm with you my life is bliss

when i'm with you oh oh oh
when i'm with you oh oh oh
oh oh oh oh oooh

this fling were having has about had its time
how you doing because i feel fine
we couldn't even walk together in a straight line
but i will always want you to be mine

your in my mind oh oh oh
your in my mind oh oh oh
oh oh oh oh ooh

now it's time for this story to end
i've told you alot of tales my good friend
maybe things that i can't amend
because it was all just 'lets pretend'

oh oh oh oh
oh oh oh oooh
oh oh oh oh
oh oh oh oooh

PenguinBoy
08-11-2005, 12:06 AM
the fire, that's such a cute song lol. i really like it.

livo my dear that's beauty and talent, right there... i loves it.

Livo
08-12-2005, 01:59 PM
livo my dear that's beauty and talent, right there... i loves it.

thank you! :smiley1:

samuelle
08-12-2005, 06:48 PM
^good stuff! :smiley20:

i especially like this line: "You played the fool, a modern clown." it invokes Shakespearean characters for me.

SisterMidnight
08-13-2005, 06:01 AM
instead of unpacking as i should be doing, i wrote this song.


you arrived safely then :)

i really like this one your lyrics are usually more freeform poetry style (which i love btw) but this one has such a strong cadence to it i can almost hear the car wheels slapping on the highway in rhythm with the words... it's dynamic and really nice imagery, very sensual

oceansheep
08-15-2005, 12:28 AM
oh :) I'm up for some shameless self advertising of my band COLERIDGE haha, I wrote this a while back it's called Reach....

Find myself, drifting through an ocean.
Find myself, locked in this emotion.
Open up, and remove disguise.
Sun shines in; use the light to open up your eyes…

This feels too real to be pretend…

Ocean breaks, waves roll through my head.
Contemplates, the aforementioned words could burn instead.

Light the candle, the flame will comprehend…

I burn like the sun.
The world’s come undone.
What will we become now?

This feels to real to be pretend, I depend…

I burn like the sun.
The world’s come undone.
What will we become now?

I want to reach her other side…
I want to reach her other side…

:)

distance
08-19-2005, 02:27 PM
wrote this a little while back...opinions welcomed... its called distance...

my tears fall like raindrops now
but it cant rain all the time he said.
without her smile it'll rain forever,
no matter what anyone says.

like a dark cloud across the sky
she blocked out my sun
and started the rain again.

hear a crow cry in the distance
feel comforted by this,
it the nearest sound to my heart breaking,
as my tears disappear in the rain.

Livo
08-19-2005, 10:58 PM
portrait (happy new year)

there's a portrait in my attic
not looking so great
there are skeletons in my closet
getting more irate

i've got bridges to cross
and roads to travel
i've got oceans to swim
and songs to unravel

happy new year, sweet sixteen
soon you'll learn the world ain't what it seems

to see your name
on my screen
lights up my day
makes it brighter than it seems

happy new year, sweet sixteen
soon you'll learn the world ain't what it seems

PenguinBoy
08-20-2005, 02:08 AM
livi, that's lush, i love it so so much, beautiful. also, distance... that's inspired. and oceansheep, that's equally as sweet.
(http://www.eskimofriends.com/forum/member.php?u=3491)

PenguinBoy
08-22-2005, 02:11 AM
HAHA!! i've written a song at last, it's been a long time past, since i wrote one months ago, but here low and behold. i'm thinking in rhyme since writing it, spent only an intense hour with it!

It's a bit grusome... appologies to "anti-fox" hunters or anti-"fox hunters" (i thought that up myself :D ), if ur offended just think of how it demonstrates the "sheer brutality and primative nature of the sport", or if ur in another way offended, then perhaps you could see it as a demonstration of how "the sport is a natural expression of sacred human instinct". It actually has nothing to do with fox hunting as a main topic, the hunters are inportant as the subject. It was originaly meant to be a celebration of escapism, but intense songs which come quickly are induced by high speed and energy which inturn bring about spontanious twists and added depths.

My eternal blabbering is due to my extreme excitement in finally having written a fresh song! so finally, here it is!....

THE HUNT

We've Taken off our watches,
We've Hung them on the trees,
We've torn off all our clothing,
And thrown them to the leaves.

Our Bare feet are in soil,
We're nude not vunerable,
As We prepare for battle,
We don't fake honerable.

Watch our eyes glow red
It's the blood we've bled
We forget our heads
Naught between us said

Just in our hands the rocks

We climb up rocks and verges,
To her our eyes are locked,
We stalk our bloody victim,
Then pummel her with rocks.

We Feast upon her body,
Remember what it's like,
To be a man and hunter,
Remember we can fight.

Watch our eyes glow red
It's the blood we've bled
We forget our heads
Naught between us said

Just in our hands the rocks
She is just a fox

We put back on our watches,
We swing them from the trees,
We sew back up our clothing,
And brush off all the leaves.

The Fire
08-22-2005, 11:00 PM
Don't ever let anybody
tell you that you
cant ever be a hero
just stand up tall
and wear your crown of laurel
even if your score is zero

oh my god
i can't believe the things
you make us go through
oh my god
i can't believe the the
things you make us do

We're here for a good time
not a long time
so why dont you make the most of that
just stand up tall and proud
even if you can't
even wear a top hat

oh my god
i can't believe the things
you make us go through
oh my god
i cant believe the the
things you make us do

just plant a seed to make a tree
and watch it grow so very high
then watch the baby birds leave their nests
all because they need to learn to fly

oh my god
i can believe the things
that you make us go through
oh my god
i cant believe the the
things you make us do

Everybodys got the right to be a hero
so don't stand down
dont give up the fight
Just wear your crown of laurel
upon your head
and everything will be alright

Your're a hero
your're a hero

Your're a hero
your're a hero

The Fire
08-23-2005, 07:53 PM
hey all,

i've posted some of my songs on a website i've joined. you can have a listen at 'A song about laurel' on there.

Please be patient with me as i'm new to all this recording stuff and i aint the best singer, but who cares..

The recordings are a bit rought as i used a compiter mic and a min-disc to record, hi-tech stuff..also musically they aint perfect.. check them out and any comment would be good..

thanks


www.myspace.com/theelasticband

Miss Pink
08-24-2005, 01:28 PM
i wrote three songs last night when i couldn't sleep

Song 1

Lying down, just clear the mind
as i hide you in the dark of my
psychotic little mind

my future draws closer, i
don't know what path to choose
since you've got her
I've nothing to loose

i fear replacement, so I
hide me with my face paint
as i draw on my smile

Dont touch me, you'll shake the line,
Dont kiss me, you'll read my mind,
Dont speak to me, I haven't go the time



Song 2

You fell for me, i had you at hello
I had you at my feet, but I didn't even know
But you broke her and let me to clean up the tears

I watched her squirm as she read what you wrote
I saw her shiver as she asked for Trisha's coat
I saw her cry, I heard you lie
But you didn't even know

You said you loved me, but
turned on me when i said no
"It takes 3 minutes to fall for you"
but i didn't even know
"I've loved you since January"
Please please just go

She sacrificed her dignity
And you took her virginity
Criticised my fragility
when i took me away

I didnt fall at your knees
I didnt beg please
I didnt bat an eye lid
or be a dick tease

I told the truth
Didn't spoof
as you walk away in shame
there's only you to blame


SONG 3

the lightning strikes, the lights go out
still hear screams and shout
walls rattle during battle
run for it the knife has been pulled out
just waiting around
dont get found
its nice in my corner i dont hear a sound

Cuts and bruises
someone chooses
the pills are red wine
will go down just fine

Dont know its gonna happen
everything is on hold
its dark enough to drive me crazy
is this what the future holds
run, run for shelter - choose a god to pray in
but be careful what your saying

Cuts and bruises
someone chooses
the pills are red wine
will go down just fine

its still hard to say you've found the truth
"no i swear i just fell and chipped a tooth"
get a masters degree in the lying disease
win 1st place for keeping the smile on my face

Gaslight
08-26-2005, 03:41 PM
I’m suffocating from
Your tragedy
Cause I never breathe
What I can’t see
I never see what
I can touch
And I always talk
Way Too much

not me

I said I definitely wouldn’t
Then I went and did
Tried my very best
Put in my pathetic bid
As Mr. ****ing trustworthy
You’ve seen how far
That progressed and I feel
Like the scab of scurvy

not me

You could slice my face
Right off and wear it
And you’d be a better me
And better able to bear it
You’re very adept
At turning into her
I feel like a dog
An inbred cur

not me

Why can’t I
Be your savior
I can’t curtail
My stupid behavior

But it’s really ****ing me
Sorry

-------------

Clearly I want to be in pappa roach when I grow up... :smiley24:

flyaway
08-27-2005, 05:38 PM
Not to do with your lyrics gaslight. But that is by far the best avatar on the Igloo!

Gaslight
08-27-2005, 09:53 PM
thanks very much,I wouldn't feel safe if I didn't have a dancing milk carton.

That song is stuck in my head now.

Oh here, just to keep things pottering along:

We used to be the magic link
We were each others heros
Now we feel the heartache of
When 8 becomes two zeros

We used to be friends
Yeah ….well…

Feel the pain of splitting Siamese
Rushing in opposite directions
Feel the pain of silent company
Holy show of broken connections

We used to be friends
Yeah ….well…

I hurt for lack of this
I bleed for your absence
I quiver for the fact that now
Us is now strictly past tense

We used to be friends
Yeah ….well…

Now it’s all over
It’s all gone far away
You still have my cds
I don’t know what I can say

We used to be friends
Yeah ….well…

Miss Pink
08-28-2005, 01:07 PM
orion's belt


Ive seen you once or twice before
your eyes light up across the polished floor
you hold me tight in your embrace
as i long to kiss your face

oh ryans belt is easily removed
as i am small, i fit into the groove
its like i have so much to proove
but still its I that you must choose

not as young as you presume
imagine leading me into you room
make you feel so shiney bright
as i set your room alight

closer to me i must pull in
or is this love a mortal sin?
harder to the floor you pin
but now has the guilt kicked in?

Miss Pink
08-28-2005, 01:12 PM
My baby is dead

Hallelujah, my babys dead
you couldnt wait to get him in your bed
the sun is shining and i need a smoke
Hallelujah my babys broke

easy does it now dont be shy
i didnt know her babe was gonna die
holding hands you dont feel the shame
you dirty bit.ches gone and stole the fame

but what have you done?
what have you done?
cause Hallelujah now her
babe is dead

clean up those tears now dont you cry
you got my baby and
i dont know why

just think of the fun
and think of you son!!
he's you baby daddy
you must not lie

PenguinBoy
08-29-2005, 02:30 AM
MISS PINK!! ur like an amazing musical KEG!! i've only written one song in the last few months, and u've little loads in the last few days!! and they're excelent too, especially "My baby's Dead" it's too brilliant for words, and intriguing and revealing at the same time. :D:D

Miss Pink
08-29-2005, 11:19 AM
awwwwwww, thank you!!!! im very fattered! Im going through a really rough block both in my art and my music so every little rambling lyric helps! awwwwwwww where's the blush smilie?

flyaway
08-30-2005, 01:26 AM
I hate my lyrics as a rule. So I'll only post one set. It's the last song I wrote, a few hours ago:
(It was) Only One
Justify your hedonism to me.
Inky fingers will never lie.
Can we talk about time?
How you're greater than I?

When I give kisses,
You're first to take
While you're handing out promises
Mine's always first to break.

Explain the difference, please,
Of red ink, and angel's blood.
We can hold and slide.
Pray the feeling will subside.
For you are so much greater, greater than I.


It's about someone doing drugs, and you're having a **** time, and they're going on in your face about having such a wonderful life. But you're not pissed off because you love them. Hehe. There you go!

samuelle
08-31-2005, 10:50 PM
you arrived safely then :)

i really like this one your lyrics are usually more freeform poetry style (which i love btw) but this one has such a strong cadence to it i can almost hear the car wheels slapping on the highway in rhythm with the words... it's dynamic and really nice imagery, very sensual

:smiley4: thanks - i largely wrote this song in my head driving home from spokane after i dropped my husband and his brother off at the train station there so they could go back to north dakota, so it was definitely influenced by the feel of the road.

thanks, too, BIG TIM!

Livo
09-05-2005, 10:18 PM
white and blue

standing in the limelight
standing on my own two feet
standing to face the music
standing to face the heat

and when i dream of white and blue
i think of spires and castles too
when i dream all white and blue
i think of spires.. i think of you

standing up for myself
standing in a crowd
about as much importance
as a raindrop in a cloud

and when i dream of white and blue
i think of spires and castles too
when i dream all white and blue
i think of spires.. i think of you

and when my heart is black and blue
i think of sandstone and irn-bru
i dream on flags of white and blue
i think of scotland.. i think of you



this was started in edinburgh.. it's about the city itself and my brief but wonderful holiday there.. (anybody who's been there will understand it!)

Miss Pink
09-06-2005, 09:22 PM
i just wrote this on the spot, its very childish but i think its fun , and it depicets the state of my mind at the moment.


Betrayal

Betrayal is a messy thing
it makes me cry
it makes me sing

Betrayal is full of doubt
it makes me scream
it makes me shout

Betrayal can be done by text
on the phone
or even sex

Betrayal is a wonderful thing
it makes ME dance
it makes ME sing

it makes me seek a new romance
it makes me forget you and learn a new chant

stacey*k
09-10-2005, 01:01 AM
um...hi. I'm a newbie here, but i wanted to share with you guys some stuff that i wrote. I won't bore you with the details behind this song, but any feedback would be apprecaited


Untitled (for now)

You went before me, briefly
Not for long but enough to
Dig your claws in way too deep
This should not affect your sleep
But clearly does, and I come to ask
Why can’t you just let go?

You abuse my name behind my back
Think I don’t know but I pick up the slack
Mine, not yours, maybe once but nevermore
I don’t deserve the titles slut and whore
Why can’t you just let go?

And you act lovingly to my face
But hide knives behind our cold embrace
Please leave us now, pack up and go
We have what you can never know
Why won’t you just let go?

And though you claim I sent you to that dark place
Not one but two ran in the race
Possession is a funny thing
Objects, things, not human beings
Why won’t you let him go?

Late night messages, flirting and then
Think I don’t know, well think again
Every word, every deserate plea
I know, my dear, I know.
Just move on, for him, for me,
Lay your torch down and let him go.

PenguinBoy
09-10-2005, 01:30 AM
i just wrote this on the spot, its very childish but i think its fun , and it depicets the state of my mind at the moment.


Betrayal

Betrayal is a messy thing
it mekes me cry
it makes me sing

Betrayal is full of doubt
it makes me scream
it makes me shout

Betrayal can be done my text
on the phone
or even sex

Betrayal is a wonderful thing
it makes ME dance
it makes ME sing

it makes me seek a new romance
it makes me forget you and learn a new chant

simple yet affective, strange yet satisfying hum...i really like it as ever (the bastards... *shakes fist*)

flyaway, i like your lyrics, as a rule, it's really cool how u managed it, because ur description was a a bit whooooooa, "when someone's happier than you, because they're on drugs, but u don't care cos u love them", found those exact circumstances a bit different:smiley36:, but i think the lyrics themselves say allot more, i love ur symbolism and imagery. really good.

And livi, that's a brave lyric, i'd be too scared of writing a lyric like that, of clichés and tackyness, but u pulled it right off. *bows*

and newbie stacey! you're lyrics are lush! really poetic, they stand alone quite well. I'd like to hear how they sound with music.

flyaway
09-10-2005, 08:03 PM
flyaway, i like your lyrics, as a rule, it's really cool how u managed it, because ur description was a a bit whooooooa, "when someone's happier than you, because they're on drugs, but u don't care cos u love them", found those exact circumstances a bit different:smiley36:, but i think the lyrics themselves say allot more, i love ur symbolism and imagery. really good.



Thanks! haha The description was odd. It was part of the story behind it though, that this person was at a festival, took alot of drugs, and proceeded to tell me about it. I don't do drugs and had had the worst weekend of my life. Said person then continued to rub my face in what a wonderful time they'd had. Though I'm a bitter old grump, I couldn't help but be pleased that they'd had a good time.

Miss Pink
09-10-2005, 09:31 PM
that was like when i went to oxegen, a few of the ppl i went with got fu.cked off their face on pills

pills of all things, and at like 6 in the morning whilst trying 2 sleep in our tent we hear of of the pill poppers boasting about how many pills they just took, and how great they fell, anf how great they helt the last time they took pills


then 30 seconds later we hear said person puking their guts up

elfin
09-11-2005, 04:13 PM
hey i'm new here and usually wouldn't ever put any lyrics on here or anything its just i wrote some stuff which is kinda of a different style and i wanted to know if any of u think it works .. or if its just like .. well just crap. Honesty is what i'm after really.

The Letter

So the open book blew, and burned and blew.
I didn't realise I put a hammer in that envelope
and some knives.
Just a little bit closer, the plasters so close
and you've got some cream.
You didn't even try the fire exstinguisher
And that's fine,
But i think your'e colour blind
You forgot your glasses.

I bleed red.
But you're scared! So i'll bleed and scream on
while you panic.
That's ok I'll survive, I'll survive....

Burn all the words
Burn all the words
Burn all the paper
Burn all the words

Burn all the words.
You never replied.

PenguinBoy
09-11-2005, 05:08 PM
hey i'm new here and usually wouldn't ever put any lyrics on here or anything its just i wrote some stuff which is kinda of a different style and i wanted to know if any of u think it works .. or if its just like .. well just crap. Honesty is what i'm after really.

The Letter

So the open book blew, and burned and blew.
I didn't realise I put a hammer in that envelope
and some knives.
Just a little bit closer, the plasters so close
and you've got some cream.
You didn't even try the fire exstinguisher
And that's fine,
But i think your'e colour blind
You forgot your glasses.

I bleed red.
But you're scared! So i'll bleed and scream on
while you panic.
That's ok I'll survive, I'll survive....

Burn all the words
Burn all the words
Burn all the paper
Burn all the words

Burn all the words.
You never replied.

i fooking love it! i can relate to it to. i love the way the ending concludes it and sums it up.

flyaway
09-11-2005, 10:01 PM
Is it because I don't make you cry?
you're in love with the taste of your heartbroken eyes
My arms aren't strong enough to hold you up
I think you like to fall

I don't force you down, like a rootbound tree
keeping you fixed where you don't need to be
I won't keep you in a map
because I don't believe in that
Is this why you fear being close to me?

I'll demand an answer to where you go
I'll keep you so well hidden that you can't bloom and grow.
I'll take a way the books so you can never know.
And maybe then you'll feel close to me.

I can throw you in the dirt when you need to be held high
I will burn your feathers so you cannot fly
I will keep you so captive you'll beg me to die.
I'll say no, because I can't make you close to me.


If i treat you like dirt will you consider me then?
If i lie and decieve can we be more than friends?
If we're not connected from the start to the end...
does that mean you'll consider being close to me.


I will keep you in a room with artificial air
I will cover you up when you need to be bare
when there's only one tree on earth, I won't take you there.
This treatment you can't get away from, so you can't be close to me.

All I wanted was a chance.
I never got that.
Because I live by the rules and I respect you.
But you seem to love pain
and you can't walk away, so now it seems I must forget you.


This one is about someone who I love so much, but they're with someone who treats them horrendously. They say they will walk away from the situation, but they never do. So this is about, If I chose to treat this person in the same way, would they consider me then...

elfin
09-11-2005, 10:30 PM
i fooking love it! i can relate to it to. i love the way the ending concludes it and sums it up.
really? cool! thanks for the feedback means a lot!

The Fire
09-13-2005, 10:20 PM
Side by side

Freefall from the sky
feels like i can fly
into your arms
into your arms today

I'm walking next to you
We're talking bout the things we'd do
Feel your heart beat
your so close to me

but everybody needs a little time
to take control
of what they want
of what they need
of where they're going
and want to see

let me ask you a question
just wait right there
so what do you want
so what do you need
so where are you going
do you know where you've been

now everything will be okay
just as long as we stand
side by side
side by side

side by side
side by side
side by side
side by side

(fade out)

damofan
09-14-2005, 07:45 PM
So baby i'm leaving,
my backs to the door
Its my heart that lies bleeding,
i can't see you no more.

We never expected
that time would allow
our love to blossom ..with every hour

things i've said, things we've done
memories dont fade, like the setting sun
they stay in my memory and they will for all time
there's no reason to leave them, no reason to cry.

So...Dont see distance, just see us
Don't see the distance, don't make a fuss
coz i'll be here baby..we're never apart.

Distant in sight but close at heart.

(i've been with my girlfriend for 9 months...i go to university on sunday... 3 hours away. but i love her. ...just wrote this last night.)

snowbaby
09-15-2005, 12:15 AM
awww i really like it!! very nice damofan :)

Gaslight
09-18-2005, 09:02 AM
Paper my fall

Rip my tendons
Burn my blood
Kill my body
I’ve not been good

Found religion
hate became a shield
bathe in perfect light
all my sins revealed

“Salvation” brings me closer
closer to the pit
Serpent tempts me always
and I welcome it

Burnt my bridge
to you just now
Carry my cross
and slowly bow

-----------------------------

Need to talk

I felt my self covered in
her clear and present danger,
She was the composer
I the mere arranger
I almost tripped when we
danced on the head of a pin
Why tell our trite story,
it can be seen from within
The preternatural glowing,
the echo’s of future weeping
the monster in our castle
will rise its ugly creeping
Things are so cool, collected,
the worst heat beats soon upon us
The mystery of young enchantment
the canonization of misplaced trust


-------------------------------

Friendship in school

Hit me with the laser beams
Let me hear the darker dreams
I hear the purple rabbit calling
But she don’t wanna play, she’s stalling

Defrost before eating hot
I hear Francisco’s dad was shot
Intelligence crooks drown in shame
Now’s it’s time to taste the pain

Mystery to this verse’s meaning
Ugly queen’s forever preening
Distress not my fickle friend
This poem now is at an end
-----------------------------------


Sprite

I told her she had beauty in directions
Immeasurable to man
She called me a bull**** artist, said
My art had hit the fan.
I said that’s my installation
honey, it’s called my every love
She told me amazed her that
she couldn’t rise above

I said above isn’t all it’s cracked
up to be, if your not a big harp fan
She said she’d drink what she wanted and
she hoped I’d understand
said Music didn’t speak to her it just
held her prisoner for days
she told me she was still with bowie
swimming underneath the waves

she said jesus saves…………..
She said he saved her…..

I said that’s good…. I hope he’s as careful with my
soul as he is with is cash
When she was born for the second time she said
it was like all your sin gets mashed
I preferred the movie I said and then……

then she punched me….

till I bled…

elfin
09-20-2005, 04:55 PM
i like it. i like it a lot!

Nathaniel
09-25-2005, 05:24 PM
For Polly

Test This Bridge

No one said I would find you,
No one said you would be so beautiful,
No one said you would touch me without even touching my hand,
No one said you'd have a smile like runway lights on a return home

No one said you'd have eyes that waltz around my mind
No one said you would be so far away,
No one said you'd have skin that haunts my touch,
No one said you would be SO FAR AWAY

If this breaks then I'll know I am wrong
But I'll test this bridge that I walk upon
If this breaks then I'll know I am wrong
But I'll test this bridge that I walk upon
You're in my heart and in my soul
So please rain on me now before I lose control

No one said I'd be sitting here writing a song for you
No one said I'd be sitting here and I'll write a thousand more for you
No one said I would be mouthing your beautiful name
No one said but I'll see you again some day

If this breaks then I'll know I am wrong
But I'll test this bridge that I walk upon
If this breaks then I'll know I am wrong
But I will test this bridge that I walk upon

Nathaniel
09-25-2005, 05:28 PM
Ending

Breathe, before I speak,
Voice is, cracked broken and weak,
Ending, is nearer now,
Wounded, wreckage of our broken vow

Legs are trembling aching wrist,
Fear I fall for our final kiss
I need to hear something I want to hear
I need this, I need this but

If you tell its too late I will leave you
standing here
If you tell me its too late
I will leave you standing here
I, find it hard to say goodbye, to you
I, find it hard to say goodbye, dont you?

Nathaniel
09-25-2005, 05:32 PM
Shot It UP

I shot it up for something to do,
I shot it up because it pisses off you,
I shot it to make you cry,
I shot it up to make me feel alive.

I shot it up and I'd do it again,
I shot it up and I'll deal it to my friends,
I shot it up and I felt it hit,
I shot it up because I am sick of all your ****

But everything is fading away,
Take me now and take me all the way,
I never meant to push it this far,
And I need to be back where you are

Are you proud of me?
I bet you're really proud of me now.
Is she proud of me?
Bet my mother is really proud of me now.

Always_Echos
09-30-2005, 09:48 PM
Hey honey,

As always, beautiful work, i don't think I've ever found fault in one of your songs. They're just too soulful to argue with. I just hope they're not reflecting your mood right now, you really should email me more often! Who's Polly?

Hope you are ok angel, not thinking of clipping your wings. Take care honey xxxx

Ps well done to everyone else! Lyrics are lush!

Juzzza
10-02-2005, 08:52 PM
Afraid of the shadows

I ain't afraid of the dark, I ain't afraid of the goul in the gloomy dead of night
I ain't afraid of the shadows, I ain't afraid of the sounds in the trees that sound like wolves

only one thing that I'm afraid of in the world, coming home to find that you ain't here
only one place that I can't go, stepping out alone without you near

I ain't afraid of the water, I ain't afraid of what lurks in the blue with tooth and fin
I ain't afraid of the moon, I ain't afraid of the shadows on the wall outside my room
ain't no bugs and no spiders, there ain't nothing that crawls, nothing that flies, bites or stings

only one thing that I'm afraid of in the world, coming home to find that you ain't here
only one place that I can't go, stepping out alone without you near

I ain't afraid of no heights, I ain't afraid to look down a hundred miles beneath my feet
I ain't afraid of the reaper, I ain't afraid of the journey across the bridge the other side
I ain't afraid of commitment, I ain't afraid of my feelings when I see your eyes

only one thing that I'm afraid of in the world, coming home to find that you ain't here
only one place that I can't go, stepping out alone without you near

Livo
10-04-2005, 05:17 PM
broken

i'm pounding on your windows
they still haven't broken
i'm banging on your door and your neighbours have awoken
you can't hear me
but when did you before?
you haven't even noticed that i've broken down your door..

why can't you just listen
and realise my words?
you've broken up my life now, it's broken into thirds
it's your mutiny that gets me
why do you jump ship?
i'd reel you in, just let me, and stop stirring the ****

it seems like i've lost hope
with no sign of coming back
just blame me for everything and give me all the flack
cos everything is gone now
and i don't know what to do
as my life lies broken and it's all because of you

The Pink Girly
10-04-2005, 07:36 PM
For Polly

Test This Bridge

No one said I would find you,
No one said you would be so beautiful,
No one said you would touch me without even touching my hand,
No one said you'd have a smile like runway lights on a return home

No one said you'd have eyes that waltz around my mind
No one said you would be so far away,
No one said you'd have skin that haunts my touch,
No one said you would be SO FAR AWAY

If this breaks then I'll know I am wrong
But I'll test this bridge that I walk upon
If this breaks then I'll know I am wrong
But I'll test this bridge that I walk upon
You're in my heart and in my soul
So please rain on me now before I lose control

No one said I'd be sitting here writing a song for you
No one said I'd be sitting here and I'll write a thousand more for you
No one said I would be mouthing your beautiful name
No one said but I'll see you again some day

If this breaks then I'll know I am wrong
But I'll test this bridge that I walk upon
If this breaks then I'll know I am wrong
But I will test this bridge that I walk upon

i love this babe. it's so real. im so glad ur happy now. except the other two don't sound too happy! but they are great, especially the ending one.
give me a pm if u get a min so i know how it is all going!
wifey x

The Fire
10-07-2005, 11:09 PM
Tug of war

What's going on
in that mind of yours
is it love, lust
i thought you i could trust

then i went for your halo
to the heavens above
to make you an angel
one that i love

but it feels like
i dont know you no more
but it feels like
i've lost this tug of war

now what's going on
in this mind of mine
am i lost, confused
my love for you has been abused

thought i couldn't see straight
after i took you to a new place
wasn't expecting you
to fall in love with a new face

now it feels like
i don't know you no more
now it feels like
i've lost this tug of war..

bUt i know someday
we will meet again
yes someday
we will walk the same path

now in your defense
i'll give you your due
we didn't fall at the first fence
i know you just wanted what was new

it still feels like
i dont know you no more
now i know now
i've lost this tug of war

bUt i know someday
we will meet again
yes someday
we will meet again

Lazy Life
10-08-2005, 08:03 PM
"Pretty & Sweet"

You sat right next to me,
You came, I forgot how to speak.
And when the winds changed later on
You left me at the top.

You know what I need to say,
The words I wanna hear today.
And surely you can see what I'm after,
Your smile and your laughter


You're pretty and sweet like an apple
You're pretty and sweet like an apple
You're pretty and sweet like an apple
Just don't change for anyone


And when I hear your voice
I know I have the choice.
Oh, I'm happy now as it is,
I don't even need no kiss


You're pretty and sweet like an apple
You're pretty and sweet like an apple
You're pretty and sweet like an apple
Just don't change for anyone


Right now, I feel like I need you
And that I can't live without you.
These can only be told by time
But I want you to be mine


You're pretty and sweet like an apple
You're pretty and sweet like an apple
You're pretty and sweet like an apple
Just don't change for anyone

You're pretty and sweet like an apple
You're pretty and sweet like an apple
You're pretty and sweet like an apple
Just don't change for anyone


The "apple" part, although it seems like bad lyrics, is the inspiration for the song. Don't ask ;) confusing story would undoubtedly unfold if you did :)

Miss Pink
10-09-2005, 12:51 PM
Song of secrets


Do you wanna know a secret?
I've got a couple to tell.
Some come from Albuquerque
about a man burning in hell

he wants us to know his secret
that he hasn't told his wife
he just wrote it on a postcard
"don't tell her I've a secret life"

she just served him with divorce papers
her parents, she couldn't tell
her dislike of graceful people
as she told me, she fell

yet I've not told my secret
its still hiding in my drawer
I've got so many skeletons in my closet
clothes i have no more

tell me of that dirty little secret
how you slept with him on the floor
battle me with your secrets
as I've got many many more.





this is about www.postsecet.com (http://www.postsecet.com/) i love that site.....only this week i mailed 2 secrets in, i feel so alive

elfin
10-10-2005, 04:29 PM
ah man i love that website too! Discovered it a few months ago and just thought it was such an amazing idea. Highly reccomend it. Good lyrics also btw.

Miss Pink
10-12-2005, 10:04 PM
aw thanks, that site really is such a great inspiration

Lazy Life
10-13-2005, 04:51 PM
On the road east outta town,
You met your demise
And now you're lying in the garage outside
As still as the night.

Sis cried all the way home
When told the news
She said through tears "Gimme the killer's name,
I'll show him my views."

Oh, Oliver,
Oh, Oliver,
Oh, Oliver,
You're gone
To find your peace.

Miss Pink
10-16-2005, 02:20 PM
Seventeen and searching



Her tears are so pure, they cut her
she's wasted with vodka and lemon liquor
the spark in her eyes has not gone out
she puts on her cocktail dress, smiles with all might


"i'll pour the wine until I've gone numb
just keep pushing hard with your wet tongue
push in harder leave a mark from your jeans
i wont make a noise not even a scene"

her mascara has run to her cheek,
red lipstick in resting on her white teeth
the party has ended all are home
but she's left doing shots all on her own

"come with me, i'll find a place for that dress
it would look better if you had a bare chest
let me touch you, keep me warm tonight,
i'll keep you safe and fu.ck you tonight"

Her dignity left on the floor with her shoes
her innocence is battered and bruised
he pushes harder, marks her with his jeans
she lays still not causing a scene

Gaslight
10-16-2005, 07:05 PM
In need of a title


something is needed for
the fire that’s bleeding
all over my carpet that
the bishop is reading

This bishop is not a
friend, merely an associate
A revolutionary comrade
trying to make a go of it

His secretary sells liqueur
from her snakeskin brief case
She hasn’t seen a penny
Since her role in the space race

What meaning he’s divining
from the plaid design
Should be of no concern
None of yours, none of mine

But sometimes, emboldened
by Melinda’s mint liquor
I take a quick look
to make absolutely sure


-----------------------
and yes chief,it does have an actual meaning

maccas81
10-25-2005, 12:03 PM
Here follows my first lyrics on this site....Its a kind of tongue in cheek song about finding yourself living at home at 24, feeling that your life is standing still while all those around you prosper.....(not that its autobiographical or anything!!!) Honest opinions appreciated, i.e., if you think its crap, say so, it'll help me improve!!

Status Anxiety

Overqualified and underpaid,
my friends keep telling me
I should get laid,
Uh-huh, as if they'd know

But who wants to sleep with
A guy whos parents sleep
Six to eight feet through a partition wall
Well call it a hunch
But I guess none at all

'Cos right now my only chance of a grope
Is if I put on a cassock and become the pope,
Shove cocaine up my nostrils
And recite the gospels
Tie the mother superior up with a rope
She won't refuse....
She won't say no

This living at home isn't paradise
Got to have convincing alibis
You can see that its all been a pack of lies
But it saves you a fortune when rents are high

It doesn't take much to develop and inferiority complex
From talking to colleagues with career trajectories
And I got none

Theyre not slow to tell you
Theyre marrying doctors or developing software
And wouldnt look twice at a guy
Who walks round the house in his boxers
At quarter past twelve when theyre on their lunch hour
Oh no, thats so last year...

They plan to be affluent
In spite of the consequnce
The nation descends to the relams of irrelevance
Aesthetics are bland
And a thing like intelligence is looked on as somewhat of an inconvenience
True, or so they say

But living at home isn't paradise
Friends don't come round and your love life dies
But maybe that all was a pack of lies
And youre saving a fortune cos rents are high

Oisin
10-31-2005, 03:42 AM
I have a bridge but gotta go before i can type it might post it later

STRUNG OUT:

Somtimes when i'm strung out and the sky is robbed of blue
I sit down and try my best to write another song about you
Well this time it came out good but its about dying too
Funny that the thing that i'll associate with you

Your not even gone and i'm falling down
Your not even gone and i'm liying on the ground

Sometimes when i'm strung out and i've got it really bad
I lie down and try to remember just what it was we had
But if i've learned anything its that you and I were scarred
From the memories that end with a rain that falls so hard

Your not even gone and i'm falling down
Your not even gone and i'm liying on the ground

_____________________________________________

I have a bridge but gotta go before i can type it might post it later

Juzzza
10-31-2005, 09:22 AM
Isn't this better?

If I'm honest, I think I'm addicted to feeling guilty
when life is flat, even mole-hills pass the time
I never set out to hurt you, it's just I'm selfish
I wanted adventure, something that wasn't mine

but I'd trade everything back to save your tears
it's all good fun until someone loses an eye
I set out to please myself, never thinking
you'd find out, be hurt, and then cry

but isn't this better, than feeling nothing at all?
you ain't no princess, there's no pumpkin, no ball

nothing wrong with a little drama, nothing wrong at all
I felt like a dog with two dicks, it was like red to a bull
I plunged in never thinking about you, I was wrong
and now you hate me and my stomache for drama, is full

but isn't this better, than feeling nothing at all?
you ain't no princess, there's no pumpkin, no ball

The Pink Girly
11-01-2005, 09:54 PM
that's really cool juzzza. i really like it. makes you think (well, me anyway!) hehe

The Pink Girly
11-01-2005, 10:00 PM
Here follows my first lyrics on this site....Its a kind of tongue in cheek song about finding yourself living at home at 24, feeling that your life is standing still while all those around you prosper.....(not that its autobiographical or anything!!!) Honest opinions appreciated, i.e., if you think its crap, say so, it'll help me improve!!

Status Anxiety

Overqualified and underpaid,
my friends keep telling me
I should get laid,
Uh-huh, as if they'd know

But who wants to sleep with
A guy whos parents sleep
Six to eight feet through a partition wall
Well call it a hunch
But I guess none at all

'Cos right now my only chance of a grope
Is if I put on a cassock and become the pope,
Shove cocaine up my nostrils
And recite the gospels
Tie the mother superior up with a rope
She won't refuse....
She won't say no

This living at home isn't paradise
Got to have convincing alibis
You can see that its all been a pack of lies
But it saves you a fortune when rents are high

It doesn't take much to develop and inferiority complex
From talking to colleagues with career trajectories
And I got none

Theyre not slow to tell you
Theyre marrying doctors or developing software
And wouldnt look twice at a guy
Who walks round the house in his boxers
At quarter past twelve when theyre on their lunch hour
Oh no, thats so last year...

They plan to be affluent
In spite of the consequnce
The nation descends to the relams of irrelevance
Aesthetics are bland
And a thing like intelligence is looked on as somewhat of an inconvenience
True, or so they say

But living at home isn't paradise
Friends don't come round and your love life dies
But maybe that all was a pack of lies
And youre saving a fortune cos rents are high


i'm no expert but i like it. it's different and real. can empathise with the narrator.

Livo
11-02-2005, 03:49 PM
raindrops

the sky is on fire tonight
and i hope we'll be alright
arm in arm we're not afraid
and joke about the hand you gave
together we have all the fun
cos all of you shine like the sun

the moon reflects your beautful madness
the sun reflects your shine
we can dance tonight
cos better friends i'll never find

the sky is on fire tonight
and i think we'll be alright
we're all gonna miss you like hell
but laughter mutes the ringing bell
when you come back there's gonna be trouble
guitar string burn and coffee bubble

the moon reflects your beautiful madness
the sun reflects your shine
we can dance tonight
cos warmth and laughter is our light

philbo
11-02-2005, 05:16 PM
this is the most recent thing i wrote....from way back in june. cheers to writers block...



A starlit sky at midnight
Frosted grass and frozen streams
Snow-white wings and candlelight
Of all this Lucille now dreams

Through the gardens winding paths
she tiptoes along her way
Past the oak tree where she sat
to watch the death of the day

Standing neath an apple tree
an Angel does softly sing
"Years have I waited for thee
waiting for love to begin"

He kissed her soft and held her
and they danced amongst the snow
As they moved across the ice
he spun her, and let her go

The ice cracked beneath her feet
and through the ice Lucille fell
The Angel laughed, showed its teeth
and its true form they did tell

Lucille sank slow, deeper down
The devils laugh haunted her
As he stood and watched her drown
His wings fell-his skin grew fur

Lucille sank slow, deeper down
She watched her air escaping
She watched her body drown
And she cursed the Angel that had
stood amid the winters snow

Gatsby
11-03-2005, 02:00 AM
Here follows my first lyrics on this site....Its a kind of tongue in cheek song about finding yourself living at home at 24, feeling that your life is standing still while all those around you prosper.....(not that its autobiographical or anything!!!) Honest opinions appreciated, i.e., if you think its crap, say so, it'll help me improve!!

Status Anxiety

Overqualified and underpaid,
my friends keep telling me
I should get laid,
Uh-huh, as if they'd know

But who wants to sleep with
A guy whos parents sleep
Six to eight feet through a partition wall
Well call it a hunch
But I guess none at all

'Cos right now my only chance of a grope
Is if I put on a cassock and become the pope,
Shove cocaine up my nostrils
And recite the gospels
Tie the mother superior up with a rope
She won't refuse....
She won't say no

This living at home isn't paradise
Got to have convincing alibis
You can see that its all been a pack of lies
But it saves you a fortune when rents are high

It doesn't take much to develop and inferiority complex
From talking to colleagues with career trajectories
And I got none

Theyre not slow to tell you
Theyre marrying doctors or developing software
And wouldnt look twice at a guy
Who walks round the house in his boxers
At quarter past twelve when theyre on their lunch hour
Oh no, thats so last year...

They plan to be affluent
In spite of the consequnce
The nation descends to the relams of irrelevance
Aesthetics are bland
And a thing like intelligence is looked on as somewhat of an inconvenience
True, or so they say

But living at home isn't paradise
Friends don't come round and your love life dies
But maybe that all was a pack of lies
And youre saving a fortune cos rents are high

hitting a nail on the head there... i love your use of words and how they intertwine into verse... love to hear it to song (are u musical?)

anyways i kinda relate as one of my friends from school is getting married and another is having a baby and it kinda blows you away when you try to take that in...

philbo
11-03-2005, 09:18 PM
not sure if i posted this here before or not, but im just after putting some music to it (finally!!)

Angeline
Angeline was more beautiful
than any picture I’d ever seen
Angeline was more beautiful
than any place I’ve ever been.

She filled my heads with words;
could make you laugh or make you cry.
She’d say “Don’t hesitate to say I’m wrong
but you can never fail if you never try.”

When I met her she was broken.
Always hiding in her room,
her heart shattered into pieces;
Confidence waning like a morning moon

An’ Angeline, I hope you remember
all of these things I’ve tried to forget.
An’ Angeline I hope you realise
I still have love for you yet.

At nights I’d lay awake an’ dream
of when I’d be seeing her again
An’ the thought of us together
breaks a smile now 'n' then

An’ she’d say “To live is to suffer
and to suffer is to survive
but love is the only thing
that really lets you know you’re alive.”

An’ Angeline, wont you come and see me,
and talk a little while?
An’ Angeline, I promise you
I’m gonna do my best to make ya smile

An’ Angeline, You’re more beautiful
than anyone I’ve ever met,
An’ Angeline I hope you realise
I still have love for you yet.

Juzzza
11-04-2005, 10:05 AM
Nice one philbo, has a Ray Lamontagne feel.

snowbaby
11-04-2005, 02:22 PM
Jazz guitar, rhythm and blues, sitting in a smoky room,
Two of us played together.
As if we were in the eye of a storm we sat oblivious to everyone else, and every so often someone would come to interrupt our parallel dimension by drunkenly stumbling in on top of us like a fence gets thrown out into the eye from the mass of swirling air.
We played, he taught me.
How long have I been searching for a teacher, saying I don’t wanna be one?
Too long.
We talked as friends, which we haven’t been for sometime.

I’ve known him six years but in this last year he’s been so much more to me than just a friend.

I know I’ve meant more to him too. Now friends are all we can be. I’m happy we have that, at least.

He hugged me as I left and kissed my neck. He held me in his strong arms. How could I ever want someone else? But he’ll never be mine. He belongs to her.



i'm still struggling with turning my ramblings into songs... anyone able to offer any advice??

snowbaby
11-04-2005, 02:29 PM
raindrops

the sky is on fire tonight
and i hope we'll be alright
arm in arm we're not afraid
and joke about the hand you gave
together we have all the fun
cos all of you shine like the sun

the moon reflects your beautful madness
the sun reflects your shine
we can dance tonight
cos better friends i'll never find

the sky is on fire tonight
and i think we'll be alright
we're all gonna miss you like hell
but laughter mutes the ringing bell
when you come back there's gonna be trouble
guitar string burn and coffee bubble

the moon reflects your beautiful madness
the sun reflects your shine
we can dance tonight
cos warmth and laughter is our light


by the by livo i think this is amazing!!

maccas81
11-04-2005, 04:26 PM
hitting a nail on the head there... i love your use of words and how they intertwine into verse... love to hear it to song (are u musical?)

anyways i kinda relate as one of my friends from school is getting married and another is having a baby and it kinda blows you away when you try to take that in...

thanks simon...to be honest i was a bit apprehensive about putting it online at all for fear that everyone woukld think it was kack!...i would polish up some of the lyrics i think, but it sounds better played than it reads if that makes sense...i do have it set to music alright...i play the guitar myself...and i might record it roughly for the laugh....myself and my friend from dublin are working on some stuff at the mo.....

maccas81
11-04-2005, 04:31 PM
i'm still struggling with turning my ramblings into songs... anyone able to offer any advice??[/QUOTE]

hey ruth.....i really like the lyrics by the way...the only advice i would have is try to structure a nice chord progression on the guitar at the kind of tempo you imagine the song might be sung at....whether its major or minor key....sad song...upbeat song, or a mixture of both....whether thesong should sound the same throughout or whether you think it should have a distinctive middle 8.... etc...fast slow, or a combination of both....once you have a sound that you like, start singing ...dont worry if it doesnt work, cos you may just have the wrong chords for that particular song but you may end up having music for another one as a result, so its all going towards a goal.....this may not be any use to you, but thats what i do myself and find it can sometimes be effective....good luck - the words are great though!!

maccas81
11-04-2005, 04:33 PM
Nice one philbo, has a Ray Lamontagne feel.

yeah its a really good song....reminded me of something ryan adam's might write!

Gatsby
11-04-2005, 07:32 PM
thanks simon...to be honest i was a bit apprehensive about putting it online at all for fear that everyone woukld think it was kack!...i would polish up some of the lyrics i think, but it sounds better played than it reads if that makes sense...i do have it set to music alright...i play the guitar myself...and i might record it roughly for the laugh....myself and my friend from dublin are working on some stuff at the mo.....

would love to listen to whatever u make of it:)

maccas81
11-05-2005, 02:27 PM
great lyrics samuelle, they work really well....great rhyming there

PenguinBoy
11-07-2005, 10:05 PM
sometimes I sing to you
sometimes I whisper to you in desperation
sometimes I write to you
sometimes I need you

But you're not there

I look for you in my wardrobe

but you're not there.

fairy godmother come save me
fairy godmother make me a dress
carriage men out of mice
pristine crystalline slippers of glass

give me a carriage from a pumpkin
and let me ride into the east
to the ball goes the bumpkin
to that kingdom in the east
where there's no taxes,
no work and just peace

fairy godmother come save me
fairy godmother make me a dress
carriage men out of mice
pristine crystalline slippers of glass

I’ve been here for so long
the step family keep nagging
but they don't know this song
they can't know that all this slogging
it just makes me worse
just fills my orange hearse,
orange hearse built from a pumpkin

fairy godmother come save me
fairy godmother make me a dress
carriage men out of mice
pristine crystalline slippers of glass

I’ve never seen a princess,
nor have I seen a prince
but I’ve seen a rainbow
and I bet there's just a chance
of a venture just beyond it
and escape from worldly fists.
Could I really avoid it?
Could I please have just a kiss?


I sing to you
I whisper you're name in desperation
I write to you
I need you

fairy godmother come save me
fairy godmother make me a dress
carriage men out of mice
pristine crystalline slippers of glass

What to call it? I was contemplating "Pristine glass crystalline slippers"
it's so fun to say

admittedly that needs work ^ but it's a beginning of a song which I definitely like.

misty
11-08-2005, 02:54 AM
Songs I wrote were normally short and plain, since I only sang it to myself. I wrote this one last year, about a good friend who's drifted away from me because his girlfriend was a bitch.

So What?

Lend me your wings and let me fly
I'm never used on getting high
And what so hard 'bout being kind?
What so difficult, just to flash me a smile?

Buy me a coffe and we'll talk for hours,
Just take a break and smell the flowers,
And what so hard 'bout being happy?
What so daunting 'bout being free?

And, so what?
If I like you
Cause I'm so ok about it
And I miss you
That's the feeling, I can't fight it
There is nothing much to say
And there's nothing I can do
It'll always lead me back to you
That's the fact that I like you

That's the fact
That I do like you

maccas81
11-08-2005, 01:27 PM
sometimes i sing to you
sometimes i whisper to you in desperation
sometimes i write to you

But you're not there

i look for you in my wardrobe

but you're not there.

fairy godmother come save me
fairy godmother make me a dress
carriage men out of mice
pristine crystaline slippers of glass

give me a carriage from a pumpkin
and let me ride into the east
to the ball goes the bumkin
to that kindom in the east
where there's no taxes,
no work and just peace

fairy godmother come save me
fairy godmother make me a dress
carriage men out of mice
pristine crystaline slippers of glass

i've been here for so long
the step familly keep nagging
but they don't know this song
they can't know that all this slagging
it just makes me worse
just fills my orange hearse,
my orange hearse built from a pumpkin

fairy godmother come save me
fairy godmother make me a dress
carriage men out of mice
pristine crystaline slippers of glass

i've never seen a princess,
nor have i seen a prince
but i've seen a rainbow
and i bet there's just a chance
of a venture just beyond it
and escape from worldly fists.

i sing to you
i whisper you're name in desperation
i write to you

fairy godmother come save me
fairy godmother make me a dress
carriage men out of mice
pristine crystaline slippers of glass
what to call it? i was contemplating "Pristine glass crystaline slippers"
it's so fun to say

admitedly that needs work ^ but it's a begining of a song which i definately like.

absolutely brilliant lyrics there.....to be honest, it doesnt really need any more work, i think its spot on ....great line about the orange hearse built from a pumpkin by the way!

PenguinBoy
11-08-2005, 06:38 PM
^ thanky much-much... in honestly, i have eddited a bit it since it was posted, infact i'm going to change it a little more lol.

funny you should mention "the orange" hearse line, i thought it sounded a bit dodgy. the word punmpin doesn't seem to fit. however, if maccas is liking, then that throws a new light onto the argument. *ponders*

PenguinBoy
11-08-2005, 10:49 PM
Songs I wrote were normally short and plain, since I only sang it to myself. I wrote this one last year, about a good friend who's drifted away from me because his girlfriend was a bitch.

So What?

Lend me your wings and let me fly
I'm never used on getting high
And what so hard 'bout being kind?
What so difficult, just to flash me a smile?

Buy me a coffe and we'll talk for hours,
Just take a break and smell the flowers,
And what so hard 'bout being happy?
What so daunting 'bout being free?

And, so what?
If I like you
Cause I'm so ok about it
And I miss you
That's the feeling, I can't fight it
There is nothing much to say
And there's nothing I can do
It'll always lead me back to you
That's the fact that I like you

That's the fact
That I do like you

i likes, very straightforeward.. but i like it for it's simplicity, and it's really captured what u feel. and i think that happens allot btw. how u describe it is the same way that i feel bout some of my friends / ex-friends.

genzoman
11-09-2005, 06:50 PM
i can tell from the blue in your eyes
you wish a fire to light
but all these sticks of mine
are only wet and green
so ill sharpen my tongue
and ill roll up my sleeves
and play with your hair like the wind through the leaves
then my tongue starts to dull and i say what i mean
words are such dangerous things
everything changes we both know its true
the sky that is black tonight soon will be blue
but now the moon and the stars both spell out your name
and burn in my soul with an orange colored flame
if there was a wind that would blow north to south
would any love reach me by word of mouth
or would the thunder and lightning
the rain and drought
simply drown everything out
you see its not only in spring when things grow
life needs no season for time it dont know
love just might blossom in beautiful autumn
and if it did tell me what would you do?
am i just foolish to just paint in oranges?
will you show up just riding leaf horses
when the fall falls away and falls into cold
do you think youll know what you will do
as the days change the moon waxes and wanes
i stare at the ceiling and call out your name
silently first and then loud as i can
i am just not loud enough

PenguinBoy
11-09-2005, 07:12 PM
i can tell from the blue in your eyes
you wish a fire to light
but all these sticks of mine
are only wet and green
so ill sharpen my tongue
and ill roll up my sleeves
and play with your hair like the wind through the leaves
then my tongue starts to dull and i say what i mean
words are such dangerous things
everything changes we both know its true
the sky that is black tonight soon will be blue
but now the moon and the stars both spell out your name
and burn in my soul with an orange colored flame
if there was a wind that would blow north to south
would any love reach me by word of mouth
or would the thunder and lightning
the rain and drought
simply drown everything out
you see its not only in spring when things grow
life needs no season for time it dont know
love just might blossom in beautiful autumn
and if it did tell me what would you do?
am i just foolish to just paint in oranges?
will you show up just riding leaf horses
when the fall falls away and falls into cold
do you think youll know what you will do
as the days change the moon waxes and wanes
i stare at the ceiling and call out your name
silently first and then loud as i can
i am just not loud enough

whoaaa! that is verry verry good. all the colours of the rainbow in there. really witty and clear and eloquent etc etc. good stuff!

genzoman
11-09-2005, 07:35 PM
whoaaa! that is verry verry good. all the colours of the rainbow in there. really witty and clear and eloquent etc etc. good stuff!

thanks. it was one of those things were you dont really write it yourself, you just sit there and let it come out.

The Pink Girly
11-09-2005, 08:25 PM
that is amazing genzoman. absolutely blew me away. no jokes! love especially:

so ill sharpen my tongue
and ill roll up my sleeves
and play with your hair like the wind through the leaves
then my tongue starts to dull and i say what i mean
....and....
when the fall falls away and falls into cold

i wish stuff like that just "came out" of me! hehe

genzoman
11-09-2005, 10:07 PM
since my last lyric came with much-appreciated praise, heres something from a couple days ago..

if i kiss my guitar
will the sun rise faster
if i shed a tear
will it cut through the night
if i pray hard
will you answer
and tell me if
i want to be wrong or right
i can be bought
but not with money
a dimes worth of love
with pocket full of change
if i wear my old jeans
with holes in the pockets
will i spread love
wherever i roam

but i have to wait it out
to let time tell
if your gonna be my anchor
or gonna be my sail
and im not used to flying
i never liked heights
ive got a handful of love
so love lets ride...

and it kind of came to a stop there. i need some help from my muse :)

misty
11-11-2005, 01:51 AM
i likes, very straightforeward.. but i like it for it's simplicity, and it's really captured what u feel. and i think that happens allot btw. how u describe it is the same way that i feel bout some of my friends / ex-friends.

Some ex-friends are just so hard to forget. We grew apart much further, but I still miss him sometimes :smiley6:

misty
11-11-2005, 04:00 AM
This is a song titled 'Personal Ad' . Very short and silly sounding, just like a perfect personal ad should be :D


I'm not asking for too much
Just for a guy, with a decent smile
Who prefers cheese spread over jams
Talks in my language, sings in my rhymes

He might not be a man of steel
Bad with direction, drives like a maniac
The one with Animatrix on DVD
Light up my day, with his Peter Parker charms

maccas81
11-11-2005, 01:29 PM
^ nice lyrics ....like the peter parker line, well chosen!

maccas81
11-11-2005, 01:45 PM
ok heres one of my new ones.....no title as yet....let me know what ya think!



never more so when you just dont know
what the future may hold
and the weather turns colder

I'll meet you on the other side of february
by which time we'll be another year older

never thought i'd be afraid to find someone to take with me along the way
didnt want to listen to a single word you say, but im a broken man

my pride it came before a fall
but thats OK
a one night stand will make it go away
i marvelled at it all, seven wonders and a prison wall
makes me think i'll staymakes me think i'll stay

nobody would guess that i'd get in this mess
sentence would begin and last for the winter
but when you end up on the wrong side of the tracks
people stab you in the back and justice waits for no man
never would have known that
when i was a grown man
what tricks the hand of fate would play
as my head and heart they stray

my pride it came before a fall
but thats OK
a one night stand will make it go away
i marvelled at it all, seven wonders and a prison wall
makes me think i'll staymakes me think i'll stay

maccas81
11-11-2005, 01:59 PM
and heres another newbie, called hardcore addiction


started as a cheap thrill, thought he'd get his hands dirty
he's the sqeaky clean boy, known far and wide for his alibis

wrong place and time , now he's up to his eyes
reacihng for his flies, doing girls or guys
telling lies, and his mother cries

hardcore addiction, gonna stick that needle in his vein
might die trying but at least he wont die insane

now he's off and runing like a train coming
steaming down the tracks, arteries are clogged
veins septic and black

underneath his soul in a drak hole
crying from some need, triple x-rated
or south african weed
only the best cos he's sure it'll kill or cure

hardcore addiction, gonna stick that needle in his vein
might die trying but at least he wont die insane

Livo
11-12-2005, 11:44 PM
^ wow that's really good! so's the one above it! well done! :smiley32:

words and music for this one have been floating around for a while now but i only put it together tonight. it's about this person who i thought was my best friend but about a week ago he turned on me and basically told me he hated me. i've kinda forgiven him and things are alright now but i needed some way of getting out my anger.. it doesn't have a name yet but i'm thinking of "lost" maybe..?



i thought i knew you, but i was wrong
what does it matter now you're gone?

rain pours down to clear the mess
pain pours out as you confess
we started out as sweethearts
less sweet, more bitterhearts
we sat on walls and in the park
and it ended at midnight in the dark

i thought i knew you, but i was wrong
what does it matter now you're gone?

then came that fateful night
the huge fight to end all fights
i couldn't believe you words
each one set you free as a bird
but you left me bleeding
and every word you're reading
is a product of the pain you've caused

i thought i knew you, but i was wrong
what does it matter now you're gone?
you thought you knew me but you were wrong
what does it matter now you're gone?
i thought i knew you but i was wrong
what does it matter? i'm glad you're gone!

Juzzza
11-15-2005, 09:22 AM
My Card

A big town
a big job
I don't feel myself I feel overwhelmed
and my friends seem to scatter, like leaves on the wind
they don't call be back, when I need that friend

all my love, all my love is all I have and my card
and my card

friend like a brother, always there when I need an ear
friend like a brother, always there when I need you near

I come down
I land hard
you helped pick me up when I felt overwhelmed
and it didn't seem to matter, never one to judge
at the drop of a hat, you're at my door

all my love, all my love is all I have and my card
and my card

friend like a brother, always there when I need an ear
friend like a brother, always there when I need you near

snowbaby
11-15-2005, 11:52 PM
hey livo... i like ur latest contribution very much!!

this is jus something i scribbled down in d libarary d other day... its gone with some music prettty good but sure here it is anyway...


fresh new hope, a new chance,
i've been bruised before,
thought you'd be different,

oh you got in my head, right from the start,
but you didn't even, come close to my heart,

too familiar, this has become,
another lost before it had really begun,
this time i did nothing wrong

oh you got in my head, right from the start,
but you didn't even, come close to my heart,

my heart's singing a new song,
i've switched off, didn't take much,
now i don't even want your touch,

oh you got in my head, right from the start,
but you didn't even, come close to my heart,

no matter what i do, i end up on my own,
i've accepted it,
some people are meant to be alone,

oh you got in my head, right from the start,
but you didn't even, come close to my heart.

maccas81
11-16-2005, 04:23 PM
this is the latest offering!

A musicians lot is rarely a happy one
at least in the sphere of romantic endeavour
or maybe my anatomy and physiology
is hardwired peculiarly differently

it could be a synapse or a neural
receptor that causes a sudden loss
of cabin pressure and makes the things
that i say highly register on the
idiot detector

but if they put a rod through Wernicke's area
would that give me an uncanny ability to
spout killer pick up lines?
I don't know but the rate i'm going it's worth a try

your eyes light up the blue sky
like a butterfly....why oh why
did i say that?!
Next time i'll suggest swapping numbers and just leave it at that
save the embarrassment

drunk or sober i dont know whats worse
not sure if alcohol's a blessing or a curse
but those cringeworthy comments
i made about the was that she smiled
would make even me want to curl up and vomit bile
think its gonna be some time before i get it right
there goes another night

your eyes light up the blue sky
like a butterfly....why oh why
did i say that?!
Next time i'll suggest swapping numbers and just leave it at that
save the embarrassment

think i'll set up a charity
for hopeless flirtation cases
logic goes and nonsense replaces
should have seen the lok on their faces when i said those lines
lines...what lines?!

your eyes light up the blue sky
like a butterfly....why oh why
did i say that?!
Next time i'll suggest swapping numbers and just leave it at that
save the embarrassment

maccas81
11-16-2005, 05:09 PM
ok better put a parental advisory on this one...its my favourite though...

keeping my nose clean

saturday night was always rough
so he took some stuff to get himself messed up
makes him loud and it makes him aggressive but hes not so impressive
as a physical specimen

he goes out just tp tell some lies
spin some yarns and see if anyone buys

takes some more and release the beast
that mans crazy he shouldnt be out on the streets
and the only things on the rise are property prices and STI's

after sniffing he's on the rut
be don't f**k sluts because theyre carrying viruses
knickers down on the back of the number 10 bus

billy likes to dip his rod in with nothin
nothin covering
doesnt like how it feels he prefers when its skin to skin
doesnt tell bout the rash that he has from his jocks to his knees
or how it stings when he pees
cos the girls would probably leave
with all theyre clothes on
and in case youre wondering it isnt me
im keeping my nose clean
said goodbye to the drugs scene
keeping my nose clean

sex sells,when it swells you must be sick with desire
that its sure to quell
if you do it youll surely go to hell
with the paedophile preacher
wasnt much of a spiritual teacher
a lecherous predator
wish that you were playboy editor
just for the features
from the brothel to the television screen
some would call it obscene
say prostitution degrades and porn dmeans
but im keepping my nose clean
walked away from the fetish scene
keeping my nose clean

Karl marx was a erman man, had a simple plan
control the economy, he inspired the soviet beurocracy
never intended, to create the most brutal affront to liberty
Stalinist tyranny
In an age where warfare entails strapping bombs to your body
and exploding your entrails justifying your explots for gods and dreams
but im keeping my nose clean
turned away from the terrorist scene
keeping my nose clean
keeping my nose clean

Juzzza
11-16-2005, 10:56 PM
Your name

I'm weighted down
I'm weighted down
and I can't rise to the surface
with these chains around my, around my neck
and I can't see the woods now
for the trees any more, you got me blind
and I can't flee this circus, I'm a clown in your ring
you're a whip

but I will not fall
I will not call your name any more, any more, no, no more

I'm weighted down
I'm weighted down
and I can be what you're after, any more, not for you, I'm sorry
and you have tried to break me, but you failed, I'm free, free agent

but I will not fall
I will not call your name any more, any more, no, no more

PenguinBoy
11-16-2005, 11:45 PM
i'm lovin them :D

spesh marcas's master works, u made me giggle then u made me squirm, love it.

juzz, pretty dam good, it's good to keep writing, you genious you xx

tj
11-17-2005, 02:07 PM
if i post some of my new lyrics up here tonight would you guys be interested in reading them and giving them a thorough critical analysis? lol

tj

maccas81
11-17-2005, 02:13 PM
i'm lovin them :D

spesh marcas's master works, u made me giggle then u made me squirm, love it.

juzz, pretty dam good, it's good to keep writing, you genious you xx


i made the penguin man giggle and squirm! my work here is done!
cheers man, is there anything you think needs worked on though....whats weak and needs a bit of work....all help appreciated!

Livo
11-17-2005, 06:41 PM
hey livo... i like ur latest contribution very much!!

thanks snowbaby :smiley1:

if i post some of my new lyrics up here tonight would you guys be interested in reading them and giving them a thorough critical analysis? lol

go for it!!

tj
11-17-2005, 06:56 PM
ok ok.. this one is Don't Say It's Too Late..

This city is a cold place,
I think lying face down on my bed,
I have plenty of time to waste,
But still I seem to waste yours instead,
Remember when the music played loud,
As we stood by that gate,
I was robbed of my doubt,
Don't Say It's Too Late

You left your door wide open,
Helping Me, Welcoming Me, Telling Me To Come In,
So Now Don't Be Building Divides...
And when the music plays loud,
Try to realise,
That you robbed me of my doubt,
Don't Say Its Too Late

I need you here tonight,
I need you here if that's alright,
I need you here tonight...

This next one is called Adventures From Outside The Box...

Noise pollutes the air tonight,
Only in daytime you're polite,
But tonight you say we can wish,
For the future to be bright...

I build sandcastles with glass structures,
I paint words that become my pictures,
I make characters to star in my adventures...

Be careful what you say,
Think different, Think differently,
Think outside the box, Just to break up the locks,
Break Up the Locks...

Fictional Personality, The Camera Will Lie,
Audio Tells A Different Story, Now I can't just sit by...

I build hope with sand structures,
I fake a smile in your photograph,
I hold on, I hold on, I hold on,
Meditate.. Meditation...

Be careful what you say,
Think different, Think differently,
Think outside the box, Just to break up the locks,
Break Up the Locks...

what ya'll think... any pointers in the direction of making it better would be much appreciated!

cheers, tj.

tj
11-17-2005, 07:02 PM
maybe one more.. lol.. this one is called Electric...

Daring Him To Pick The Phone Straight Up,
Ticking, Thinking, Ripping Up The Paper Cup,
Creating thoughts and planting them in his brain,
Drinking too much so he won't feel the pain...

Cutting Lines, Searching For Signs, Leave It Behind,
Nothing Can Stop me Now, I'm Electric, For Now

Into town and his heart ache shows,
Striking a match and choking as it glows,
Thinking of her and he can't sit still,
He hates the strain but he loves the thrill...

Cutting Lines, Searching For Signs, Leave It Behind,
Nothing Can Stop me Now, I'm Electric, For Now

You've got the bullet, You've got the gun,
You've got your finger on the trigger,
Pull it. Send me to the sun.
x2

Cutting Lines, Searching For Signs, Leave It Behind,
Nothing Can Stop me Now, I'm Electric, For Now

Daring Him To Pick the Phone Straight Up,
Ticking, Thinking, Ripping Up The Paper Cup.

Thats one of the more rockier ones.

Livo
11-17-2005, 10:35 PM
:smiley32::smiley32: well done!

literally JUST made this up:

goodnight lullaby
goodnight stars
won't see you in the morning
farewell from my heart

farewell stories
farewell songs
goodnight fairies
on my lawn
i'll see you
the other side of dawn

we're taking back the night
cos the stars should be all ours

when i close my
starstricken eyes
i think about morning
and awoken eyes
i think about my own
tearfilled eyes

i think about the one who'll
steal my heart
i think about the one who'll
name my stars
i think about the one i've
left behind

it's you

snowbaby
11-17-2005, 11:29 PM
WOW.... tj and livo... excellent stuff... very impressed livo

maccas81
11-18-2005, 01:16 PM
very good stuff indeed....some fairly heartfelt lyrics for sure....keep em coming guys!

maccas81
11-18-2005, 01:29 PM
A bigger man

Skin soft, flesh warm, vision blurred, eightball
use the wall as a reference point

Mind full, like a trashcan, lightning bolt , from a flashpoint
Current flows through your brain

Cool sheets, summer scents, 2 hearts beat, acquiese
Blood leaves its sticky permanence

So take me down from this cross
It wasnt much of a loss but
its shrouded in mystery
I didnt come to try and save the world
thats for a bigger man than me

Unconcerned, at ease, comforting, if you please
went smoother than expected

Not used to no stress, metaphors, bench press my heart
and wrench it from my chest

Dialogues disputations, considering yourr dispensations
as the future rolls back in time

questions of existence consequences and resistence
strangle it at birth


So take me down from this cross
It wasnt much of a loss but
its shrouded in mystery
I didnt come to try and save the world
thats for a bigger man than me

and in that twilight, took off bird midflight
really did make me smile

you arrived i relished, mission was accomplished
you are still my delight
you are still my delight

So take me down from this cross
It wasnt much of a loss but
its shrouded in mystery
I didnt come to try and save the world
thats for a bigger man than me

Yetzirah
11-18-2005, 04:10 PM
Hey guys, I just wanted to say I'm really impressed with what you're doing here. Some of you write really great lyrics!

I whish I could do this...

not so far to go to find
11-18-2005, 06:09 PM
any opinions good, bad or ugly appeciated:

part the tide with whispers, cant see the forest for the trees,
when ive wasted time by minutes i`d claw back if i could see

paint the town in purple, this mornings burning red,
paid the price and peddled all that i once had, could sell

tried to sell my soul, tried to ease my mind,tried to find a piece of me but contentment i cant find.

torched my writing burning like this naked lifeless sun,
to start anew from somewhere where a man could feel at one

tried to sell my bounty, tried to sell my gold,
but time will take her prize when im all alone and old


heres another

im in a place where everythings shad and nothin is quite what it seems,
the clock on the wall says its quarter to 6 but my wristwatch says seven fifteen.
why all this confusion.

the waitress is wearing a look that says ask me my number and take me on home,
but the ring on her finger says somebodys waitin for her when she unlocks that door.
why all the pretending

i tell myself ill kick this and see my life without all the haze,
i step outside n what i see scares me so i call up a friend and go for a drink.
its not an addiction
its just a means to an end
at the end of my means
in a bar at the end of the street
its just way to keep this boy from findin out sometimes
that life aint really that sweet
its not an addiction

im in a place where everythings wavy and some ghost keeps trippin my feet
so i hold on the bar for dear life in case that same bastard starts shakin my seat
its not a problem
its a means to an end
at the end of my means
on a slippery slope to the floor
its just a way to keep this man from findin his life should o meant just a little bit more
its not a problem

im on the street with a girl and smoke
shes damn ugly but it sure is nice
she wants to teach me a trick involving her mouth and me and some ice
im not refusing

its a means to an end
at the end of my means
with a girl thats as dirty as sin
its just a way to keep this man from waking alone in a bed where a lover had been
im not refusing
why the confusing an addiction woth somethin i need
its not a problem
theres nothing wrong with
wanting sometimes to escape
and my affliction`s
not my addiction
its the confusion of my mental state
yes its a problem
but maybe tomorrow
ill get back on my feet
maybe tomorrrow

tj
11-19-2005, 12:44 PM
hey guys... heres two tunes i wrote late last night.. well.. early this morning.. lol

this one hasnt got a title yet...

predict what will happen on the 11th of december,
would you tell us all if you could remember?
mary history is a way for us to see,
who we will become and what we will be...
don't make the same mistakes... twice...

Don't take Me Down,
Don't Let Us Down,

With a whole lifetime mapped,
Why does a man still feel trapped,
And if everything happens for a reason,
How can lies be so decieving?
Wishful thinking... twice..

I can't fall down,
Don't let us down...

Maybe history is a way for us to see,
Who we will become and what we will be...

this one also hasn't got a title yet.. it's got a working title of Sometimes Waiting Is All You Can Do.. personally I think it needs alot of work.

My TV has just one station,
It helps me keep concentration,
On things that are more important,
On things that are more important...

I can let go of time,
But I can't let go of you,
Sometimes Waiting Is All You Can Do

Waiting With Arms Wide Open,
Staying Patient with just knowing,
That soon it'll be come clearer,
It'll become clearer to you...

I can let go of time,
But I can't let go of you,
Sometimes Waiting Is All You Can Do

Revel In Beauty Of A Love Home Grown,
Study the meaning of a sparkless stone,
Does it become clearer,
Is it becoming clearer to you?

Gaslight
11-20-2005, 09:16 AM
through even the lightest bright
there is a dark unending night
A dark that turns and pops and snaps
A black that winds and binds and traps
I myself am not afraid
My selfsame trains have already laid
their tracks upon her arms and face
that keeps her steady and in place
the wind blows straight through her eyes
and her worms are doing exercise
they crawl out of her toes and lips
they sketch tattoos upon her hips
B E T R A Y A L
This is exactly what they spell
Why this boils and sweats and stains
I do not know, why does it strain?
What made this black contorted mess
this convulsive false happiness
she looks at me and all seems well
her freckles lead the path to hell
my special serpent writhes and spits
I fall into the cracks upon her lips
her glasses are a shining shield
against the sword my truth wields
But we have driven all this way,
I’ll tell her true some other day.

----------------------------------------------------



Every living thing dies alone (a poem for kids)

There was once a young gent who hurried far too quick.
He waited too slow and the flu made him sick.
His albums were too musical, his impatience a bore.
His hugs were too warm, his ground was too floor.
His wheels were too round, his filth was too dirty.
His chair was too seat, his three tens too thirty.
His god was too holy, his cankers too sore.
His sun was too bright and his zygotes too spore.
His profanity too sweary, his depression too grim.
His love was too truthful, his twin brothers two kin.
His life too carbon based, his ice water too cold.
And like all the others: he grew sad and old.

gomezxico
11-22-2005, 01:24 AM
i am amazed by some of the talent on this site!!! wow!!! once again I am dumbfounded by you people!vienes conmigo
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todo ha terminado
pero no he olvidado
el tiempo que juntos pasamos
me llevara atraes los años
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no te extranare
implicaria de faltar algo
tu me has llenado hasta saber
que la pena de conocer yo valgo
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quiza un dia nos encontraremos de nuevo
<O:P></O:P>
voy a viajar a todas partes
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voy a buscar y encontrar
desconocer y luego saber
aprender, olvidar, recordar, todas cosas
de vida tan bellas <ST1:CITY><ST1:PLACE>como</ST1:PLACE></ST1:CITY> mariposas
mientras viajar pensare de ti
quiero que sepas que vienes conmigo
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mi corazón te agradece

please forgive some inevitable accent problems. this is my first attempt at writing in another language, and it was much harder than i had hoped.Edited by: samuelle ^is really old but it sure is good. the english translation sucks! it just isn't the same.
I guess i should be posting some of my own work but others posts have honestly scared me--they are just that good.

misty
11-22-2005, 09:01 AM
Midnite Song

What could I do?
If I happened to miss you?
Too much later at night
And I couldn't sleep
Up to daybreak

Should I dial your number?
Should I send you short messages?
Asking you silly question
'Cause I knew that only you
Had the answers

Forgive me, I fall in love
Forgive me, I fall in love
Forgive me, I couldn't help it
I'm still in love

flyaway
11-29-2005, 09:18 PM
i wondered what you saw in me
as you walked out my door
I realised we agree

if this was a game of proving yourself
another complex way to lose a lover
then I'll take the dice away
I refuse to fall down a snake

questioning why I deserve
why your heart is reserved
for everyone but me.

keep it silent
keep it hushed
keep it faint
and zip me up

keep it secret
keep it quiet
you're climbing as i start to slide.

if this was a game of proving yourself
another complex way to lose a lover
then I'll take the dice away
I refuse to fall down another snake.

ill faited
the dice weighted
always falling to your favour
I'm a quitter
a bull ****ter
i'm sorry that I gave up



Umm, I haven't posted for a while :)

maccas81
11-30-2005, 01:04 PM
^^ those lyrics are pure class....love the bit about keep it quiet and zip me up.....thats brilliant!

samuelle
12-02-2005, 12:55 AM
Karl marx was a erman man, had a simple plan
control the economy, he inspired the soviet beurocracy
never intended, to create the most brutal affront to liberty


invoking karl marx in your lyrics makes you a hero in my book.

samuelle
12-02-2005, 12:57 AM
is really old but it sure is good. the english translation sucks! it just isn't the same.

hey, thanks! :smiley1: i'm so tired of how brash english sounds that i'm thinking about trying more italian.

maccas81
12-02-2005, 01:30 PM
invoking karl marx in your lyrics makes you a hero in my book.

thanks! it just kind of came to me that one, from where, i dont know!

Lazy Life
12-03-2005, 05:05 PM
'Goodnight New York'

Goodnight New York, I'll miss ya
Goodnight New York, 'till tomorrow
When it'll be 'Good Morning' for ya
Goodnight New York, 'till tomorrow

When you will hold my eyes for at least one more day
When you will hold my eyes for at least one more day

Goodnight New York, 'till tomorrow

Jarmuschrules
12-05-2005, 01:25 AM
hey guys, just wrote a great song

and so it is
just like you said it would be
life goes easy on me
most of the time
and so it is
the shorter story
no love no glory
no hero in her skies
i can't take my eyes off of you
and so it is
just like you said it should be
we'll both forget the breeze
most of the time
and so it is
the colder water
the blower's daughter
the pupil in denial
i can't take my eyes off of you
did I say that I loathe you?
did I say that I want to
leave it all behind?
i can't take my mind off of you
my mind
'til I find somebody new

but i think it wont be good

Juzzza
12-05-2005, 08:50 AM
Sorry Jarm... that's crap, it will NEVER take off.

I wouldn't listen to it a million times... work it out so I can sing it myself because I love it so much... it would NEVER be selected to feature in a movie soundtrack... Somebody famous say, Gary Lightbody from Snowpatrol for instance, would never cover it on the radio...nah, sorry dude... try again.

PenguinBoy
12-05-2005, 09:11 PM
i'm afraid i have to agree with juzzaa. I'm not angry jarm... just dissappointed. i feel slightly offended that u think those terrible lyrics are worth posting, it's a sad day.

*tongue placed in cheek so hard that it actually hurts*

Lazy Life
12-06-2005, 07:53 PM
Winter’s Rose

A frozen rose, idly stationed far away,
Sits with the Sun, above it glistening
The blankets of snow, upon which it lay
Begin to melt, oh this wondrous thing

Look out, my friend, be still, be smart
Over there, you see, a boy is listening
To the thunderous beat of the Rose’s heart
To the sound of old snow flakes twinkling

My friend, it is you of a younger age
Full of questions, full of questions
To you this Rose is a magical mage
Nothing so fine, has been seen for eons

-

But one question will lie with you beneath the grave
Will thee still know thy Love when the seasons change?

-

The following winter the snow came down
The Rose it grew three-fold, no, four
It grew and grew each time the cold came ‘round
For this truly is a Rose of Winter’s Law

Whenever spring came, followed it Sun
The snow went away, effortlessly
You looked after it, like it was your own
But one spring, you heard the wail of the banshee

The end was nigh, not for the Rose, but you
The night you died, we drank down our sorrows
‘Till the Sun came and the morning gave us dew
We set about burying you

-

One question still lies with you beneath the grave
Will thee still know thy Love when the seasons change?

-

The Rose now rests upon thy grave
Under your guidance the Rose grows well
The Rose is strong, you both were brave
I’ll see you soon, my friend, thank-you, fare thee well

Livo
12-06-2005, 09:14 PM
polar bears

shut out the cold wind freezing the air
shut out the cold rain sparkling hair
cold frost glitters on cars and the ground
halation makes moon circles, rainbows so round

maybe it's an arabian night
or maybe it's just my turkish delight
but solar glares hurt polar bears

hotter embers warm the grate
i remember colder, something yet more great
distant memories of a distant past
something to hold on to, something to last

maybe it's an arabian night
or maybe it's just my turkish delight
but solar glares hurt polar bears

genzoman
12-07-2005, 06:32 AM
havent posted any lyrics in a spell. heres that remedy

her wind
doesnt blow through my chimes
her wind
touches no hair of mine
ill go out
in her storm if i please
and come out with
a pair a scraped knees
because i beg
i beg for your love
not your bed
not even your touch

and your fire
well it dont worry me much
you see your flames always
cold to the touch
are you ashamed?
your life burns like it does
are you ashamed?
you see your heart turn to dust
my rain
waters no fields i can see
but my rain
can still water your eyes for me
and theyll grow
never this big again
darling.
theres a lot of picture to take in
and your floods
sweep my heart off to sea
but my mind stays anchored safely
to the ground where your rains fall
the same air in which your winds will blow

greenwave
12-07-2005, 08:33 PM
her wind...so beautiful...did you write these words?

genzoman
12-07-2005, 09:14 PM
her wind...so beautiful...did you write these words?


yea, i wrote them. and thanks alot for the compliment. im pretty reticent about telling people ive written anything--let alone i wrote a SONG. ive posted about 4 songs or so on here, and only one person outside the igloo has read them. *sigh*

Juzzza
12-08-2005, 09:47 AM
you've got me questioning, what I have to offer
I don't feel worthless exactly, but wonder why I bother
you've gone from angel to misery in double quick time
and 'face like a slapped ass' is an appropriate line

for everyone else, you're all smiles and light
then you come home and bitch and I get ready to fight
your friends are so lucky in the girl that they see
you've got time enough for all, well, except for me

my passions are a problem as they whisk me away
now I'm scared to tell you when I'm off to play
you say we are on wavelengths like chalk and cheese
it's more like fighting a hurricane with a gentle breeze

so it's really quite simple when you look at the facts
instead of your light, I'm the bad man in black
I'm tired of the whining, and ice in our bed
**** off and find somone that makes you smile instead

Livo
12-08-2005, 07:49 PM
hit me again

it's taken me a long time to realise
they're not out to get me and they're not all spies
people are bad and people are good
i think that's something seldom understood

white embers regain their flame
and for all this i'll claim the blame

hit me again, hit me again
hit me again cos i can take it
hit me again, hit me again
hit me again, cos you won't break it

it took me a while to stand up and shout
but that's what the business is all about
people can hear me through the walls
through their ceilings and down the halls

roasted crabs hissing in the bowl
toasted and drab, pissing on my soul

hit me again, hit me again
hit me again, cos i can take it
hit me again, hit me again
hit me again, cos you won't break it

stand straight and tall like pillars of rome
stand straight and tall like statues unknown

hit me again, hit me again
hit me again, cos i can take it
hit me again, hit me again
hit me again, cos you won't break it

Closing_Doors
12-08-2005, 08:23 PM
*sings along* Hit me baby one more time.....I'll get my coat. :smiley36:

Always_Echos
12-15-2005, 07:23 PM
The gentleness with which you play
Me by night, guitar by day
But like the guitar, of me you bore
And leave me cold upon your floor

My fingers find the grooves I made
From holding onto you
I've held on far much longer
Than you ever told me to

And now my dreams lie shattered
You're not the man I knew
Suddenly notes seem out of tune
And leave a wave of blue
And as these chords wash over me
My heart begins to ache
And fingers slip from worn out grooves
I fought so hard to make

So now my grip is failing
I cant just sit here waiting
Enough with all the aching
I will miss you...

Always_Echos
12-15-2005, 07:28 PM
For my bestest best friend in the entire world - Darren, I owe you my life...

The Talents of Friends

They pick you up when you fall down
Remove the obstruction from the ground
Wipe the tears that streak your face
Return you to your former grace
Hold you close when things get rough
Remind you that you're just as tough
Forgive whichever sins they see
And love you unconditionally

Always_Echos
12-20-2005, 07:05 PM
It would be really nice if someone could give me some feedback please...

maccas81
12-21-2005, 12:21 PM
The gentleness with which you play
Me by night, guitar by day
But like the guitar, of me you bore
And leave me cold upon your floor

My fingers find the grooves I made
From holding onto you
I've held on far much longer
Than you ever told me to

And now my dreams lie shattered
You're not the man I knew
Suddenly notes seem out of tune
And leave a wave of blue
And as these chords wash over me
My heart begins to ache
And fingers slip from worn out grooves
I fought so hard to make

So now my grip is failing
I cant just sit here waiting
Enough with all the aching
I will miss you...

i think this is a great song, it reminds me especially about learning the guitar myself....i like the way you equate a relationship to that....'fingers slip from wornout grooves i fought so hard to make'....i think thats a gorgeous line....well done!

Beevers_uk
12-21-2005, 10:04 PM
Ive just split up with my girlfriend and wrote these about her. Women :smiley21:

forgive me when were together,
doubt me when were apart.
Love me when were together,
and hate me when were apart.
Cant cope with it nomore,
Dont want to hurt and cry.
You never bored me,
But all i ask is why?

when you left me,
you said it was for good.
and you was gonna leave me,
you would stay if you could.
but i loved you to much,
For you to stay!
So u went your way.

As i watched you hail the cab,
Rain fell down on our face.
your cases were in the cab,
then your lips kissed me.
your taste on my lips,
made me cry for u to be with me.
made me cry for your passion,
for your passion.

when you left me,
you said it was for good.
and you was gonna leave me,
you would stay if you could.
but i loved you to much,
For you to stay!
So u went your way.

It was so long ago,
but my heart still cries for you.
Never felt this low before,
and never wanted you so much.

The Truth
I should have known,
And i should have known not to stay.
That night i was blown away,
Our naked bodies lay next to each other.
I thougth our love would never stray,
And forever we would be together.

If i said i loved you,
It was the truth.
And if i said i cared,
It was the truth.
Before it had started,
It had finished.

Remember our nights together,
And remember our nights together in bed.
Your blanket smelling of heather,
And your kiss in my head.
My tongue tasting your stomach,
And forever we wold be together.

If i said i loved you,
It was the truth.
And if i said i cared,
It was the truth.
Before it had started,
It had finished.

Im comin down of my high,
And now i see reality.
I wish i was still on that high,
And my heart would feel mighty.
One more night of passion,
And one more night in our new fashion!
I dont care what they say,
I dont care anymore
I only care for you to stay
I dont care no more.

If i said i loved you,
It was the truth.
And if i said i cared,
It was the truth.
Before it had started,
It had finished.

maccas81
12-22-2005, 02:58 PM
Ive just split up with my girlfriend and wrote these about her. Women :smiley21:

forgive me when were together,
doubt me when were apart.
Love me when were together,
and hate me when were apart.
Cant cope with it nomore,
Dont want to hurt and cry.
You never bored me,
But all i ask is why?

when you left me,
you said it was for good.
and you was gonna leave me,
you would stay if you could.
but i loved you to much,
For you to stay!
So u went your way.

As i watched you hail the cab,
Rain fell down on our face.
your cases were in the cab,
then your lips kissed me.
your taste on my lips,
made me cry for u to be with me.
made me cry for your passion,
for your passion.

when you left me,
you said it was for good.
and you was gonna leave me,
you would stay if you could.
but i loved you to much,
For you to stay!
So u went your way.

It was so long ago,
but my heart still cries for you.
Never felt this low before,
and never wanted you so much.

the Truth
I should have known,
And i should have known not to stay.
That night i was blown away,
Our naked bodies lay next to each other.
I thougth our love would never stray,
And forever we would be together.

If i said i loved you,
It was the truth.
And if i said i cared,
It was the truth.
Before it had started,
It had finished.

Remember our nights together,
And remember our nights together in bed.
Your blanket smelling of heather,
And your kiss in my head.
My tongue tasting your stomach,
And forever we wold be together.

If i said i loved you,
It was the truth.
And if i said i cared,
It was the truth.
Before it had started,
It had finished.

Im comin down of my high,
And now i see reality.
I wish i was still on that high,
And my heart would feel mighty.
One more night of passion,
And one more night in our new fashion!
I dont care what they say,
I dont care anymore
I only care for you to stay
I dont care no more.

If i said i loved you,
It was the truth.
And if i said i cared,
It was the truth.
Before it had started,
It had finished.

great stuff bevvers mate,m chin up! those lyrics would sound great with music, hope ya have a tune for them dude!

Beevers_uk
12-22-2005, 03:10 PM
Cheers Mate!!

Look at Me!
Look me in the eyes,
and tell me how you feel.
look me in my eyes,
for i have something to tell.
I wanna say this before you leave
and i need to say this before my heart
bleeds.

I dont wanna hear what i want to hear,
as i know i will never expirience it.
i cant bear to be alone,
and have to deal with it.

So let us dance,
amd rest your head on my chest.
naked and alone in the rain we will dance,
and i will confess what.
I wanna say before you leave,
and i need to say this before my heart
bleeds.

I dont wanna hear what i want to hear,
as i know i will never expirience it.
i cant bear to be alone,
and have to deal with it.

¿Tan si usted desea ir, - So if you wanna go,
después de que todos lo que he dicho? - after all i have said?
¿y después qué he demostrado? - and after what i've shown?
¡entonces pondré en mi cama - then i will lay on my bed.
y pine para usted y rogaré para usted! - and i will pine for you and pray for you!
y opinión te quiero. - and say i love you.

Regret
Dont ask me why,
I never meant to leave you this way.
Dont ask me why,
i was never meant to love what you say.
And Dont ask me why,
I never meant to lose my way.
And give you my heart,
Thats all i wanted.
Not for us to be apart
Just ask me what i wanted.

Well i wanna touch your lips,
In the pourin rain.
and hold your hips,
as we dance in the rain.
Feel your body close to mine,
While drinkin wine.
And listenin to Damine Rice.

I should have tried,
to make heaven wait.
I should have tried,
not to change fate.
And I should have tried,
Though its not to late.
Cause one day i will hold you,
In another world.
Just me and you,
holdin each other close...

Well i wanna touch your lips,
In the pourin rain.
and hold your hips,
as we dance in the rain.
Feel your body close to mine,
While drinkin wine.
And listenin to Damine Rice.

So now im saying goodbye to you,
Im sayin i will always love you.
i will always miss you,
and care for you.
But till i see you again,
God will protect you.
and we will kiss in the rain,
and dance in the rain.

Well i wanna touch your lips,
In the pourin rain.
and hold your hips,
as we dance in the rain.
Feel your body close to mine,
While drinkin wine.
And listenin to Damine Rice.

cartman
12-22-2005, 05:53 PM
when i get done with this
ill pass you my conclusion
alot more thinking to be done
its all just such confusion

where i go or what i do
time is going and iv alot to lose
i wonder why i am thinking this
as i know what would happen if

everyday i see you face
i wonder why im in your grace
sometimes when i look at you
i realise what i have to do

i want to be with you sweet darling
all of this has got me falling
from your ledge of friendliness
to the ledge i cant dismiss

i think of what it could be
i know that its not true
but why keep waiting for you show
what would really make my heaven glow

i know that this is foolish
i know that its not true
but i cant stress how much i long
for dream and thoughts to follow true

ill leave you with a question
what have i done wrong?
for you to not be needed
by someone who needs you

fairytales and little thoughts
of sunshine and the sea
will never make it to this earth
for you and me to see

i cant retract what i have done
i cant bring back the pass
i can however try my best
to finish this at last


all i need is fairytales and little thoughts of
sunshine and the sea
will fix me up beatufiully
and make for forget about thee.

when im finished ill give ya this
you wonder why its not fixed
ill leave you just this question to answer
what have i done

not really a song, well it has a chord structure to it but no chorus or nothing, i like to call it a collection of thoughts

Beevers_uk
12-24-2005, 01:33 PM
I let you go.

Staring blankly at your face,
Watchin you smile.
its surrounded by a cheap frame,
And protected by glass.
Your long brown hair,
Hangs behind your back.
The colour of your cheaks,
Bright and happy.

Your sat on a bench,
And the picture sits on my desk.
Your picture goes hazy,
The taste of salt in my mouth.
I wipe away my tears,
And drink another drink.

Your below me now,
Still i look up to you.
I pray everynight,
For you to protect me.
Protect me till the day,
when im with you.
I remember seein your body,
Layin still in my arms.
Not saying a word,
Not breathing.

I hold your head to my chest,
Thinkin i was protectin you.
I began screamin your name,
Shoutin loud in vain.
Your body stil warm in my hand,
Your last words still in my head.
I kissed your lips then your head,
and then i let you go,
I let you go...

i remember you being lowered,
Watchin the coffin go in to its coffin.
The rain pattin on the lid,
And runnin down my suit.
People surrounding me,
Sayin it will be OK.
As i threw down the rose,
It landed on your Plaque.
Thats the sign i knew it was over,
Thats the sign i knew you was gone.

So now i sit here,
Staring at your face.
Longing for you to be here,
I remember...
I let you go,
I let you go.

Hush
"Hush...
And close your eyes,
And i'll be your eyes.
Take my hand,
And i'll hold you close.
Dancing slow to the band,
And It'll be OK."

So you took me back,
Back to your house.
Or naked bodies,
Alone in your house.
A night of passion,
Like never before.
Never going outta Fashion,
The door to my hearts Wide open,
And heres what you said...

"Hush...
And open your heart,
My heart is already open.
Ive never felt,
This Fulfilled before.
Im ready to melt,
Before you."

Is it necessary,
For these words you speak?
Time so blury,
That your words Leak.
So fast,
I cant write them down.
They'll always last,
Forever in my head.
And heres what you said...

"Hush...
And close your lips.
And watch my Lips.
Thank you for your love,
I must go now.
Though i'll never forget your love,
Or how you made me feel.

The Beating of you heart!
Slow down your heart,
Slow down your lungs too.
But dont forget your heart,
As you could do.
And listen to your heart,
And start seein now.
Now tell me how apart,
Your love is now.

Did you see that star die?
Did you see that star be born?
And did you hear that lie?
Of love and porn?
It came from your forest,
But no-one heard it.
So just leave it to rest,
Bit by bit.

Slow down the beat...
of your bruised heart,
But dont slow your lungs down.
Your heart is fractured enough,
So come lay down.
And let me stroke you hair,
While holding you close.
I know this isn't fair,
But we was always going to lose.

Did you see that star die?
Did you see that star be born?
And did you hear that lie?
Of love and porn?
It came from your forest,
But no-one heard it.
So just leave it to rest,
Bit by bit.

Now tell me whats going on?
When you rest your hand on my heart.
Can you feel the beat has gone?
Now that were apart.
And im left with a lock of you hair,
Your dark Long curls.
You left in my draw,
Sendin my heart in Wurls.

Did you see that star die?
Did you see that star be born?
And did you hear that lie?
Of love and porn?
It came from your forest,
But no-one heard it.
So just leave it to rest,
Bit by bit..

Got the blues bad.
Well my heart is crying,
Ever since the day you left.
You can hear it Lying,
Saying its fine.
When really its dying.

Well you've been driving my Blues now
You've been fueling my time of depression.
My heart thanks you now,
for teachin me a valuable lesson

Well everyday im blue,
Walkin around in the rain.
no souls on my shoes,
leaving marks on the strain.
The Strain of the blues!

Well you've been driving my Blues now
You've been fueling my time of depression.
My heart thanks you now,
for teachin me a valuable lesson

On a sunday i go to Church,
I kneel down and pray.
Just me and him in church,
But only he wants to pray.
We both pray for the blues to die.

Well you've been driving my Blues now
You've been fueling my time of depression.
My heart thanks you now,
for teachin me a valuable lesson

Well the sky is weepin,
Since you left Its to got the blues.
My heart to is weepin,
And Thats why we sing the blues

Well you've been driving my Blues now
You've been fueling my time of depression.
My heart thanks you now,
for teachin me a valuable lesson

Lazy Life
12-26-2005, 10:47 PM
This is a country song, without a name at the moment:)


Up in the mountains where the wild horses run
The only friend you have is the sun
But you won't be alone for very long

I'm coming, I'm coming
You wait right there honey
And we'll spend the rest of our lives together

I'm not worried about working a dime in cotton fields,
You'll be there
I'm worried if you can withstand the length of our lives
I hope you can, I hope you can

You'll warm to the idea, girl, I'm sure
And I swear, I ain't no bore
But it still ain't too late to take the lovesick cure

The hils are warming as spring comes 'round
Everybody's a-headin' into town
Sad faces as they drive past the grave mounds

I'm not worried if I'm not earning enough to live,
You'll be there,
I'm worried if you can withstand the length of our lives
I hope you can, I hope you can

What your Ma told you 'bout living in the country
My God, they were all lies
Still, we get the best rainbows in the sky

Come, let's share a whiksey, my Love
You can never get enough of that suff
And that stuff sends your mind insane

I'm not worried about growing old,
You'll be there
I'm worried if you can withstand the length of our lives
I hope you can, I hope you can

Please Lord, don't let my ideas go up in a balloon
Don't spin no curse with your loon
Don't make it "Goodbye, I'll see you soon"


(Deliberatley ill-fitting lines and rhymes :))

Livo
12-29-2005, 06:00 PM
hello hello!

i'm under the weather
sick of living in blue
and i can't decide whether
to smile at you

it's a cold air cold lungs day
and i'm supporting yellow
and then i see you come my way
and i can't even say hello

hello hello hello another sleepless night
hello hello hello brain and your sleepless plight
hello hello i'm falling from a great height
hello hello and with your help i won't take fright

red beacon shining
it's blinding me i cannot see
can you see me smiling
and all because you looked at me

hello hello hello another sleepless night
hello hello hello brain and your sleepless plight
hello hello i'm falling from a great height
hello hello and with your help i won't take fright

i'm under the weather
sick of living in blue
and i have decided whether
i'm going to smile at you :smiley1:

The Pink Girly
12-29-2005, 07:43 PM
The gentleness with which you play
Me by night, guitar by day
But like the guitar, of me you bore
And leave me cold upon your floor

My fingers find the grooves I made
From holding onto you
I've held on far much longer
Than you ever told me to

And now my dreams lie shattered
You're not the man I knew
Suddenly notes seem out of tune
And leave a wave of blue
And as these chords wash over me
My heart begins to ache
And fingers slip from worn out grooves
I fought so hard to make

So now my grip is failing
I cant just sit here waiting
Enough with all the aching
I will miss you...


love this babe and i'm not just saying it coz it's you!
that line about grooves is wkd.
hope you had a great christmas spk soon
xxxxxxx lovelove

Miss Pink
12-30-2005, 02:33 PM
am sorry darling, I dont speak soft words.
I only know the harsh words of my soul
they mark you with their corners,
and leave you with my scars.

i must face the mirror, pay the world with time
learn to calm my fever. disregard that mask on mine

I'm sorry, I'm sorry, I must learn to let go
just give me a few more hours, and then I'll really know


Je suis le chéri désolé, je ne parle pas de mots doux.
Je sais seulement les mots durs de mon âme
ils vous marquent avec leurs coins,
et vous partir avec mes cicatrices

je dois faire face au miroir, payer le monde avec le temps
apprendre à calmer ma fièvre. l'indifférence qui masque sur le mien
juste me donner un peu plus d'heures, et alors je vraiment saurai

Je suis désolé, je suis désolé, je dois apprendre à laisser va

audity
01-07-2006, 01:59 AM
Here's the lyrics to a song that I wrote several years ago. I've performed it at several gigs.

Waiting For Love

Cold skies
Off in the distance.
This is my future.
Waiting for me ---

My mind
Travlin’ in circles.
No time for dreaming.
Waiting for life ---

Millions
Trapped in a cycle.
My heart is screaming.
Waiting for love ---

Waiting for love (x8)

______________________________
Untitled Love Song

With all the people in love at the centre of space/
Reminds me that love has a time, and loves needs a place/
Why do we spend all of our strength?/
Looking for love/
Why do we search eternity’s length?/
Looking for love/
Why do we risk it all for something we can’t see?/
Knowing how painful these things can be/

I've spent all my stength/
Looking for love/
I've searched all of time/
Looking for love/
And I've found you/
That's all I do/
Is loving you/
One thing is true/
That I love you/
Nothing's changed/
Nothing's new/
I still love you/

____________________

What do you guys think? Be nice, I have tender feelings. :smiley14:

maccas81
01-07-2006, 02:31 PM
^ excellent work audity, some class lyrics there! where did u play the gigs? Are u in a band or solo artist?

audity
01-07-2006, 06:08 PM
i'm a solo artist...but i'm usually backed by guest artists....no band for me....

i've done gigs in prague, dublin, and singapore...never a home gig!

Livo
01-07-2006, 10:13 PM
excellent lyrics man! :smiley20:

gomezxico
01-08-2006, 01:00 AM
nice material audity!

audity
01-08-2006, 06:02 AM
Thanks guys. Maybe I'll try posting a track on here.

genzoman
01-09-2006, 07:31 AM
a little snippet i just conjured up.


my love, if you please
would you hold your breath for me
cause i dont think ive ever seen
an angels chest, rise and fall
my love, if you please
would you raise your glass with me
cause i dont think ive ever toasted
to the stars, up above
my love, if you please
if i asked shyly
like the way you like
and stuttered once or twice
do you think you'd love me love?
and you and me we'll sit outside
with wind in our hair
and love in our eyes
and we'll talk forever it seems
then the sun, like a cup is spilled
rolling down every rock and hill
and the dawn whispers to me it was a dream
my love, if you please

audity
01-10-2006, 03:54 AM
that is really good genzoman!
do you mind if i steal it a make a lot of money off of it? lol.
:smiley36:

seriously, that was an excellent bit...keep working on it...i think you really got something!

genzoman
01-10-2006, 05:19 AM
thanks. ive been really thankful that all the stuff ive posted on here has been well-recieved

Beevers_uk
01-13-2006, 03:22 PM
Well I've kissed your lips,
And i've looked deep in your eys.
Ive placed my hands on your hip,
But never felt your lies.
Well i've heard you say those words,
And i've seen you cry.
You placed me in those words,
But never felt me try.
Well together we've lied,
And together we stared.
We placed our love high and tried,
But together we felt scared.

Now its over, all we have are out memories,
Along with our tears.
Passing us by, hour after hour,
And time will dry our tears.
If not it will scare our fears,
And we'll fear our love no-more.

I've tried to forget you,
And i've asked for more.
Placed myself in you,
But never felt anymore.
Together we tasted each other,
And together we came.
Placed ourselves in each other,
But never felt the shame.
I've heard your pleasure,
And i've held your face.
Placed our love on the fixture,
But never lost its grace.

Now its over, all we have are out memories,
Along with our pain.
Passing us by, hour after hour,
And time will heal our pain.
If not it will scare our fears,
And we'll fear our love no-more.

Always_Echos
01-14-2006, 12:34 PM
Well I've kissed your lips,
And i've looked deep in your eys.
Ive placed my hands on your hip,
But never felt your lies.
Well i've heard you say those words,
And i've seen you cry.
You placed me in those words,
But never felt me try.
Well together we've lied,
And together we stared.
We placed our love high and tried,
But together we felt scared.

Now its over, all we have are out memories,
Along with our tears.
Passing us by, hour after hour,
And time will dry our tears.
If not it will scare our fears,
And we'll fear our love no-more.

I've tried to forget you,
And i've asked for more.
Placed myself in you,
But never felt anymore.
Together we tasted each other,
And together we came.
Placed ourselves in each other,
But never felt the shame.
I've heard your pleasure,
And i've held your face.
Placed our love on the fixture,
But never lost its grace.

Now its over, all we have are out memories,
Along with our pain.
Passing us by, hour after hour,
And time will heal our pain.
If not it will scare our fears,
And we'll fear our love no-more.

This has some pretty good lines in it, the bit about 'never felt your lies' etc, - nice. But I have to admit, I'm getting a little worried about your state of health, I mean, all these songs are obviously for someone who hurt you, and you're kinda of obsessing. I'm not trying to be mean, but you need to find some kind of closure, while your music is getting a lot out of your hurt, you yourself are getting nothing. Maybe we could hear something more positive next time you post? Beautiful words dont have to mean pain. Best of luck hon.

cartman
01-17-2006, 03:45 AM
sorry for leaving
---------

I whisper in your ear again
i tell you thats its finishing
i see your face ,its killing me
to see you cry, im sorry

i leave this cloud behind me
i hope the sun comes and warms me'
out in the rain, nowhere to go
I see your star, it entrauls me

im sorry for leaving, im sorry for love
I need you beside and hope from above
i listen to you now, i hear you cry
im hear for you baby, im hear by your side

all that i need, is one single sign
ill run to your rescue and be at your side
I know this wont happen, i know that were through
but no harm in dreaming, dreaming of you


All ive ever learned from love
is baby that it hurts so much
i wont get to see you now for a long time
but baby remeber ,you_were my first love
theres no harm in believein, it was meant to hurt



im sorry for leaving, im sorry for love
I need you beside and hope from above
i listen to you now, i hear you cry
im hear for you baby, im hear by your side

all that i need, is one single sign
ill run to your rescue and be at your side
I know this wont happen, i know that were through
but no harm in dreaming, dreaming of you


i will love you forever, i will love you no more,
i will see you tonight, sweet dreams ill see you to the door

i open my eyes, i look to my side, your nowhere near
now its all so clear



All ive ever learned from love
is baby that it hurts so much
i wont get to see you now for a long time
but baby remeber ,you_were my first love

chorus: [sorry for leaving bit]
---------------------------------------------------------------------

dunno what to call this[ can give me suggestions if ya want]

its over
i cant have you no more girl
i see through your door girl
i need to view your lines
i need to see you

more girl
i cant believe its over
i feel like screaming once more girl
i dream of you again
i can this through again
i can see you clear

and its over the moon where the sun dont shine
there lies the dreams
of happiness with no waiting line
i need to see this
i fly way above the sky
i visit where they lie
i dream of you once im there
and thats where you enter...

your gone girl
theres no turning back from this wrong turn
i realise its hards for you girl
but please think of me
i can see you dreaming,

freely
and now its time for the cleansing
i wash your face from my memory
i wash away your tears
the skys are finally clear
its time to leave

and its over the moon where the sun dont shine
there lies the dreams
of happiness with no waiting line
i need to see this
i fly way above the sky
i visit where they lie
i dream of you once im there
and thats where you enter...

and its over the moon where the sun dont shine
there lies the dreams
of happiness with no waiting line
i need to see this
i fly way above the sky
i visit where they lie
i dream of you once im there
and thats where you enter...

its gone girls
maybe well meet in another world
i dream of us being together girl
but now your on your own
my heart is moving on...
on...

------
out of time [think i posted this before]
my only recorded track , but im going into a recording studio sometime this year to record another 8-9 :)

this is where the story starts
all alone without you
stupid mind games and confessions
bitchin on the phone too

everyday is another
taking one step at a time
coping well without you by my side
starting to get back in line

then you walk in through my door again
you just, you want to talk
ruining all of my progression
for just a single thought

all the nights that i dreamt of you
all the days that i cried
you were nowhere me then
its not like you even tried

all the memorys will stay with me
but i think that well never be free
everytime that i think of you
i cannot live without you

so how long, oh and its forever she said
how long, its for a while
how long, o and its never
were almost out of time

now i sit here writing this song
thinking of what has happened
i have lost everything
im all on my own again

so how long, oh and its forever she said
how long, its for a while
how long, o and its never
were almost out of time

this is where the story ends
all alone without you
i dream of us being togheter girl
but i know its not true

so how long, oh and its forever she said
how long, its for a while
how long will this last, i dont know
its just gone and passed me by

so how long, oh and its forever she said
how long, its for a while
how long, o and its never
were all,were all out of time

------------------------------------

cartman

all songs are played with guitar

Lazy Life
01-18-2006, 07:18 PM
Smile Your Smile

Have you ever, ever loved a woman
To find she ain't all she seems?
Have you ever, ever seen a woman
To find it's you she dreams?
Smile your smile, smile your smile
Your the lady I need

Have you ever, ever seen a grown man
Who won't tell you where he's been?
Have you ever, ever seen a grown man
Who finds haven in the sun beams?
Smile your smile, smile your smile
Your the man for me

http://mfdz.com/track/1971

Lazy Life
01-21-2006, 09:19 PM
Hello, Hello Freedom

Hello, hello Freedom
Why don't you ever stick around?
We are now in our time of need
Can you not see where society's bound?

Today I woke up to expect you
Imagine my surprise when you were not there
I asked someone where you'd gone
They said you had flown off somewhere

Perhaps to sing to the trees
Or to find peace amongst chaos
But I found you on the northern shore
Where there is no pebble to toss

Hello, hello Freedom
Why don't you ever stick around?
We are now in our time of need
Can you not see where society's bound?

I try not to read the news
It only ever makes me sad
You know, even just yesterday
I heard they killed another man

We gotta put a stop to it, right now
We cannot live our lives in fear
We gotta put a stop to it, right now
Before they bring another man to tears

Hello, hello Freedom
Why don't you ever stick around?
We are now in our time of need
Can you not see where society's bound?



Let Me Go

Caught up in something I'd rather not be in
Grasping at ropes that are pulling me out of this hole
Where the sun don't shine for no-one
Where the night and the day merge into one

And when are you gonna let me go?
You've been letting me down for so long

It's cold, it's cold but I can still feel the heat
The once whispering wind is now screaming
I know I was wrong, I know I was wrong
And just wish now I was back home

And when are you gonna let me go?
You've been letting me down for so long

The Pink Girly
01-29-2006, 09:38 PM
sorry for leaving
---------

I whisper in your ear again
i tell you thats its finishing
i see your face ,its killing me
to see you cry, im sorry

i leave this cloud behind me
i hope the sun comes and warms me'
out in the rain, nowhere to go
I see your star, it entrauls me

im sorry for leaving, im sorry for love
I need you beside and hope from above
i listen to you now, i hear you cry
im hear for you baby, im hear by your side

all that i need, is one single sign
ill run to your rescue and be at your side
I know this wont happen, i know that were through
but no harm in dreaming, dreaming of you


All ive ever learned from love
is baby that it hurts so much
i wont get to see you now for a long time
but baby remeber ,you_were my first love
theres no harm in believein, it was meant to hurt



im sorry for leaving, im sorry for love
I need you beside and hope from above
i listen to you now, i hear you cry
im hear for you baby, im hear by your side

all that i need, is one single sign
ill run to your rescue and be at your side
I know this wont happen, i know that were through
but no harm in dreaming, dreaming of you


i will love you forever, i will love you no more,
i will see you tonight, sweet dreams ill see you to the door

i open my eyes, i look to my side, your nowhere near
now its all so clear



All ive ever learned from love
is baby that it hurts so much
i wont get to see you now for a long time
but baby remeber ,you_were my first love

chorus: [sorry for leaving bit]
---------------------------------------------------------------------

dunno what to call this[ can give me suggestions if ya want]

its over
i cant have you no more girl
i see through your door girl
i need to view your lines
i need to see you

more girl
i cant believe its over
i feel like screaming once more girl
i dream of you again
i can this through again
i can see you clear

and its over the moon where the sun dont shine
there lies the dreams
of happiness with no waiting line
i need to see this
i fly way above the sky
i visit where they lie
i dream of you once im there
and thats where you enter...

your gone girl
theres no turning back from this wrong turn
i realise its hards for you girl
but please think of me
i can see you dreaming,

freely
and now its time for the cleansing
i wash your face from my memory
i wash away your tears
the skys are finally clear
its time to leave

and its over the moon where the sun dont shine
there lies the dreams
of happiness with no waiting line
i need to see this
i fly way above the sky
i visit where they lie
i dream of you once im there
and thats where you enter...

and its over the moon where the sun dont shine
there lies the dreams
of happiness with no waiting line
i need to see this
i fly way above the sky
i visit where they lie
i dream of you once im there
and thats where you enter...

its gone girls
maybe well meet in another world
i dream of us being together girl
but now your on your own
my heart is moving on...
on...

------
out of time [think i posted this before]
my only recorded track , but im going into a recording studio sometime this year to record another 8-9 :)

this is where the story starts
all alone without you
stupid mind games and confessions
bitchin on the phone too

everyday is another
taking one step at a time
coping well without you by my side
starting to get back in line

then you walk in through my door again
you just, you want to talk
ruining all of my progression
for just a single thought

all the nights that i dreamt of you
all the days that i cried
you were nowhere me then
its not like you even tried

all the memorys will stay with me
but i think that well never be free
everytime that i think of you
i cannot live without you

so how long, oh and its forever she said
how long, its for a while
how long, o and its never
were almost out of time

now i sit here writing this song
thinking of what has happened
i have lost everything
im all on my own again

so how long, oh and its forever she said
how long, its for a while
how long, o and its never
were almost out of time

this is where the story ends
all alone without you
i dream of us being togheter girl
but i know its not true

so how long, oh and its forever she said
how long, its for a while
how long will this last, i dont know
its just gone and passed me by

so how long, oh and its forever she said
how long, its for a while
how long, o and its never
were all,were all out of time

------------------------------------

cartman

all songs are played with guitar


i love these cartman! i love the first two especially!
nothing else to say really!

Always_Echos
02-04-2006, 06:40 PM
This is a song written by my husband, just have a little look-see and give us some feedback. Pretty please!


I'm watching the sunset fall behind a line of trees
I'm hearing no whisper as they come as they please
And I hope that you can stay another year with me
But I know you can't.

Feel my touch on the way we could be
Feel my breath as we hold on from here

I promise I'll hold onto the words you said to me
As long as the sunset stays I know that I'll feel free
But you don't change
Dont change,
But you don't change
Don't change
Dont change

Feel my touch on the way we could be
Feel my breath as we hold on from here

(c) Heavy Melody/ Scarred Music 2006
www.heavymelody.moonfruit.com (http://www.heavymelody.moonfruit.com) to hear this track:)

The Pink Girly
02-05-2006, 05:48 PM
^hey lauren that's wicked, but... your husband?! did i miss something?!

Livo
02-07-2006, 09:28 PM
wrote these last night:

heaven sent/hell bent

it's below zero outside
so i'm drying icicles on your pillow
i try to block out the light
i try to paint out the shadows

i'm caught in the crossfire
caught in barbed wire

cos you're heaven-sent
and made by angels
and i'm hell-bent on making you mine

do i live on in selfish hope?
do i live my life without you?
we'll wait and we'll find
we'll find songs and answers in the dust

i'm caught in the crossfire
caught in barbed wire

cos you're heaven-sent
made by angels
and i'm hell-bent on making you mine

maccas81
02-08-2006, 07:16 PM
Livi I thikn thats pure class....top drawer stuff as always! how do you keep producing it??!! the heaven/hell theme is just brilliant!

Livo
02-09-2006, 05:05 PM
thanks! :smiley4: a lot of those lyrics came from when we skiing with school in italy, (icicles etc) and i just write them into my phone and sort em out with a guitar later.

maccas81
02-09-2006, 07:38 PM
well whatever the trick is its working! well done!

genzoman
02-13-2006, 06:09 AM
here's my newest

the air did carry the sound
of a thousand singing bells
the winds did blow, quite low
a song of subtle change
bell's voice is rising
even as the ground
begins to shake below
and tear all of me down
i speak to bell heart to heart
too scared to make a sound
i speak to her heart to heart
as if each ounce is a pound
and each pound of my heart it starts
weakening my knees
it flaps the wings of butterflies
and shakes the leaves of trees
kneeling now i plead to bell
in song as best i can
i speak words like rocks
strong and tough
and throw them in the winds
but her sisters song is high
and beautiful in chorus
my words were swirled as if just sand
and landed on the shores.
not rocks nor song or sight or voice
can make me make my bell rejoice
in my minds eye i can tell easily
the answer is the sea
so i sea i made and made it blue
a sprawling, deep ferocious hue
i screamed above her sisters song
'i made this sea for you'
please bell will you love me now
do you think this sea will do?

tj
02-13-2006, 01:24 PM
here's one of my most recent... a bit of feedback... both positive and negative would be very much appreciated... :)

Your arms around me burns the photograph in my inside pocket,
You're drawing me in with each day passing,
'Oh Jesus, Mary and Joseph I'm Blinded and drownded,'
I think I need to tell someone...
So pass me the phone.

I'm a perfect picture of madness,
Yet I'm afraid of being crazy,
I find comfort in great sadness,
I'm the perfect picture of madness.

Driving through an Ulster town in the early morning,
It's dark and I can't see much for fog at all,
Tell me your real plans,
Am I the rain on your window that disappears?
Well Darling I'll Evaporate and I will fall near you again someday.

(Chorus)

Courage is faith and faith is courage,
But Just Like Thomas I Have alot to Learn,
Do I Sign My name or remain anonymous?
Do I Sign My Name?

Chorus x2

Always_Echos
02-14-2006, 01:05 AM
^hey lauren that's wicked, but... your husband?! did i miss something?!

Lol, he's not really, (not yet anyway! ;) ) but he thought it would be funny to say he was... muppet.

Glad you liked them anyway, did anybody else???

Iwasatabarwiththis,lady
02-19-2006, 04:39 PM
guys, can you reassure me that my latest song is not as bad as i think. Im just so unhappy with it. I think its utter crap.

i pack my suit in a bag
i'm all dressed up for prague
i'm all dressed up with you
all dressed up for him too
prepare myself for a war
before i even open up my door
before i even look out
i'm pissing all of my bullets about
i wrap myself in a bag
i'm all wrapped up in prague
i'm all wrapped up in you
i'm all wrapped up in him too
prepare myself for a war
and I don't know what i'm doing this for
trying to let it all go
but how can i when you still don't know?
i could wait for you
like that hole in your boot waiting to be fixed
i could wait for you
but what good would that do but to leave me pricked?
cheers darlin'
here's to you and your lover
...darling
i got years...
pack my suit in a bag
all dressed up for prague
pack my suit in a bag
all dressed up for...
denmark

PenguinBoy
02-19-2006, 05:26 PM
i'm afraid it's been done before ^

Iwasatabarwiththis,lady
02-19-2006, 05:50 PM
damn, he is one untalanted bigot

jemarami
02-20-2006, 07:58 AM
Here's some songs and lyrics that I've made at my tripod.com homepage...
http://jemarami.tripod.com/

Timeé
02-20-2006, 08:18 PM
Hello. :p

So I wrote a poem called:

Faith of a Justice

Throat yawn, throat yawn,
Hear ye' of solemn song,
Of still-born grace descend swiftly into,
Hang on to that floating bell, to thy kingdom;
thee are enslaved.

Come forth swiftly, up-end the rails,
Love and joy forthcoming in sleet and hails,
Free at last from this almighty burden,
Neverending, ever-bleeding till your heart stills.

Oh father, oh father of righteousness and unknown creed,
I need a tongue-lashing, my grateful need,
To seep the yearn, the fruit you bear,
Till penguins dance and foxes stare.


Try and figure it out yourself (the meaning)
,
Timeé

PenguinBoy
02-21-2006, 09:43 PM
nice penguin reference :D i'm afraid i didn't get it,maybe it's political? i dno.

would u mind if i corrected some of that mate ^ ... "thou art" not "thee are"


i wrote a little jingle jangle the other night:

he's so pretty
he's so clean
he ain't witty
but he ain't mean

he's got a car
and he's got a smile
you won't see him hurt
and u won't see him cry

he's everything u need
he's there when ur lonely
and away when u don't want company


and it's not about me
and ur right, i could never give you that security,
that convenience

so why,
why, my silver darling
why does that not make me happy.

well maybe that means,
you're not the one
i'm not content with ur peace
so u can't be.

Timeé
02-21-2006, 10:40 PM
nice penguin reference :D i'm afraid i didn't get it,maybe it's political? i dno.

would u mind if i corrected some of that mate ^ ... "thou art" not "thee are"
.

No I'm not that vain, so thanks for the correction :smiley31:

Yeah so it's about God and three different peoples interpretations of God
and how he influences them in each of their lives. (one kind of person a verse)

The second one is about still-born babies and they go directly to heaven,
because they are free of sin etc. The rest is too complicated. :o

So as a penguin, can you dance?

I like the jingle :smiley32: , you should be a card poem-writer like Adam Sandler in Mr.Deeds

Always_Echos
02-23-2006, 09:56 PM
So as a penguin, can you dance?

Lolol, sorry, made me giggle...:smiley36:

Lazy Life
03-12-2006, 04:56 PM
Without A Gun

Young Jack Correy left town on them trains
After hearing of a revolution New York way
He went without saying goodbye to his wife and kids
But with a note on the dresser, farewell he did bid
He left at dawn on next door's horse
Leaving a note of apology, of course
He went through them gates, without a gun
And the town's population went down by one

I tried to warn him but he didn't heed the call
And he left town without a gun
Them tracks run staright over the canyon
And he left town without a gun

Lord knows what happens to a man out there alone
But they usually comes home in a bag full of bones
Sure enough, a yesterday I got word
Just outside of New York he got murdered
I told his wife and she started to cry
I said don't do that and I looked her in the eye
He'll be back in your heart
Before you have time to depart

I tried to warn him but he didn't heed the call
And he left town without a gun
Them tracks run staright over the canyon
And he left town without a gun

Do you know the fear that grips a man, whan he can't feed his family?
Don't follow this man to his grave, you just listen to me.

Why he did it I think I'm sure
He went in search of a new found cure
For here he had no money to speak of
And most nights you could see him praying to God
Why he did it for real, I don't know
But either way, bless his soul
We're living in a town called Jacklessville
Where Jack's bones rest on a hill

I tried to warn him but he didn't heed the call
And he left town without a gun
Them tracks run staright over the canyon
And he left town without a gun

Listen >> (http://media.putfile.com/Without-A-Gun)

PenguinBoy
03-12-2006, 08:28 PM
http://www.eskimofriends.com/forum/showthread.php?t=10297

samuelle
03-28-2006, 04:55 AM
all i've managed are snippets lately. i think i may have developed songwriter ADD...

"walking away feels like
the last days of summer."

"the things you untangle i tangle again."

"are you listening
to this momentous silence
with truth in between?"

"no, i'm not one to be blindly
walking around corners
just to see what i find."

"feeling newlywed to my inhibitions,
deluded into thinking there is levity in loss
where there is just loss."

if you squint and don't pay attention to structure, you can pretend that it is a full song. perhaps someday these will grow up into something full length...

PenguinBoy
04-01-2006, 11:54 PM
I wrote an aggressive song called BEAT ME

Beat me
======

Daddy Daddy won't u beat me
I don't give a damn no more
My life is happiest when
I'm out on the floor

Cos there ain't no nightmares
like there are in my bed
It's sharp but peaceful
like a bullet through my head

ooh u made me this
ooh u made me this

So i've gone into the world
looking for that pain
looking for that pill
to keep me sane

i felt soulfully raped
and it made me want to cry
if only i hadn't escaped
I could have saved the world and died

ooh u made me this
ooh u made me this

I got me lady who really did
like to play it rough
she smacked me a cracked me
and treated me real tough

One day i hit back and found
that it was something i liked more
i liked to scrap and clap that
dirty filthy whore

I stood above her crying thinking

I know wouldn't hurt someone
so this can't be me
And i guess that means i don't exist
I guess that means i'm free

so i roamed down town and got a bitch
and drowned her in the pond
i was like a dead man walking without much talking
and death was my magic wand

you see right now i run the streets
Now i don't do no thinking these days
i just kill and i rape and i mame
for no reason than to keep me insane


ooh u made me this
ooh u made me this

Daddy Daddy won't u beat me
I don't give a damn no more
My life is happiest when
I'm out on the floor

Cos there ain't no nightmares
like there are in my bed
It's sharp but peaceful
like a bullet through my head

i felt soulfully raped
and it made me want to cry
if only i hadn't escaped
I could have saved the world and died

PenguinBoy
04-02-2006, 12:10 AM
all i've managed are snippets lately. i think i may have developed songwriter ADD...

"walking away feels like
the last days of summer."

"the things you untangle i tangle again."

"are you listening
to this momentous silence
with truth in between?"

"no, i'm not one to be blindly
walking around corners
just to see what i find."

"feeling newlywed to my inhibitions,
deluded into thinking there is levity in loss
where there is just loss."

if you squint and don't pay attention to structure, you can pretend that it is a full song. perhaps someday these will grow up into something full length...

heyho, i'm doing a simmilar thing at the moment, but i'm contemplating just leaving the song snippety and making the music cut up at the right points, could be extra swish.

Beevers_uk
04-05-2006, 01:03 AM
I was getting undressed and in to my Pj's when i found this on the floor! It must have fell out of my trouser pockets! It was wrote on a Recept from my holiday last week!

"Remember your face in my hand, cupping your cheeks. Like wings of fan angel, upon her back. I held you, held you deep and strong.

Your mouth pressed against my ear, feeling your breath and hearing your pleasure. Our bodies moving against us both, seperatd by sweat, and out beating hearts.

Remember when drunk we would sing and act like those fools... Staying up till six and talking in drunken ridles. Slurring our love, and spilling our hearts.

Your lipstick stain glass, held in your hands. Cupped and protected, protected from your fire inside. How you closed your eyes, as you brought the glass to your lips. Painting your memories and your heart, tempolary (sp) on my glass."

I cant remember writing it! its in my handwriting, and looks to be used by a pen i always use! Hmmmm... I must have been drunk :smiley24:

PenguinBoy
04-05-2006, 10:10 AM
i like it! do you know what it's about? maybe you have a damienesque talent for writing music with wine.

did u read my latest :( no-one commented

Timeé
04-05-2006, 10:51 AM
i like it! do you know what it's about? maybe you have a damienesque talent for writing music with wine.

did u read my latest :( no-one commented

Yeah i read it and i think its really good.

jesus you cant have felt good writing that :smiley3:

Its got a baby-sisteresque vibe. :smiley23:

Keep writing because you've obviously got a talent

Beevers_uk
04-05-2006, 12:10 PM
i like it! do you know what it's about? maybe you have a damienesque talent for writing music with wine.

did u read my latest :( no-one commented

lol, i think to much Vino is bad for the old nogger! lol! And i have noooo idea what its about!

Yeah, you sent me it on MSN! I really liked it, very very angry, and emtional! Its like an eruption of anger, thats been pent up for awhile! DId you check out Jerry Cantrell - Anger Rising/Solitude?

tj
04-06-2006, 12:28 AM
guys.. as much feedback on this one would be much appreciated.. it's just written and i really dont know how i feel about these lyrics. for all i know they could be good... they could be really ****. your opinion is needed on this one!

it's called sweet sorrow..

Don't you see that through this whole thing I've been growing
But I guess that through time we've over grew
all these months and i still don't know where we are going,
i really don't wanna burn this photograph of you.

but you're still dancing to this groove darling,
and my pride is so hard to swallow
goodbye...'Parting Is Such Sweet Sorrow'

I've never written a thing that I didn't want you to see,
I've never written a thing, maybe, that chapter just isn't in me.

you said you'd love me, if i could tie you down,
but there wasn't a rope strong enough,
you still laugh at all my childish jokes,
after i'd had a few powers and cokes...

but you're still dancing to this groove darling,
and my pride is so hard to swallow
goodbye...'Parting Is Such Sweet Sorrow'

I've never written a thing that I didn't want you to see,
I've never written a thing, maybe, that chapter just isn't in me.

Lazy Life
04-07-2006, 12:52 PM
I wrote a new song last night entitled "Flowers Do Flow In Your Hair":

Click here to listen (http://media.putfile.com/Flowers-Do-Flow-In-Your-Hair)

I've got this picture of you
My God, you're beautiful
I can see your smile there
Flowers do flow in your hair
I remember the days we had
But now it's left me all sad
That it's all over now
Who we followed has taken his bow

Oh, all the flowers in a chain
Oh, all the flowers they don't change
Still clinging on, still clinging on
We're headed home and it's all gone

These wings can fly us back
But it's left behind my heart
Like paintings holding on to death
Oh, I'm not quite too prepared
For what you landed on me
Could make a blind man see
But you probably don't give a damn
But I want you to understand

Oh, all the flowers in a chain
Oh, all the flowers they don't change
Still clinging on, still clinging on
We're headed home and it's all gone

I sing this song for you because I care
Because I want to show you I'm not who you think I am
I can be serious when I want to be
As often as the rain does fall in our hometown

Oh, all the flowers in a chain
Oh, all the flowers they don't change
Still clinging on, still clinging on
We're headed home and it's all gone

I've got this picture of you
My God, you're beautiful



Feedback'd be appreciated. :)

corkboyinexile
04-07-2006, 07:40 PM
I wrote this song two weeks ago. The story behind it is when you have one of those lucid dreams, where you are just between sleep and wake and you fully aware that you are dreaming but everything seams so real it seems too good until something happens that completely brings you back to reality.
The name comes from a quote of the old man and the sea by ernest hemmingway, when he is struggling with the fish and he finally sees him and he comments on its sheer beauty.

I play this song to a slow strummed G variation.

A Glimpse of Vision

Last night I had this lucid dream,
With just this girl I love, and I.
Something happened halfway through,
And when I woke all I could do was cry.

We went swimming on a summers eve,
Just before the sun had set.
We laughed and played in the clear blue water,
Her face was glistening and her hair was wet.

Then something happened happened I can't explain,
I looked but she was nowhere to be found.
In desperation I swam for hours and hours,
But inside I knew my girl, my love had drowned.

Last night a girl died in my dreams,
It felt so real that I could touch her.
I held out my hand, but she was gone,
And now it hurts because I miss her.

When I awoke, fear ran right through my body,
I woke shaking in a cold sweat.
I lost her in life and now too in my dreams,
So I shed a few tears of regret.

I sat up alone in my bed,
And wiped those tears from face.
I must have sat there for over an hour,
Just staring at an empty space.......where she used to lie.

Last night a girl died in my dreams,
It felt so real that I could touch her.
I held out my hand, but she was gone,
And now it hurts because I love her.

Last night a girl died in my dreams,
It felt so real that I could touch her.
I held out my hand, but she was gone,
And now it hurts because I still love her.
You know I do.

natethegreat86
04-08-2006, 01:11 AM
First i'd like to say to you, mr. penguin boy, that you sir are a genius!!! beat me is just simply amazing and makes me tingle like a little school boy on the first day of summer. ... :smiley5: anywho i'm new here so be nice! heres a song i wrote last night at about 2 in the morning......i've had this sweet guitar piece for the longest time but never could come up with any vocals for it, but for some reason i could last night......may sound cheesy but what the hey, i like it....
called my little grey box (or is it gray? i never did know how to spell that)

(Insert sweet guitar here)
I live in a little grey box,
with a little grey door,
and little grey locks.
I built it to be grand,
with these little grey hands,
you may call it ugly, but at least it stands.

and i try to live my life,
like a sailorless ship
a husbandless wife.
and the more i roam,
the more im alone,
holding this emptiness and calling it home.

CHORUS
so hold me here
locked away
but keep me around
for a lonely day
no i dont mind
yea i'll be fine
i'm just gonna need
a little more time

(insert even cooler guitar)

and i cry to fall asleep
but if thats what i want
then it's mine to keep
dont hold me now
cuz ill turn around
and run to my little grey box in the ground

CHORUS
CHORUS
then the first verse again really slow and quiet........its neat lol


just hope i can remember the words as im hoping to play it at the little gig thing in a couple days

samuelle
04-08-2006, 02:30 AM
a small plethora of feedback:

heyho, i'm doing a simmilar thing at the moment, but i'm contemplating just leaving the song snippety and making the music cut up at the right points, could be extra swish.
you'll have to let me know how that works out...maybe it could be a musical suite or something.

after i'd had a few powers and cokes...
this line stuck out to me as being kind of awkward - the rest of your images are literary and powerful, and so this one disrupted the tone for me. the rest is lovely, though.:smiley1:

and i try to live my life,
like a sailorless ship
a husbandless wife.
are you saying that a wife needs to be steered, so to speak, by a husband? :smiley3:

natethegreat86
04-08-2006, 04:12 AM
haha no, im not saying that at all...the songs a story about a guy that feels his only means of happiness is himself and nothing on the earth is strong enough to satisfy his need. a wife without a husband isn't a wife at all...thats a widow, but a husbandless wife simply means she's married to something else.......hmmmmmm thats a thinker :smiley17:

Fool
04-08-2006, 11:15 AM
A couple of songs I've written and recorded recently (goto www.myspace.com/benbroommusic (http://www.myspace.com/benbroommusic) to listen) Opinions on the lyrics or on the songs as a whole would be muchly appreciated.

Don't tell me I can't cry

Once again I'm just not me
Please tell me who this me might be
And I'm not here inside my head
what you see of me is dead

But I'm a man
So don't tell me that I can't cry
I'm a man
So don't me that I can't cry

I'm seeing circular straight lines
With all of the problems laying behind
I feel I'm standing two foot tall
and my brain is bouncing off these walls

I'm falling apart now
So don't tell me that I can't cry
I'm falling apart now
So don't tell me that I can't cry

All wrapped up inside my sheets
Dunno why I can't just sleep
Too much running through my mind
Too much in front of me to climb

And now I've lost it
so don't tell me that I can't cry
I've F***ing lost it
Now I just wanna die

And I'm not blaming this on you
I just don't know what to do
Tell me which way I should turn
Before I self destruct and burn

Once again I'm just not me
Please tell me who this me might be
And I'm not here inside my head
what you see of me is dead
_______________________________________

This Life

I've been running round
and up and down
but still ain't found
quite what I'm looking for

And these good people cry
and I don't lie
and I can't hide
someday you'll find me

F***ing up somewhere
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not tough enough

I've been living
all of these things
these f***ed up scenes
laying in my mind

And I will be
your perfect ear
'cos I'm not here
So you can listen to yourself

What a lovely voice
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not tough enough

Some might say
that you are perfect
but you're not worth it
I'm not even gonna waste my breath

And I speak
my mind in full
whilst you speak bull
now I'm just not listening

to all this sh*t
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not tough enough

For you
For you
For you
ooooooh

But I will be
your perfect ear
'cos I'm not here
So you can listen to yourself

What a lovely voice
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not tough enough
But this life is just too rough
and I'm just not rough enough.
________________________________________

Both pretty depressing songs. I tend to write more when I'm fed up, late at night after several drinks. Opinions please :smiley31:

p.s On the off chance anybody likes them and wants to hear them in their original quality, which they aren't on myspace, then just let me know!

samuelle
04-09-2006, 03:10 AM
haha no, im not saying that at all...the songs a story about a guy that feels his only means of happiness is himself and nothing on the earth is strong enough to satisfy his need. a wife without a husband isn't a wife at all...thats a widow, but a husbandless wife simply means she's married to something else.......hmmmmmm thats a thinker :smiley17:

aha. i get you now and my mini-uprising has been calmed. the juxtaposition of those two images just really had me thinking...:smiley1:

natethegreat86
04-09-2006, 04:48 AM
haha yea i wish there was a way to make that little stanza more clear. its my favorite couple lines of the whole song because when you get it your like ohhhhhh you know that cool feeling associated with pretty much EVERY damien song......blast him and his perfectness........but anywho it definately needs something in the line or 2 before it to give it that setup it needs but my mind right now is drawing a big blank. but i dont want people to get the wrong impression about it cuz thats one of the worst things that can happen to a musician...

Ilium
04-09-2006, 01:08 PM
Similar to Fool, these are a couple of songs ive recently written and recorded (found at http://www.myspace.com/jamiegiacomelli) Any feedback would be great..
Cheers, Jamie

Let Me Go

Lost in time
Reaching out for you
Seeking more from you
Than you can give

And all the while
Knowing just how far
You’ve flown from me
Distant sound

Make your mark
Floating memory
Melt my soul away
In to the dark

And screaming out
Seems to have no effect
On this shade
I call my heart

In to the dark..


Open up those pretty eyes
Take a breath, look inside
Feel the need, striking deep
Hear the cries, singing sweet

Hum yourself a lullaby
Fear the look, that piercing eye
Thrash out wild, keep control
Strumming heat, let me go
Let me go


In Your Mind

She falls
To catch her unaware
Well fought
Inside, the silver line

See her
Satin Glow
Lie her
Soundless fall

Her doubt
That clouds and poisons
Her truth
Those eyes, whisper mine

See her
Satin Glow
Lie her
Soundless fall (x2)

She looks straight through
And breaks in two
She falls in half
And breaks in two
She takes my hand
And leads me through
This darkened world
The cold that grows

In your mind
In your mind
In your mind
In your mind

tj
04-09-2006, 03:34 PM
thanks for your comment samuelle. the powers and cokes line is a bit of a bollix to fit into the melody... im in the middle of changing it! :D

here's some new lyrics again.. feedback appreciated..


In This April Rain

and as the day made way for night,
all fears disappeared with the sunlight,
i wish i wasn't so simplistic
and i wish you weren't as sadistic,
i wish i wasn't so complicated,
but most of all
i hope it's worth the while we waited.

In this april rain,
I'm calling out your name,
In this april rain,
I'm ready to start this game again.

i'll open the window, let the moonlight shine in,
let it show the beauty of your skin
we could put some brian wilson on,
and remember the days we spent in the sun,
there's no need to run and hide
now its just you and i,
everything else can be cast aside.

In this april rain,
I'm calling out your name,
In this april rain,
I'm ready to start this game again.

Both of us will never forget,
the very first day that we met,
so whats the point in letting go,
when you're the star of my show.

In this april rain,
I'm calling out your name,
In this april rain,
I'm ready to start this game again.

audity
04-09-2006, 06:25 PM
is this a losing-your-virginity song?
sure sounds like one.

i like it, nice chorus.
:smiley32:

tj
04-09-2006, 06:50 PM
cheers..

i suppose you could say it is a losing-your-virginity song... nuff said! ;) but it's really about having a hold on someone for too long... then holding on to that hope that when you're in a room alone with that person that there's a chance that she'll have you back.

Beevers_uk
04-10-2006, 09:45 PM
You know i like your Lyrics Tj, so i think you should just keep them as they are! :D

DOnt know what this is, just laid in the bath and wrote it! Its not a poem, or lyrics just a rambling of thoughts and ****! cause im in that kind of mood lol!!

Ive made you cry, and told you beautiful lies.
Made you wanna die, in a fit of eye fluttering.
Still your breathing hypnotises me, and your breath on me, melts my soul.
Our swear mixed together, in between our opened bodies.
Craving for dryness, and sleep.
Taste of leather on my lip, dying to touch your body.
Before our eternal sleep.
We do this to ourselves, to forget ourselves and feel alive.
Building walls and fences, to purpously break them down and break ourselves down.
Weaving moates surround our walls, and we drowned in the beauty of our moates.

Again dont know what it is, but i just wrote it? :smiley29:

Livo
04-28-2006, 10:18 PM
heartbreaker

be careful what you wish for
cos sometimes it might come true
and when it comes around the bend
it's sure to give you the blues

an underground romance
that's been going on for years
months of love and months of war
measured out in tears

when left is right
and right is wrong
the roles are reversed
but it's the same song

and what is she supposed to do?
when she thinks he's her dream-maker
but then she goes and changes her mind
it's a stone cold
and what is she supposed to do?
when she thinks he's her dream-maker
and then she goes and changes her mind
it's a stone cold heartbreaker

i know it's all my fault
and i feel all beige
they say ignorance is bliss
i hope wisdom comes with age

i speak from experience
so listen to my words
just don't play with fire
you'll end up getting burned

when left is right
and right is wrong
the roles are reversed
but it's the same song

and what is she supposed to do?
when she thinks he's her dream-maker
but then she goes and changes her mind
it's a stone cold
and what is she supposed to do?
when she thinks he's her dream-maker
and then she goes and changes her mind
it's a stone cold heartbreaker

jemarami
04-28-2006, 10:47 PM
This is song I made after a long talk with my best friend were he told me that his father had made sexual assults on him when he was a child... :mad:

Sweet dreams

You reached out to far
with your hands of trust
Innocence was lost
in the name of lust
to face the truth is hard to learn
the faith of a child you have to earn
embrace of deceive burned it's mark
Sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
But your own flesh and blood keep wondering why...

You must have seen
through the shades of your eyes
you must have felt all the pain inside
It must have burned your hands and tongue
and there's no redemption for what you've done
there's no second chance and there's no return
sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
but your own flesh and blood keep wondering why

No matter what cause
it won't come undone
so don't come and claim
like father like son
You walk in this world with blindfolded eyes
a mind of denial, a tongue drenched in lies
and a bitter taste of fake in your mouth
Sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
but your own flesh and blood keep wondering why...

Timeé
04-29-2006, 12:32 AM
This is song I made after a long talk with my best friend were he told me that his father had made sexual assults on him when he was a child... :mad:

Sweet dreams

You reached out to far
with your hands of trust
Innocence was lost
in the name of lust
to face the truth is hard to learn
the faith of a child you have to earn
embrace of deceive burned it's mark
Sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
But your own flesh and blood keep wondering why...

You must have seen
through the shades of your eyes
you must have felt all the pain inside
It must have burned your hands and tongue
and there's no redemption for what you've done
there's no second chance and there's no return
sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
but your own flesh and blood keep wondering why

No matter what cause
it won't come undone
so don't come and claim
like father like son
You walk in this world with blindfolded eyes
a mind of denial, a tongue drenched in lies
and a bitter taste of fake in your mouth
Sweet dreams now Mr, sleep tight tonight
but your own flesh and blood keep wondering why...

i love that! especially those last two lines that are repeated.

Lazy Life
05-01-2006, 12:56 PM
This is a song I wrote yesterday about a car crash in which two young people died. It was their own fault. They were in the same car, the driver was driving too fast and hit another car, this one with two young children and a mother in it. Thankfully they weren't hurt.

Dead flowers for dead people

What did you think
You'd go and do today?
Meet up with a couple of friends
You haven't seen in a while?
And what would happen
On this fateful afternoon
Two cars,
Two deaths

Hours later
Flowers lined the roads
The orange sun
Setting in the distance
The police tape
Guarded your bodies
But cars overturned
Were visible

And you probably don't want to know this...
The flowers by the side of the road
Are for no-one else but you
The fools you are as men

We can't protest
for those already dead
Did you think we could look in those eyes
And bring you back again?
You fools,
You fools
What did you think you were doing?

And you probably don't want to know this...
The flowers by the side of the road
Are for no-one else but you

The fools you are as men

And, if you want, you can listen to the song here (http://media.putfile.com/Dead-flowers-for-dead-people).

Timeé
05-01-2006, 04:18 PM
yeah i wrote something similar to that but i dont think many people want to hear it coz its too depressing. - its called "grave digger" ~ heres a bit.

"and i'd sell your soul, for a couple of dough,
so down you go,
so down you go,
so down you go,this repeats like a crescendo featured in Face "coz i adore you"

i'll get the full thing up soon..

i never remember my songs! ...probably a bad sign. but sure damo is the same

philbo
05-02-2006, 09:10 PM
this is one of my newer pieces...called Diana for the moment, and i may be adding to it yet. it takes its inspiration from Roman Mythology. Diana was a Goddess of hunting, was regularly depicted with a deer, her temple was destroyed when the city it was in was ransacked. slaves worshipped her, and could always get sanctuary in her temple. and then in later years, she became a Moon Goddess.



Diana
Diana stumbled down the stairs
an arrow through her hand
the flames beneath her smouldered
as the armies raged across her land

Blood flowed down her chest
Her robe tattered and torn
Her hair ragged across her face
features weary and worn

The temples burned
The deer they fled
The slaves they wailed
As the moon bled red

The warrior broke through the door
and cupids arrow flew
on the floor in front of him
he found the greatest beauty he ever knew

Now her body lifeless
skin pale and pure
her drained heart broke his
for it could love no more

the temples burned
the deer they fled
there's no hope for love
born from the dead

Juzzza
05-06-2006, 04:45 PM
A new one.

View from the shelf...

Freedom drowns me as it rushes in
intimidation comes with open doors
feels like language has moved on without me
don't understand the game let alone the scores

the shelf seems so high when your looking down
your legs trembling with regret and fear
head swimming with the vertigo of taking the next step
and I can't even see your house from up here

not even my own voice in my head, its yours... move on, move on, move on

looking around at the other faces in the trench
niave and hopeful and wide of eyes
what are we looking for at the end of this fight
an illusion of peace and commitment with ties

not even my own voice in my head, its yours... move on, move on, move on

philbo
05-09-2006, 07:31 PM
my newest one, written in character...

Open Letter to a Friend
"Hey man, howsit going?
tell me how you've been
the whiskeys been flowing
and yeah I'm drunk again

Funny thing just happened
just came from my girls place
You know what she told me.
I see it in your face

You know I've seen it coming
I've felt her slipping away
I kept lying to myself
trying to hide from this day

I guess I should thank you
for treating her so kind
I've seen the change in her
worries lifted from her mind

Well my friend, I thank you
no more burdens on my mind
well my friend, I'd hit you
but the whiskeys left me blind

She's at the doctors now
gotta hope it aint twins
then she's off to the preacher
he'll soon know about your sins

So hey man, howsit going?
no need to tell me how you've been
so she didn't tell you that?
now I see you're not so keen...

but you know what she told me?
you know what she said?
said she loves you, said she needs you,
but I'd rather see you dead...

She loves you?

She needs you?


and I'm letting her go...."

Beevers_uk
05-09-2006, 07:52 PM
Haha!! I really really like that! You can really feel the emotion and pain!! I like it!! :D Kind of reminds me alittle of "Famous Blue Raincoat"

I like it :D

philbo
05-10-2006, 12:14 AM
cheers man. funny thing was i was in a great mood when i wrote it, i just had the character developing over the last few songs. a few of them are all connected/about the same guy...

Juzzza
05-10-2006, 09:29 AM
Monkey Love...



Like a monkey you couldn't let go of one branch
until you had hold of another
all about you, your needs, your esteem
you reached out for some attention

accusing me of disrespecting two and a half years
yet you thought so little of my feelings
I'm questioning who I am and what I have to offer
if I can give so much and still lose

I guess you are right, I don't know you at all, how do I decipher so many lies
but I'm the bad guy, whatever you need to believe at night, I'll give it all to someone new
don't expect me to ever look at you


as angry as I am and the sleep I can't find
I feel sorry for you and whoever's next
come down from the trees and feel earth under foot
because no branch can hold what you bear

break free from your leash and find your own voice
there's no happiness in another's smile
an angel's face often hides a sad truth
trust is no friend of mine for a while

I guess you are right, I don't know you at all, how do I decipher so many lies
but I'm the bad guy, whatever you need to believe at night, I'll give it all to someone new
don't expect me to ever look at you


never forgive yourself? you and me both

Juzzza
05-11-2006, 02:58 PM
Seagull



nothing hurts more than losing someone you love
and we're never more hurtful, than to those we love
and I guess we all do crazy things
and if the level of insanity is linked proportionately
to just how much we care
then maybe you can forgive me this one last time
for being a stubborn, emotional bear

instead of fighting for you and giving you food for thought
like a seagull I flapped around, made a mess, then flew away

I know you are hurting too and you're just as lost as me
I know the future looks so far away and you feel all alone
you were doing so well without me
you'd set your mind and you were moving on
you were strong and knew what to do
then I threw in the mellowdrama, so what's new?
it's just hard imagining me, if it doesn't include you

instead of fighting for you and giving you food for thought
like a seagull I flapped around, made a mess, then flew away

Juzzza
05-17-2006, 03:54 PM
A new one.

View from the shelf...

Freedom drowns me as it rushes in
intimidation comes with open doors
feels like language has moved on without me
don't understand the game let alone the scores

the shelf seems so high when your looking down
your legs trembling with regret and fear
head swimming with the vertigo of taking the next step
and I can't even see your house from up here

not even my own voice in my head, its yours... move on, move on, move on

looking around at the other faces in the trench
niave and hopeful and wide of eyes
what are we looking for at the end of this fight
an illusion of peace and commitment with ties

not even my own voice in my head, its yours... move on, move on, move on


Recorded this on Monday night and it will be up on my profile at MySpace tonight some time...

http://www.myspace.com/justinthorne

Juzzza
05-25-2006, 10:07 AM
Hold on...



You say you're only getting older
babe you can't stop the advent of time
you can't rush this short ride
or you risk missing the chance to fly

I know it feels a little colder
on your own facing the tide
I've faced the fact that it can't be me
who puts that smile on your face

but it won't be long, 'til you're walking in the sun again
no it won't be long, 'til you're walking in the sun again

take your little book of confidence
and show this world your beautiful eyes
a smile like that should never be left
without someone to aim it at

you mean more to me than empty frames
my heart has a long memory
you'll walk your path with someone new
nothing changes 'cept the names

but it won't be long, 'til you're walking in the sun again
no it won't be long, 'til you're walking in the sun again
but it won't be long, 'til you're walking in the sun again
no it won't be long, 'til you're walking in the sun again

hold on, hold on, hold on, hold on

but it won't be long, 'til you're walking in the sun again
no it won't be long, 'til you're walking in the sun again

Juzzza
05-25-2006, 10:12 AM
Very first time

Everything's exciting
when you meet someone new
as you explore me
and I discover you
but there is something that I can not share with you
there is something that I do not dare to...
so I'll hold on to my farts, for another week or two
another week or two

I am having sleepless nights
friends are asking if I'm alright
and I swear that there's nothing wrong
I'm just lying awake, hoping you are asleep
so I can drop these bombs
drop these bombs

so next time that I go outside
to make that call
it's my ass doing the talking
out in your hall
and every squeeking chair
every cough and sneeze
it's probably just me, cutting the cheese
cutting the cheese

I am having sleepless nights
friends are asking if I'm alright
and I swear that there's nothing wrong
I'm just lying awake, hoping you are asleep
so I can drop these bombs
drop these bombs

and I'll never forget
that day in June
was I being presumptuous
was it too soon
when I let one go... it was a good one
and you looked at me
like only you can do... and you dropped one too!
dropped one too

there'll be no more sleepless nights
no more asking if I'm alright
and I swear that there's nothing wrong
no more lying awake, hoping you are asleep
so I can drop these bombs
drop these bombs

carvinC980t_kid
05-30-2006, 06:21 AM
this is a song i wrote about 10mins ago. its just after 1am here and i couldn't sleep, while thinking about my girlfriend. its not really a good song. it actually sucks in my opinion. my girlfriend and i had a rough time for awhile and we were fighting and she broke up with me falling back onto some other guy who really ment nothing to her, but she was just lookin for somewhere to run when times were tough. she completely regrets what she did and i'm glad it happened cause she realized how much she cared about me and now we are in love! its a wonderful feeling. but this is about when it happened and some of my feelings i still feel sometimes... like maybe i'm not good enough. PLEASE GIVE ME FEEDBACK.... EVEN IF YOU HATE IT... TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK!!!!! cheers

I’ve cursed myself
Cursed the ground you’ve walked upon
I’ve shut you out in my mind
Lying to myself
Sayin what makes you happy is better for me
I know that I’m not wrong
But I can help but blame myself
Troubling thoughts float through my mind
Questioning everything we were to be

Is he everything I’m not
Am I’m everything you hate
Am I everything you look for in love
Is that why you keep running away
You’ve begged me not to love you
But only a fool could turn you away
Now, am I a fool for letting you get away

You run, fly, float, glide outta sight
While I trip, slip, fumble, I’m stumbling again
To get these three words off my chest
But I’m stumbling, fumbling, and looking like a fool
The fool I am
Full of regret
The fool you left
Crusing everything he is
Everything I should have been
Is this the love I was told not to fall for
I should have listened when you said to stay away
There is no in between for us
Its’ just love or hate
You pick which it is
While I sit back praying on my knees for what shouldn’t be

My guitars the only thing who knows how I’m feeling
We’re laughing together at your foolish decision
But who’s the fool know as you’re begging at my feet
Asking for forgiveness, while admitting your mistakes
I guess I’m still the fool
In this ****ed up situation
But I’d rather have it this way
Then to spend another night without hearing your voice
You’re my new drug
Stronger then all the others
The only way to get clean is to leave this town

Cause, I’m everything he’s not
I’m everything he’ll never be
I’m everything you want
I’m giving all I have
Tears of joy stream
They overwhelm me
Cause I’m the one you kiss good night
I hope this is worth putting up a fight

These three words seem to have so much more meaning now
I’ve found the greatest high to ever be found
Just don’t forget next time he is around
While you’re holding my fragile heart
On the edge of tearing it apart
The power of love leaves unremovable scars


all types of feedback wanted! its not that great. just reflecting on some old feelings that still keep me up at night. i goto my guitar when i need to talk. not a friend. i prefer to not have any friends, because as you can see from this song. people have played me for a fool and i've played myself. trust is important to me and i've found one person who i can now fully love and trust : )

peace

tj
06-03-2006, 12:24 AM
heya all... this is something i wrote just there... i decided to stick it up for anyone who is interested in giving some critical views...

IN OUR HANDS

You've been talking up an idea,
That's not far from the truth infront of the lies,
You're still living with that grip on the past,
And you still find it hard to let go.

In this city, In this town,
Don't let anyone take you down,
In this city, In this town,
You and I Will Make It Out,
We've got it all in our hands.

You've been forcing changes upon yourself,
Making yourself a better person,
How long is this all going to last?
It can't go on forever, don't you know?

In this city, In this town,
Don't let anyone take you down,
In this city, In this town,
You and I Will Make It Out,
We've got it all in our hands.

You've spat out the bad and drank the good,
You're forcing yourself to look forward, Make eye contact,
Playing it out like you feel you should,
Breaking the rules just to see how they'll all react...

In this city, In this town,
Don't let anyone take you down,
In this city, In this town,
You and I Will Make It Out,
We've got it all in our hands.

You've been forcing changes upon yourself,
Making yourself a better person,
How long is this all going to last?
It can't go on forever, don't you know?

In this city, In this town,
Don't let anyone take you down,
In this city, In this town,
You and I Will Make It Out,
We've got it all in our hands.

Lazy Life
06-03-2006, 08:05 PM
This is a grunge song I wrote. Uses a fair bit of distortion and some loud drums. Think Neil Young around the Ragged Glory era.

Hidden Children

Up on the hill, next to the theatre,
I saw you there
Holding flowers, next to the old man
with the broken guitar
You were singing songs to the new morning
With the old man
Oh how passersbys just spared a glance
They didn't under stand

We are are not stolen children
We are hidden
And you will never find us

Pouring with rain on the mainstreet I walk
All alone
The place is empty, just like it's
plagued with ghosts
Then I heard a scream from around
The theatre area
I ran there and in my heart I was
hoping it was not her

We are not stolen children
We are hidden
And you will never find us
Until today
Until today

When I got there the rain had washed
The blood away
It happned in the morning before
The break of day
The old man was there, looking all
Pale and thing
He looked at me, he looked at you
He didn't say a thing

We are not hidden children
We are dead
And you will never see us again

Lazy Life
06-10-2006, 12:45 PM
Good Morning

I woke up today to find there are no clouds in my sky
And all the birds in my ear singing "Good morning,

Say goodbye to all you've ever known
Say goodbye to all you've ever known
You won't need it"

I got out for a walk and see all the people smiling
I think of all the places where I want to be and realise I am there

I've welcomed in all you've wanted me to
I've welcomed in all you've wanted me to
And it's not helping

Why won't get out of my dreams?
Can I not get some peace?

There was once a time where I'd do anything just for you
I'd write your name in a constellation of the stars

But I think I've had enough
But I think I've had enough
Of you




And a-listen to it here, if you want: www.myspace.com/dominicgray

:D

Juzzza
06-16-2006, 09:29 AM
It's summer somewhere

it's the line-up
it's the water
it's the surf wax in my car

it's the music
it's the people
it's the folks behind the bar

will I find it, will you show me, will I care
we can find it, we can make it, take me there

it's the sun, it's the sun, it's the sun, it's the sun

it's the dancing
it's the lovin'
it's your kisses in the dark

it's the children
they are laughing
amazin' mazes, beach and park

will I find it, will you show me, will I care
we can find it, we can make it, take me there

it's the sun, it's the sun, it's the sun, it's the sun

greg
06-23-2006, 02:10 PM
hi all

this is called VV song :

Last night I sat by your bed
And I watched you sleep
I promised myself I will always keep
In mind that an armour can sometimes break too

Rest your eyes, they must be hurting
From the tears that you have shed
You’re deserving praises, they show disrespect instead
They’re just fools, too lazy or too scared to see through

They’re all busy spreading rumours
Choosing who to ignore or who to blame
I long decided not to notice
Now it’s your turn to try and do the same

Sometimes I feel you think
That everyone but you knows exactly where they’re going
But you should know that we’re all lost
And suffering the cost of forgetting where we’ve been

And at times you must be tempted
To fall for the promise of a settled life
But the values that you treasure
Should never be the ones to sacrifice

Always_Echos
06-26-2006, 08:49 PM
I havent posted on here for ages, but this is something I really couldnt keep to myself.

My Grandfather died a decade ago this year, and I wrote this to mark the time.

For A Day

You’re ageless to me
And although I cant see you
You’d still look as young
As the day that I lost you
And the stars are crying out to the Fates
To bring you back to me…

Tell me, can I have you for a day?

So look those constellations in the eye,
Tell a beautiful girl a beautiful lie
Kiss her hands and lips and say goodbye
Those stars just aren’t for me

I’d walk miles and miles
To meet with Persephone
To beg of her seeds
And regain your company
But like Atlas’s task
The weight of it’s crushing me
And the stars are crying out to the Fates
To bring you back to me…

No, I can’t even have you for a day

So look those constellations in the eye,
Tell a beautiful girl a beautiful lie
Kiss her hands and lips and say goodbye
Those stars just aren’t for me

All comments welcome.

genzoman
06-27-2006, 10:38 PM
something i wrote earlier today:

you guard your mind
like a rose solider
your gates made of iron
though rusted and older
and all out of order
held over your shoulder
like a boat with no water
not starboard but port or
just a garden of wonder where you

bide your time
like a rose soldier
youll bloom when its right
and shine till she knows ya
like a flame in the night
youll push the darkness to bright
and with all of your might you

hold your front line
like a rose soldier
your thoughts marching in time
to crystal clear waters
cross mountains of tortures
and valleys of horrors
and oceans of forlorn
your love still

waits for you
like a rose soldier
glistening with pride
like the ice from the snow
as its talks to the sun
screaming this one's the one
no matter what's done
when summer has come
and like tears we will run
to an ocean of fun
together in time
in spirit and mind
when i hit your front line
the oceans will split
and a path will be lit
and angels will sit
and sing this is it
and the earth will be lighter
and gold will shine brighter
and as drops of wet
will be woth water
our sons and daughters
just like a gardener
careful when older
we will tend our rose soldiers

here
06-29-2006, 01:37 PM
and after all i hear your name so long floating my ink i laid on your back and now you blowing new trace of who like stars your words are falling into me but what was it what did you say then just only echo of your blindness fever came again and walked around me blew i blew did i but to say so said why it is so still clear so bright and the days used to flow beside yours but now i i have to build my tower and my ship will embark afar of my dreams like screeching string and joy you tinted all over my frame like stinking now in wet sun light i do one more time but did i send did i send my love was floating like you touched but who finds a whisper whisper of above if we both were looking so high and now you letting me fall into the river but i sunk into the ocean and i saw your reflection your heart tremble when you sat in me with your thoughts you sat and held my love a distance was illusion for your deftness i was talking to your beside your star your star and your waving trace is still there still laying on the same green and if it is too soon to see but open your window and stretch your line i see i feel and i listen your chosen way my grace beneath my feet no stitches melted in flooding fall of wet like eyes falling back from china burned dreams ooze like immensity of your trace and to die a little bit sad if you leave your dreams behind and...caught my utter if you wrote that word of one's feelings did you feel it though open your eyes for the world did you see merging rivers and a boat floating the ocean i saw your desire to step i saw your dream to find i saw your love for the being flow i saw your strength to wake my heart you taught me to rise and morn faded the dark dark dark faded....2005 autumn

Lazy Life
07-01-2006, 03:41 PM
Unknown Soldier

Fortune lost for the man hiding behind his own eyes
The chaos triggers no calm after the storm
How many years can we live behind these lies?
And in his Mother's thoughts there's none done wrong

The hills roll away, built up by the corpses
Of men stolen from the lives they never knew
And their names shall be written in no stories
Except the ones who no-one knows were slew

Written in the lines as an unknown soldier
Caught in the mines that no-one told us
Called on before you were an unknown soldier
Blacking out now, getting colder

"Fortify the sould" the men back home had said
But are any of those men around you now?
Are they screaming on the wind or maybe even dead?
Or are they back home claiming gallancy somehow?

Your thoughts run back home, now to black
Freewill is backstabbed by the governmental knife
For all your screams and cries you ain't ever going back
Sink into the unkown as just another soldier who lost his life

Called on before you were an unknown soldier
Blacking out now, getting colder
Written in the lines as an unknown soldier
Caught in the mines that no-one told us
Called on before you were an unknown soldier
Blacking out now, getting colder

Written in the lines as an unknown soldier
Caught in the mines that no-one told us

Livo
07-09-2006, 08:02 PM
just wrote this last night but some of it was buzzing around for a few weeks now:

(doesn't have a name yet - any suggestions welcome!)

i live here in silence
with the spiders and their webs
i walk the road barefoot
every night the night of the debs

i see you standing there
i see you standing there
and for you the stars would shine
for you, you look so fine

you see those stars? they shine for you
cos all your stars are black and blue
dreams from a lack of reality and too much time
looks like your dreams are just like mine

i see you standing there
i see you standing there
and for you, the stars would shine
before that, i'd make you mine

i'm dreaming of you now
i'm dreaming of you now
and we're kissing by the river
and we look so good together


kind of needs a lil tweaking still though..

Beevers_uk
07-09-2006, 11:31 PM
i see you standing there
i see you standing there
and for you the stars would shine
for you, you look so fine

you see those stars? they shine for you
cos all your stars are black and blue
dreams from a lack of reality and too much time
looks like your dreams are just like mine


I think its perfect it as it is! I loveeeeeeeee the use of stars, i love it! I love the Chorus too, and that verse the most! Reminds me of Coldplay!

Brilliant Livi!! :D

obody wil probably understand this, i think only i do and a girl i know! Nobody else gets it! but its kind of what happend during one day, then the next morning i didnt wanna forget it, so i wrote it down!

"~Last Night~

Your smell still clings to my pillow,
The smell of flowers through my window.
Hanging on the distant memories of yesterday,
On a cold, wet day in may.
We've played our games,
And someones lost an eye.
Your catching your trains,
And now your the "apple of my eye."
Indecisive questions and answers,
Of where to go, and who to see.
No straight answers,
Just "we'll see" and " Let it be".

Watching M:I,
And hearing Boos childish giggles.
On our backs,
Feeling you wiggles get comfy.
"I cant take my eyes of you"
As i fall and drowned in their beauty.
Kissing you, tasting you, being with you,
I wanna be there again.

Staying up till the small hours,
biting my weakness on its bum.
Awashed in summer showers
The hum of silence, as we stare at each other.
Drawing blood to my skin,
As you kiss my arm.
Testicle elbow skin,
Itching from my Washing powder.
And your cutting my skin,
As you draw on my arm.

Going back to all those memories,
I wish we had years ago.
Finding new lows,
Forgetting how to let go and leave.

A blade over my face,
Cutting my lips.
Gone without a trace,
Only my lips, and double chin here now.

If this was a perfect world,
I would be Noonan and you'd be you.
But this isn't a perfect world,
Because i write "I love you" on receipts.
Instead of saying it to your eyes,
I write it honest, without no lies.
With red ink,
Not with my tongue.
You may think its ****,
But deep down, you know you are wrong.

Going back to all those memories,
I wish we had years ago.
Finding new lows,
Forgetting how to let go and leave."

genzoman
07-12-2006, 03:00 AM
sometime in summer
all these shadows were cast
but there werent a single cloud in the sky
i started wondering
am i just a wonderer
of why the black settled in my eyes
fall followed faithfully
and the light ran away
to vacation somewhere i heard
somewhere down south i think i was told
that maybe is was guiding the birds

and i saw no feathers floating on the wind
i saw no feathers floating on the wind

march it came slow and not a moment to soon
i stepped outside to what had bloomed
all of the sudden its like a switch had turned
it was against everything i had learned
no blooms here, and not a leaf to be heard
all i saw was gray like ashes
the ashes from the nothing that had burned

and i saw no feathers floating on the wind
i saw no feathers floating on the wind

i took down south so i could plead the sun
and to catch a glimpse of spring
because i know it had begun
and maybe hear that all familiar ring
of thousand pretty bluebirds beating their wings

but i saw no feathers floating on the wind
i saw no feathers floating on the wind

i heard the sun sizzle as it set
into an ocean full of pain and regret
and i was hopin
maybe i could rope the moon
and get it to start burnin again
i took aim used the stars as my guide
and threw with all of my might
i lost sight somewhere over the ocean
and heard all the world let out a cry

i turned my eyes to the skies and empty
was the only thing greeted me
i let out a shout from the nearest tree top
dont you know where your supposed to be

but i heard no voices returned on the wind
i saw no feathers floating on the wind.

and that was when i lost faith in the heavens above
and the fires that burned down below
and it was then that i sat down and whispered
my god i think that were all alone

it was a particularly strange thing to write.

Always_Echos
07-14-2006, 11:37 PM
We argued again the other day
Was it our fault that the sun went away?
You shouted at me and I started to pray
That I wouldnt go and drive you away

We made love again the other night
With passion so fierce that it almost burned bright
I clutched at you and you held me tight
Until the first rays of the morning light

I cried again the other day
But it didnt make the pain go away
Only your touch and your lips mouthing 'stay'
Kept me in your arms that day

Its a lil thing I threw together during an arguement with my other half, I know its not as good as it could be, has anyone got any suggestions?

carvinC980t_kid
07-15-2006, 04:57 AM
We argued again the other day
Was it our fault that the sun went away?
You shouted at me and I started to pray
That I wouldnt go and drive you away

We made love again the other night
With passion so fierce that it almost burned bright
I clutched at you and you held me tight
Until the first rays of the morning light

I cried again the other day
But it didnt make the pain go away
Only your touch and your lips mouthing 'stay'
Kept me in your arms that day

Its a lil thing I threw together during an arguement with my other half, I know its not as good as it could be, has anyone got any suggestions?
that is really really good!!! i really like it and can't think of anything i'd change.

brookefield
07-15-2006, 09:46 PM
here's a little diddy i wrote a while back....

don't hold yourself like that
you'll hurt your knees
i kissed your mouth and back
but thats all i need
don't build your world around
volcanoes melt you down

...just kidding. i'm a bit nervous to actually post something of mine...there's ALOT of really amazing stuff already up here...well, here i go....

texas is for the loveless
colorado is for the heart broken
and illinios is for moving on and out

your words are now for the breaking
my body is for the taking
i'm broken and i am making
time out of doubt

and so it is this the way it will always be
i alone fighting these filters to fill my sea

i need some new weather
here in my bed
i need to stop this rain
from drowning my head
i need to let you go
now that your dead
i need to let you..

yesterday's for regretting
tomorrow is for forgetting
and today is for the letting
my knees into harm

roads are paved for the leaving
my city is for the greiving
and she is now for the sleeping
there in your arms

and so it is this the way you will take your leave
burning your bridges oh so afraid of what you can't see

i need some new weather
here in my bed
i need to stop this rain
from drowning my head
i need to let you go
now that your dead
i need to let you...

what we made
has burnt all away
and i'm standing in the ruin

what we made
you gave in away
and i don't know what you're doin
now...
just need to let you go
some how

i need some new weather
here in my bed
i need to stop this rain
from drowning my head
i need to let you go
now that your dead
i need to let you..

texas is for the loveless
colorado is for the heart broken
and illinios is for moving on and out

Always_Echos
07-16-2006, 11:35 AM
here's a little diddy i wrote a while back....

don't hold yourself like that
you'll hurt your knees
i kissed your mouth and back
but thats all i need
don't build your world around
volcanoes melt you down

...just kidding. i'm a bit nervous to actually post something of mine...there's ALOT of really amazing stuff already up here...well, here i go....

texas is for the loveless
colorado is for the heart broken
and illinios is for moving on and out

your words are now for the breaking
my body is for the taking
i'm broken and i am making
time out of doubt

and so it is this the way it will always be
i alone fighting these filters to fill my sea

i need some new weather
here in my bed
i need to stop this rain
from drowning my head
i need to let you go
now that your dead
i need to let you..

yesterday's for regretting
tomorrow is for forgetting
and today is for the letting
my knees into harm

roads are paved for the leaving
my city is for the greiving
and she is now for the sleeping
there in your arms

and so it is this the way you will take your leave
burning your bridges oh so afraid of what you can't see

i need some new weather
here in my bed
i need to stop this rain
from drowning my head
i need to let you go
now that your dead
i need to let you...

what we made
has burnt all away
and i'm standing in the ruin

what we made
you gave in away
and i don't know what you're doin
now...
just need to let you go
some how

i need some new weather
here in my bed
i need to stop this rain
from drowning my head
i need to let you go
now that your dead
i need to let you..

texas is for the loveless
colorado is for the heart broken
and illinios is for moving on and out

No need to be nervous - this is just wonderful. If you've got a tune for it I'd really like to hear it!

And thank you CarvinKid! Noones said anything about my stuff in while, I wont deny its nice for someone to say something nice :smiley4: I think we all need to take some time to really look at other people's work.

tj
07-16-2006, 08:52 PM
here's a little diddy i wrote a while back....

don't hold yourself like that
you'll hurt your knees
i kissed your mouth and back
but thats all i need
don't build your world around
volcanoes melt you down

...just kidding. i'm a bit nervous to actually post something of mine...there's ALOT of really amazing stuff already up here...well, here i go....

texas is for the loveless
colorado is for the heart broken
and illinios is for moving on and out

your words are now for the breaking
my body is for the taking
i'm broken and i am making
time out of doubt

and so it is this the way it will always be
i alone fighting these filters to fill my sea

i need some new weather
here in my bed
i need to stop this rain
from drowning my head
i need to let you go
now that your dead
i need to let you..

yesterday's for regretting
tomorrow is for forgetting
and today is for the letting
my knees into harm

roads are paved for the leaving
my city is for the greiving
and she is now for the sleeping
there in your arms

and so it is this the way you will take your leave
burning your bridges oh so afraid of what you can't see

i need some new weather
here in my bed
i need to stop this rain
from drowning my head
i need to let you go
now that your dead
i need to let you...

what we made
has burnt all away
and i'm standing in the ruin

what we made
you gave in away
and i don't know what you're doin
now...
just need to let you go
some how

i need some new weather
here in my bed
i need to stop this rain
from drowning my head
i need to let you go
now that your dead
i need to let you..

texas is for the loveless
colorado is for the heart broken
and illinios is for moving on and out

seriously mate. no need to be nervous. those are fantastic. more of the same please. what's it called?

tj
07-16-2006, 08:56 PM
As I've said before I'm never really sure of my stuff before taking it to my band. This especially as it's only a few hours old.

As always feedback appreciated but hard to find. Hehe.. It's called 'Light for your dark soul'

How far can this river run?
How close can you fly to the sun?
You are fire putting out the flame,
You're the flooded town welcoming rain.

You know if I could,
I'd turn the tables round,
If it'd stop you from falling down,
I'd lift you out of this black hole,
If it'd bring you light for your dark soul.

You're the addict who loves the fame,
The instant celeb who can live with the shame,
Can you resist from shooting the gun?
Cause in the end who will be left to kill the guilty one?

You know if I could,
I'd turn the tables round,
If it'd stop you from falling down,
I'd lift you out of this black hole,
If it'd bring you light for your dark soul.

You say this city moves too fast,
It doesn't give you a chance to feel the past,
But if you were naked in '68,
You'd tell me you don't have the patience to wait.

You know if I could,
I'd turn the tables round,
If it'd stop you from falling down,
I'd lift you out of this black hole,
If it'd bring you light for your dark soul.

brookefield
07-17-2006, 01:09 AM
thank you ladies and gentlemen...your stuff is really lovely as well. its such creative poetry...not the same old "roses are red" crap. its inventive. good show.

miss always echos, i would love to share my music with you....all of my stuff has music before it ever has lyrics, however, i am rather computer-challenged and am limited to making good old fashioned casette tapes...

PhoenixDeviance
07-17-2006, 05:40 AM
You swear you’re thinking straight
Though the hour’s getting late
The dandy candy tempted
But the quicker liquor won

Now the allure of his touch
May have seemed a bit too much
But curse your stupid charm
You couldn’t help but lead him on

Hoping to God
That the pieces don’t shatter
But then again God’s never been in love

Searching for your honesty
Wading through the tears
Empty promises replaced with empty lies

Please listen closely as I plea for my life
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

I’m so damn pathetic, to myself I even lie
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

I’ve abandoned all the hope
Going back on all I wanted
No excuses, no questions; my love

Counting away my ceiling tiles
Living in denial
Our future destroyed by a drunken daze

Please listen closely as I plea for my life
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

I’m so damn pathetic, to myself I even lie
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

The innocence has vanished
The chastity is gone
Please forgive my blunt surrender to the truth

That the faith I once exalted
Left not a note
But another chip away at my soul

Please listen closely as I plea for my life
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

I’m so damn pathetic, to myself I even lie
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

Juzzza
07-17-2006, 05:46 PM
Event Horizon

You said you want a 'sit down'
said you want the lowdown
wanna talk face to face
I can't think of anything worse than you
putting me in my place
why are you so in love, so in love with me
I'm just a 2bit loser who always keeps his heart
safely under lock and key

sooner or later there's a warning sign
sooner or later you'll change your mind
but I want to know why
I want to know why
you persevere, you're still here
what do you see in me

you said you had an inkling
said you had a feeling
wanna know how I feel
I can't think of anything worst than that
articulating how I feel
why are you so in love, so in love with me
I'm just a 2bit loser who always keeps his heart
safely under lock and key

sooner or later there's a warning sign
sooner or later you'll change your mind
but I want to know why
I want to know why
you persevere, you're still here
what do you see in me

self-fulfilling prophecy, event horizon time for me

self-fulfilling prophecy, event horizon time for me

Juzzza
07-17-2006, 05:55 PM
You swear you’re thinking straight
Though the hour’s getting late
The dandy candy tempted
But the quicker liquor won

Now the allure of his touch
May have seemed a bit too much
But curse your stupid charm
You couldn’t help but lead him on

Hoping to God
That the pieces don’t shatter
But then again God’s never been in love

Searching for your honesty
Wading through the tears
Empty promises replaced with empty lies

Please listen closely as I plea for my life
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

I’m so damn pathetic, to myself I even lie
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

I’ve abandoned all the hope
Going back on all I wanted
No excuses, no questions; my love

Counting away my ceiling tiles
Living in denial
Our future destroyed by a drunken daze

Please listen closely as I plea for my life
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

I’m so damn pathetic, to myself I even lie
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

The innocence has vanished
The chastity is gone
Please forgive my blunt surrender to the truth

That the faith I once exalted
Left not a note
But another chip away at my soul

Please listen closely as I plea for my life
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

I’m so damn pathetic, to myself I even lie
I swear we’ll make it through this
I swear we’ll make it through this

Brilliant...

PhoenixDeviance
07-18-2006, 06:48 PM
Wow, didnt think I would get a reply. Thank you!

Juzzza, your song (especially the verses) has quite a Damien tone to it in my opinion. But as to where Damo may have more of a classical feel, an old fashioned poetry sort of form but still being cold and dark, yours is a bit modern, but as I said, has a Damien feel to it. I will say to you as you did me; Brilliant.

brookefield
07-20-2006, 12:35 AM
this song isn't exactly traditional in its lyrical organization...that is to say, the verses, chorus, and bridge are indentified strictly by the music...by what i play on piano. i was never really going to put words to this in the first place, but then i was playing one day and just started singing this...

be nicely

he bees nicely to me
as bees tend to be
breaking my heart with his honey tongue.

he says capture the flag
i say light me a fag
breathe for me baby, clean up my lungs

i'll give to your fall
giving nothing at all
drip slow the smile from your mouth to mine.

your touching me slow
your cheeks and your glow
i turn on the lights to lessen your shine.

wipe blood from my nose
wash stains from my clothes
fix me arachnid with spindles and thread

the days smell our fear
its drunk and its clear
i will be gone before you're out of bed

i write songs for you
cherry flavoured and blue
i'm singing now i'm singing now i'm singing for him.

don't love me like that
play the frets of my back
kiss the teller on the mouth, kiss the son for his sin.

your eyes

your eyes

(make mine look so small.)

your eyes

your eyes.

(make no sense at all.)

your eyes.

your. eyes.

.your.eyes.


at the end i never really say the same thing, i just switch out "make no sense at all" with phrases that rhyme...such as: are breaking my walls, have no place to fall, etc...

i can't decide on one i like best...

Always_Echos
07-20-2006, 07:37 PM
Fantastic, really really beautiful. When do I get my tape???

PenguinBoy
07-21-2006, 12:47 AM
i really love it! i think you should never decide how to end it. there's no reason for it to be set in stone, except tradition. and that's just habit after all.

audity
07-25-2006, 04:31 AM
:oops: