9 Crimes

LaurenM · 02-18-2007, 02:09 AM

I'm pretty much the hypocrite of all time, because I really hate covers, they tend to ruin songs for me, but at least I own up to being a hypocrite

http://vids.myspace.com/index.cfm?fu...oid=1968759846

Ships_Were_Sailin · 02-18-2007, 10:09 AM

okay its working again now :P.

few things, your voice is too low, its hard to hear it over the piano, and its a shame because we know your voice works :P, and also i think your hitting a wrong note on the piano, at the end of the 4th bar, its not a big deal because its still in key, but its just something i noticed

but its the voice thing thats the main problem, its hard to hear it

Dean C · 02-18-2007, 01:15 PM

There's a few things I picked up on. The first being that 9 crimes is split up into 4 component chords. Am, F, C and then G. You have the final 2 notes on the transition from G back to Am incorrect (but that's just the pedantic musician in me speaking). The second thing is that you are playing far too quickly. You need to calm things down and don't rush, and you will be able to hold your notes a bit easier as you went off key a few times.

As i've said before on your covers you really do have a beatiful smoky tone to your voice, you just need to practice on controlling it

Keep up the good work!

Closing_Doors · 02-18-2007, 01:49 PM

^^ It's Am/F/C/G not Am/Fm/C/G

Dean C · 02-18-2007, 03:34 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Closing_Doors

^^ It's Am/F/C/G not Am/Fm/C/G

Typo.

LaurenM · 02-18-2007, 03:59 PM

I didn't realize how fast I was playing until you guys said something, and when I went back to see, I really was going ridiculously fast! I'm going to try to redo it a little later, just the audio, and try the new notes you all explained! thanks, i reallly appreciate the feedback

ohh and my piano is incredibly out of tune, if that explains anything. I was going to use my keyboard but the sound is just prettier on a piano no matter what haha

02-18-2007, 02:09 AM	#1
LaurenM Eskimo Regular Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 709	9 Crimes I'm pretty much the hypocrite of all time, because I really hate covers, they tend to ruin songs for me, but at least I own up to being a hypocrite http://vids.myspace.com/index.cfm?fu...oid=1968759846 __________________ ...come and play http://thatgirlwiththefreckles.blogspot.com/

02-18-2007, 10:09 AM	#2
Ships_Were_Sailin Eskimo Regular Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: UK - The part that has no music scene what so ever Posts: 1,094	okay its working again now :P. few things, your voice is too low, its hard to hear it over the piano, and its a shame because we know your voice works :P, and also i think your hitting a wrong note on the piano, at the end of the 4th bar, its not a big deal because its still in key, but its just something i noticed but its the voice thing thats the main problem, its hard to hear it __________________ *Its been years since ive heard from my transistor radio* Yet i keep going to where it seems i'm meant to go Last edited by Ships_Were_Sailin; 02-18-2007 at 10:21 AM.

02-18-2007, 01:15 PM	#3
Dean C Eskimo Regular Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Finland Posts: 1,058	There's a few things I picked up on. The first being that 9 crimes is split up into 4 component chords. Am, F, C and then G. You have the final 2 notes on the transition from G back to Am incorrect (but that's just the pedantic musician in me speaking). The second thing is that you are playing far too quickly. You need to calm things down and don't rush, and you will be able to hold your notes a bit easier as you went off key a few times. As i've said before on your covers you really do have a beatiful smoky tone to your voice, you just need to practice on controlling it Keep up the good work! Last edited by Dean C; 02-18-2007 at 03:34 PM.

02-18-2007, 01:49 PM	#4
Closing_Doors Hysterical & Useless Join Date: Mar 2005 Posts: 1,329	^^ It's Am/F/C/G not Am/Fm/C/G __________________ Come clean, come good, repeat with me the punch line 'Just like blood' when those at the back rush forward to say how a little love goes a long long long way. -- Simon Armitage

02-18-2007, 03:59 PM	#6
LaurenM Eskimo Regular Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 709	I didn't realize how fast I was playing until you guys said something, and when I went back to see, I really was going ridiculously fast! I'm going to try to redo it a little later, just the audio, and try the new notes you all explained! thanks, i reallly appreciate the feedback ohh and my piano is incredibly out of tune, if that explains anything. I was going to use my keyboard but the sound is just prettier on a piano no matter what haha __________________ ...come and play http://thatgirlwiththefreckles.blogspot.com/ Last edited by LaurenBledsoe; 02-18-2007 at 04:07 PM.